Notion/The idea of progress
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Message de noixdecoco17 posté le 24-04-2017 à 16:24:29 (S | E | F)
Bonjour
je passe mon oral de Bac dans 1 semaine et j'aimerais avoir des avis sur ma notion Idea of progress et pouvoir corriger mes fautes éventuelles.
Merci d'avance !
The Idea of Progress
I’m going to talk about the notion of Idea of Progress.
First of all, I’m going to give a definition about this notion.
This notion can be defined as an improvement , a development or a change technical, scientific or social advance which contributes to making the world a better place .
We are going to base ourselves especially in the technological progress.
So, to illustrate that notion, I’ll talk about telecommuting. Telecommuting is a modern trend which consists on working from home or from others places except workplaces, with computers and internet.
Working from home is it the end of productivity or the future of work?
In the first part, we are going to see the positives points of telecommuting and in a second part the negatives points.
The telecommuting is a new trend and more and more companies use this concept like Laura Schoppe’s company.
Founded in 2001 by Laura Shoppe, this virtual company which commercialized new technology is today a multi-million dollar company. Note that all forty employers of Fuentek are required to telecommute. When journalist interviewed Laura Shoppe, she declared that telecommute was the better choice for her and her colleagues because they are very productive and Laura gets loyalty too. This company is home-based, but it shows that we can excel without working in an office, and that telecommuting idea is a very serious way to work. So telecommuting, permits employees to be more productive, more loyal and more willing to do the job.
It also allows for an employee,to organize his schedule as he likes , to reduce travel costs. Indeed, working in an office is quiet difficult as explain Jason Fried in the document “I got nothing done today”. Jason Fied said the employees are all the time disturbed by phone calls, colleagues, meetings. They don’t progress in their job and so they are less productive. For him, the best solution is to work at home for job like engineers, designers.
The telecommuting has advantages but there are also disadvantages.The telecommuting’s concept to expand in many companies. Despite the increasing trend in telecommuting, there are still some people reluctant to do it. Working at home, the employee don’t have relations with his colleagues, his home to become his working place. It must to organize his day between work and family’s life. The employee can to work the night and to have the feeling of working all the time, there is not break.
Telecommuting presents advantages and negatives points, but I think that this new work system will permits to increase the productivity of employees because they will to work at his own pace and to organize his schedule. The employees are more motivated to do his job. Telecommuting encourages, stimulates people to work more.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 24-04-2017 22:21
Message de noixdecoco17 posté le 24-04-2017 à 16:24:29 (S | E | F)
Bonjour
je passe mon oral de Bac dans 1 semaine et j'aimerais avoir des avis sur ma notion Idea of progress et pouvoir corriger mes fautes éventuelles.
Merci d'avance !
The Idea of Progress
I’m going to talk about the notion of Idea of Progress.
First of all, I’m going to give a definition about this notion.
This notion can be defined as an improvement , a development or a change technical, scientific or social advance which contributes to making the world a better place .
We are going to base ourselves especially in the technological progress.
So, to illustrate that notion, I’ll talk about telecommuting. Telecommuting is a modern trend which consists on working from home or from others places except workplaces, with computers and internet.
Working from home is it the end of productivity or the future of work?
In the first part, we are going to see the positives points of telecommuting and in a second part the negatives points.
The telecommuting is a new trend and more and more companies use this concept like Laura Schoppe’s company.
Founded in 2001 by Laura Shoppe, this virtual company which commercialized new technology is today a multi-million dollar company. Note that all forty employers of Fuentek are required to telecommute. When journalist interviewed Laura Shoppe, she declared that telecommute was the better choice for her and her colleagues because they are very productive and Laura gets loyalty too. This company is home-based, but it shows that we can excel without working in an office, and that telecommuting idea is a very serious way to work. So telecommuting, permits employees to be more productive, more loyal and more willing to do the job.
It also allows for an employee,to organize his schedule as he likes , to reduce travel costs. Indeed, working in an office is quiet difficult as explain Jason Fried in the document “I got nothing done today”. Jason Fied said the employees are all the time disturbed by phone calls, colleagues, meetings. They don’t progress in their job and so they are less productive. For him, the best solution is to work at home for job like engineers, designers.
The telecommuting has advantages but there are also disadvantages.The telecommuting’s concept to expand in many companies. Despite the increasing trend in telecommuting, there are still some people reluctant to do it. Working at home, the employee don’t have relations with his colleagues, his home to become his working place. It must to organize his day between work and family’s life. The employee can to work the night and to have the feeling of working all the time, there is not break.
Telecommuting presents advantages and negatives points, but I think that this new work system will permits to increase the productivity of employees because they will to work at his own pace and to organize his schedule. The employees are more motivated to do his job. Telecommuting encourages, stimulates people to work more.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 24-04-2017 22:21
Réponse : Notion/The idea of progress de laure95, postée le 24-04-2017 à 17:07:11 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
- We are going to base ourselves especially in (pas la bonne préposition)the (pas de the) technological progress.
- Telecommuting is a modern trend which consists on (pas la bonne préposition)working from home or from others (pas de s)places
- Working from home is it the end of productivity or the future of work?: revoir construction d'une question.
