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Message de capucine1 posté le 01-05-2017 à 14:52:16 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je passe mon EO de Bac d'anglais dans quelques jours, je trouve que ma notion "idea of progress" est un peu bancale... Si vous pouvez me donner quelques conseils et corrections j'en serais ravie !
Je vous remercie par avance de votre aide.
In 1949, George Orwell published his book 1984 with his famous Big Brother which is the figure of the totalitarian State and the extreme liberties control or private life control. Big Brother’s motto is "Big Brother’s watching you" that remind us the omnipresence and that can be compared to the new technologies which aims at surveilling people nowadays. But is surveillance a real progress for our society? We will therefore try to understand how new technologies aim at monitoring us and thus show the pros and the cons of the technological progress.
At the beginning of the 2010, Snowden, which is a whistle-blower, used to work for the NSA where he saw a lot of spying. So for that, he blamed the government for not openly revealing they were not respecting citizens’ right to privacy and he also decided to reveal that the NSA is a threat to mankind. And nowadays, thanks to the whistle-blowers we now know that everything we will do, it will be monitored. Whether it is our researches on the Internet, our emails, text messages, phone calls, or even what and where we eat, shop... Everything will be stock somewhere. In fact, the government feels free to pick up all this information through our loyalty cards or our bank's transactions, browsers, localization with GPS, and so on...
As far as I’m concerned, being monitored must be a good thing. Indeed, especially during terrorist attacks, having secret information may be necessary. In ancient time, by which I mean a decade ago, computers would sort through random samples of data or try to create an algorithm to search for a criminal. But today, data is so readily available and computers are so fast and powerful that experts can analyze entire data sets. And as a result, they have stopped trying to figure out why something, say crime, happens. Instead they look at crimes and notice what events or behaviors seem to precede them. In other words, the tricky work of turning information into knowledge has shifted from causation to correlation. Yet, if the computers can make predictions based on data analysis, should we prevent bad actions by arresting people before they act?
Because, using secret information insofar as avoiding an attack is one thing, but filming us when we are in school and at the office or using our data so as to know where we eat and shop is another thing. CCTV cameras are emerging everywhere lately, and we can wonder why there is so much surveillance in schools when the evidence says it does basically nothing to improve the safety of pupils. This year, our Welsh’s assistant told us that, from over 2000 schools across Wales, 100.000 CCTV cameras are operational and over 200 schools have even cameras in toilets and changing areas! There is a research to show that United-Kingdom is one of the most surveilled countries on Earth. Yet, CCTV cameras in hot spots, well that’s one thing, but to have CCTV in areas where children expect privacy, well that’s another matter entirely. Anyway, the widespread introduction of CCTV over the past 20 years has so far failed to reduce crime, tackle anti-social behavior or improve public safety. With the revelation that even school toilets and changing rooms are no longer consider private spaces, the debate of the limits is bound to be re-ignited.
To conclude, we were wondering if surveillance is a real progress for our society. And actually progress can be something very positive, which improves the safety of humans while reducing the number of attacks. However, it can be dangerous if it is misused. We could have also extended the subject to the places of new technologies in our daily lives, and more precisely how, during the presidential elections, new technologies are used?
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-05-2017 16:10
Message de capucine1 posté le 01-05-2017 à 14:52:16 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je passe mon EO de Bac d'anglais dans quelques jours, je trouve que ma notion "idea of progress" est un peu bancale... Si vous pouvez me donner quelques conseils et corrections j'en serais ravie !
Je vous remercie par avance de votre aide.
In 1949, George Orwell published his book 1984 with his famous Big Brother which is the figure of the totalitarian State and the extreme liberties control or private life control. Big Brother’s motto is "Big Brother’s watching you" that remind us the omnipresence and that can be compared to the new technologies which aims at surveilling people nowadays. But is surveillance a real progress for our society? We will therefore try to understand how new technologies aim at monitoring us and thus show the pros and the cons of the technological progress.
At the beginning of the 2010, Snowden, which is a whistle-blower, used to work for the NSA where he saw a lot of spying. So for that, he blamed the government for not openly revealing they were not respecting citizens’ right to privacy and he also decided to reveal that the NSA is a threat to mankind. And nowadays, thanks to the whistle-blowers we now know that everything we will do, it will be monitored. Whether it is our researches on the Internet, our emails, text messages, phone calls, or even what and where we eat, shop... Everything will be stock somewhere. In fact, the government feels free to pick up all this information through our loyalty cards or our bank's transactions, browsers, localization with GPS, and so on...
As far as I’m concerned, being monitored must be a good thing. Indeed, especially during terrorist attacks, having secret information may be necessary. In ancient time, by which I mean a decade ago, computers would sort through random samples of data or try to create an algorithm to search for a criminal. But today, data is so readily available and computers are so fast and powerful that experts can analyze entire data sets. And as a result, they have stopped trying to figure out why something, say crime, happens. Instead they look at crimes and notice what events or behaviors seem to precede them. In other words, the tricky work of turning information into knowledge has shifted from causation to correlation. Yet, if the computers can make predictions based on data analysis, should we prevent bad actions by arresting people before they act?
