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Message de machinexerx posté le 25-03-2017 à 01:05:25 (S | E | F)
Bonjour
j'aimerais que vous me corrigiez et m'expliquiez mes fautes s'il vous plait.
Merci de votre aide.
Write about an embarrassing moment that happened to you?
Include the details
3 paragraphs
Past tense
Introduction:Mood,Time,Place and characters
Title
When/where did the situation happen?
What was the general mood?
How old were you?/Who?
What was the turning point of your day?
How did you react(climax)
How did your story come to end?
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The word day of my life
Its was a beautiful morning like always during the tonight when i was awake my baby teeth on the right side up hurried me wet suddenly it fell by magic i put it on my bed.Then i pretended to sleep when i suddenly recognize the smell of my father who passes in my room to take my tooth to put money under my bed i was disappointed to know that it existed not it was January 21,2008 because i had my ball preferrer that day.
The next morning on a beautiful sunny morning my father told at 7 years old i should not make myself with these stories and on to other things.After this message for days i no longer spoke to my father.The turning point of my day was to learn that adult say are not always true but better for us not learn the truth.
I realized that acting in a fake way would not help me any more so i evolved by making my small cousin believe that Santa Claus and tooth fairy existed.Finally, it's over that i felt older and older to let me know at it and i forgive my father for having done this and we have been happy for years.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 25-03-2017 09:06
Message de machinexerx posté le 25-03-2017 à 01:05:25 (S | E | F)
Bonjour
j'aimerais que vous me corrigiez et m'expliquiez mes fautes s'il vous plait.
Merci de votre aide.
Write about an embarrassing moment that happened to you?
Include the details
3 paragraphs
Past tense
Introduction:Mood,Time,Place and characters
Title
When/where did the situation happen?
What was the general mood?
How old were you?/Who?
What was the turning point of your day?
How did you react(climax)
How did your story come to end?
---------
The word day of my life
Its was a beautiful morning like always during the tonight when i was awake my baby teeth on the right side up hurried me wet suddenly it fell by magic i put it on my bed.Then i pretended to sleep when i suddenly recognize the smell of my father who passes in my room to take my tooth to put money under my bed i was disappointed to know that it existed not it was January 21,2008 because i had my ball preferrer that day.
The next morning on a beautiful sunny morning my father told at 7 years old i should not make myself with these stories and on to other things.After this message for days i no longer spoke to my father.The turning point of my day was to learn that adult say are not always true but better for us not learn the truth.
I realized that acting in a fake way would not help me any more so i evolved by making my small cousin believe that Santa Claus and tooth fairy existed.Finally, it's over that i felt older and older to let me know at it and i forgive my father for having done this and we have been happy for years.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 25-03-2017 09:06
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