- the positives (pas de s)points of telecommuting and in a second part the négatives (idem + pas d'accent)) points.
- The (pas de the)telecommuting is a new trend and more and more companies use this concept (enlever this concept)
- this virtual company which commercialized (présent)new technology is today a multi-million dollar company.
- When (article)journalist interviewed Laura Shoppe,
- the better (superlatif)choice for her and her colleagues
- that telecommuting idea : ?
- quiet (orthographe)difficult
- as explain Jason Fried: ordre des mots + faute de conjugaiosn.
- Jason Fied said (présent)the (mettre un possessif à la palce de the)employees
- They don’t (make)progress in their job
- For him, the best solution is to work at home for job(s) like engineers, designers.
- The (pas de the)telecommuting has advantages
- The telecommuting’s concept to expand in many companies: où est le verbe conjugué?
- Working at home, the employee don’t (faute de conjugaison) have (any)relations with his colleagues,
- It must to organize: must + infinitif sans to.
- The employee can to work: même remarque.
- the (pas le bon mot) night
- there is not (any) break.
- negatives points,
- this new work system will permits :will + infinitif.
- they will to work
- at his (pas le bon possessif)own pace and to organize his (même remarque)schedule.
- The employees are more motivated to do his (pas le bon possessif)job(s).
Où commence ta conclusion? Car tu ne l'introduis par "to conclude" ou "to sum up".
Réponse : Notion/The idea of progress de noixdecoco17, postée le 25-04-2017 à 11:54:29 (S | E)
Bonjour merci beaucoup grâce à vous j'ai pu corriger mes erreurs mais je n'arrive pas à reformuler ma problématique. Pourriez-vous me donner des éléments pour pouvoir l'améliorer ?
Merci d'avance
I’m going to talk about the notion of Idea of Progress.
First of all, I’m going to give a definition about this notion.
This notion can be defined as an improvement , a development or a change technical, scientific or social advance which contributes to making the world a better place .
We are going to base ourselves especially on technological progress.
So, to illustrate that notion, I’ll talk about telecommuting. Telecommuting is a modern trend which consists of working from home or from other places except workplaces, with computers and internet.
Working from home is it the end of productivity or the future of work?
In the first part, we are going to see the positive points of telecommuting and in a second part the negative points.
Telecommuting is a new trend and more and more companies use like Laura Schoppe’s company.
Founded in 2001 by Laura Shoppe, this virtual company which commercializes new technology is today a multi-million dollar company. Note that all forty employers of Fuentek are required to telecommute. When the journalist interviewed Laura Shoppe, she declared that telecommute was the best choice for her and her colleagues because they are very productive and Laura gets loyalty too. This company is home-based, but it shows that we can excel without working in an office, and that telecommuting idea is a very serious way to work. So telecommuting, permits employees to be more productive, more loyal and more willing to do the job.
It also allows for an employee,to organize his schedule as he likes , to reduce travel costs. Indeed, working in an office is quite difficult as explain Jason Fried in the document “I got nothing done today”. Jason Fied said these employees are all the time disturbed by phone calls, colleagues, meetings. They don’t progress in their job and so they are less productive. For him, the best solution is to work at home for jobs like engineers, designers.
The telecommuting has advantages but there are also disadvantages.The telecommuting’s concept expands in many companies. Despite the increasing trend in telecommuting, there are still some people reluctant to do it. Working at home, the employee have not any relations with his colleagues, his home to become his working place. It must organize his day between work and family’s life. The employee can work at night and to have the feeling of working all the time, there is not any break.
Telecommuting presents advantages and negative points, but I think that this new work system will to permit to increase the productivity of employees because they will to work at their own pace and to organize their schedule. The employees are more motivated to do their job. Telecommuting encourages, stimulates people to work more.
Réponse : Notion/The idea of progress de laure95, postée le 25-04-2017 à 15:01:17 (S | E)
Bonjour,
- Telecommuting is a modern trend which consists of (pas la bonne préposition)working from home
- Working from home is it the end of productivity or the future of work?: Is working from home the end of productivity or the future?
- Telecommuting is a new trend and (enlever and) more and more companies use like Laura Schoppe’s company.
- she declared that telecommute (telecomuting) was the best choice for her
- telecommuting idea: the idea of telecomuting.
- as explain Jason Fried: inverser l'ordre des mots + mettre le verbe au passé.
- Jason Fied said (présent)these (mettre un possessif)employees are all the time
- They don’t (make) progress in their job(s)
- The t(enlever the)elecommuting has advantages
- The telecommuting’s concept expands (mettre au présent en be+-ing) in many companies.
- Working at home, the employee have not (faute de conjugaison)any relations
- It (un employé n'est pas une chose)must organize his day between (mettre un possessif)work and family’s life.
- The employee can work at night and to (enlever to)have the feeling of working all the time,
- this new work system will to permit: will + infinitif sans to.
- they will to work at their own pace and to organize their schedule: même remarque.
- The employees are more motivated to do their job(s).
Réponse : Notion/The idea of progress de noixdecoco17, postée le 26-04-2017 à 19:18:00 (S | E)
Bonjour, merci beaucoup pour la correction.
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