Because, using secret information insofar as avoiding an attack is one thing, but filming us when we are in school and at the office or using our data so as to know where we eat and shop is another thing. CCTV cameras are emerging everywhere lately, and we can wonder why there is so much surveillance in schools when the evidence says it does basically nothing to improve the safety of pupils. This year, our Welsh’s assistant told us that, from over 2000 schools across Wales, 100.000 CCTV cameras are operational and over 200 schools have even cameras in toilets and changing areas! There is a research to show that United-Kingdom is one of the most surveilled countries on Earth. Yet, CCTV cameras in hot spots, well that’s one thing, but to have CCTV in areas where children expect privacy, well that’s another matter entirely. Anyway, the widespread introduction of CCTV over the past 20 years has so far failed to reduce crime, tackle anti-social behavior or improve public safety. With the revelation that even school toilets and changing rooms are no longer consider private spaces, the debate of the limits is bound to be re-ignited.
To conclude, we were wondering if surveillance is a real progress for our society. And actually progress can be something very positive, which improves the safety of humans while reducing the number of attacks. However, it can be dangerous if it is misused. We could have also extended the subject to the places of new technologies in our daily lives, and more precisely how, during the presidential elections, new technologies are used?
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-05-2017 16:10
Réponse : Bac/Idea of progress de laure95, postée le 01-05-2017 à 15:40:24 (S | E)
Bonjour,
présentation de la notion?
Définition du mot "progress"?
- and the extreme liberties control or private life control: construire avec of
- that remind (singulier) us (of) the omnipresence (of what?)and that can be compared to the new technologies which aims (faute de conjugaison)at surveilling people nowadays.
- At the beginning of the (pas de of the) 2010,
- So for that, he blamed the government for not openly revealing they were (it was) not respecting citizens’ right
- to privacy and he also decided to reveal that the NSA is (passé)a threat to mankind.
- everything we will do, it (enlever it)will be monitored.
- Whether it is our researches on the (pas de the)Internet,
- Everything will be stock (participe passé)somewhere.
- In ancient time, by which (enlever by which)I mean a decade ago,
- But today, data is (pluriel)so readily available
- why something, say crime, happens:?
- causation
- Yet, if the (pas de the)computers can make predictions
- when the (pas de the)evidence says (des personnes disent, pas des preuves)
- There is a research to show: traduire: une recherche a montré que
- Yet, CCTV cameras in hot spots: ?
- Anyway, the widespread introduction of CCTV over the past 20 years has so far failed to reduce crime(s)
- With the revelation that even school toilets and changing rooms are no longer consider (participe passé) private spaces,
Pas assez de référence à des documents étudiés en classe.
- To conclude, we were wondering if surveillance is (passé)a real progress for our society.
- We could have also extended the subject to the places of new technologies in our daily lives, and more precisely how, during the presidential elections, new technologies are used? (enlever le point d'interrogation
Réponse : Bac/Idea of progress de capucine1, postée le 01-05-2017 à 19:50:48 (S | E)
Bonsoir, merci d'avoir corrigé ma notion @laure95. Je l'ai reprise (voir ci-dessous), cependant j'ai utilisé tous les documents à ma disposition... Le premier paragraphe = "Whistle-Blowers in Limbo, Neither Hero Nor Traitor" - David CARR, le deuxième = "Big Data, Meet Big Brother" - Time Magazine, et le dernier = "Widespread use of surveillance cameras in UK schools raises concerns" - vidéo sur youtube. Faut-il que je cite le nom des artciles/vidéos que j'utilise? Et si oui comment le faire sans que cela paraisse "lourd" à l'oral?
In 1949, George Orwell published his book 1984 with his famous Big Brother which is the figure of the totalitarian State and the extreme control of the liberties or of the private life. Big Brother’s motto is "Big Brother’s watching you" that reminds us of the omnipresence
In 2010, Snowden, which is a whistle-blower, used to work for the NSA where he saw a lot of spying. So for that, he blamed the government for not openly revealing it was not respecting citizens’ right to privacy and he also decided to reveal that the NSA was a threat to mankind. And nowadays, thanks to the whistle-blowers we now know that everything we will do, will be monitored. Whether it is our researches on Internet, our emails, text messages, phone calls, or even what and where we eat, shop... Everything will be stocked somewhere. In fact, the government feels free to pick up all this information through our loyalty cards or our bank's transactions, browsers, localization with GPS, and so on...
As far as I’m concerned, being monitored must be a good thing. Indeed, especially during terrorist attacks, having secret information may be necessary. In ancient time,
to correlation. Yet, if Because, using secret information insofar as avoiding an attack is one thing, but filming us when we are in school and at the office or using our data so as to know where we eat and shop is another thing. CCTV cameras are emerging everywhere lately, and we can wonder why there is so much surveillance in schools when
To conclude, we were wondering if surveillance was a real progress for our society. And actually progress can be something very positive, which improves the safety of humans while reducing the number of attacks. However, it can be dangerous if it is misused. We could have also extended the subject to the places of new technologies in our daily lives, and more precisely how, during the presidential elections, new technologies are used.
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