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Message de selenadouglasse posté le 13-04-2017 à 18:33:46 (S | E | F)
bonjour,
Pouvez-vous m'aider s'il vous plait car je passe un oral demain et je voulais savoir si mon texte avait des fautes de grammaire/orthographe/conjugaison etc...
Mon texte doit être au prétérit en Ving, énoncés à deux verbes, passif. Je dois utiliser le vocabulaire des droits et débattre et défendre mes idées.
Merci pour vos réponses.
Voici ma consigne : you are being interviewed by a journalist on your fight for human rights his first question is "could you explain the reasons why you entered this fight ?" defend your ideas.
I was entering in this fight because human rights are not completely respected.
When we have been told that no one will be held in slavery or servitude, well today it is not true.
When I was traveling in India, I saw children barely 10 years old, working in deplorable conditions of hygiene. They worked there from 8 am to 10 pm.
I had to protest against this, claim justice for these children.
We were told that no one could be arbitrarily arrested, detained or exiled,
but still today in some countries when people march against something, they are imprisoned and released several years later.
We were also told that at the marriageable age, both men and women had the right to marry and to found a family, and that marriage could be concluded only
with the free and full consent of Future married couples.
Would you have thought that a 10-year-old girl would have to go away from a forced marriage with a 36-year-old men to continue her studies?
This is what happened
We were told that everyone had the right without any discrimination to an equal wage for equal work.
Yet I learned that almost 11% of the wage gaps between a man and a woman were unexplained and were due to "pure" discrimination.
I was entering in this fight to denounce these abuses and to properly enforce these laws.
In order for each individual to assert and enjoy his or her rights.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 13-04-2017 18:43
Message de selenadouglasse posté le 13-04-2017 à 18:33:46 (S | E | F)
bonjour,
Pouvez-vous m'aider s'il vous plait car je passe un oral demain et je voulais savoir si mon texte avait des fautes de grammaire/orthographe/conjugaison etc...
Mon texte doit être au prétérit en Ving, énoncés à deux verbes, passif. Je dois utiliser le vocabulaire des droits et débattre et défendre mes idées.
Merci pour vos réponses.
Voici ma consigne : you are being interviewed by a journalist on your fight for human rights his first question is "could you explain the reasons why you entered this fight ?" defend your ideas.
I was entering in this fight because human rights are not completely respected.
When we have been told that no one will be held in slavery or servitude, well today it is not true.
When I was traveling in India, I saw children barely 10 years old, working in deplorable conditions of hygiene. They worked there from 8 am to 10 pm.
I had to protest against this, claim justice for these children.
We were told that no one could be arbitrarily arrested, detained or exiled,
but still today in some countries when people march against something, they are imprisoned and released several years later.
We were also told that at the marriageable age, both men and women had the right to marry and to found a family, and that marriage could be concluded only
with the free and full consent of Future married couples.
Would you have thought that a 10-year-old girl would have to go away from a forced marriage with a 36-year-old men to continue her studies?
This is what happened
We were told that everyone had the right without any discrimination to an equal wage for equal work.
Yet I learned that almost 11% of the wage gaps between a man and a woman were unexplained and were due to "pure" discrimination.
I was entering in this fight to denounce these abuses and to properly enforce these laws.
In order for each individual to assert and enjoy his or her rights.
-------------------
Modifié par lucile83 le 13-04-2017 18:43
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