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Message de beginner93 posté le 22-03-2017 à 19:26:03 (S | E | F)
Hello,
I have to describe my day in English and I don't have any reviewer in order to develop my English. Can anyone read my text and shareits their comments ?
Thanks in advance.
Title : Struggling
Today I woke up at a quarter to noon ! It’s a bit frustrating because I have missed two courses actually. But, I was in a good shape and my mood, the crucial factor in the last two years, was correct. In fact I have done a good workout yesterday, and I attended to a course, the first time since 6 days ! As you may have noticed, I am a bit lost in my mind and I have to focus myself on the events which are coming as well as I have to forget the past.
Then I was chilling, failing on my goals, and only at quarter past one , I went out for lunch. I ate a salad and fish, with vegetables and mash potatoes, and for the dessert I had a chocolate cream .
I attend a course of logic afterward. I find myself good, participating in class, but only to have some explanations.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 22-03-2017 23:06
Message de beginner93 posté le 22-03-2017 à 19:26:03 (S | E | F)
Hello,
I have to describe my day in English and I don't have any reviewer in order to develop my English. Can anyone read my text and share
Thanks in advance.
Title : Struggling
Today I woke up at a quarter to noon ! It’s a bit frustrating because I have missed two courses actually. But, I was in a good shape and my mood, the crucial factor in the last two years, was correct. In fact I have done a good workout yesterday, and I attended to a course, the first time since 6 days ! As you may have noticed, I am a bit lost in my mind and I have to focus myself on the events which are coming as well as I have to forget the past.
Then I was chilling, failing on my goals, and only at quarter past one , I went out for lunch. I ate a salad and fish, with vegetables and mash potatoes, and for the dessert I had a chocolate cream .
I attend a course of logic afterward. I find myself good, participating in class, but only to have some explanations.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 22-03-2017 23:06
Réponse : Correction/Amélioration de gerondif, postée le 23-03-2017 à 11:44:20 (S | E)
Hello
La cohérente toute relative des idées donne l'impression d'un type qui se remet d'une sévère cuite ! D'où le titre struggling !
Erreurs en bleu, corrections en vert.
Title : Struggling
Today I woke up at a quarter to noon !(noon, c'est le zénith, la verticale du soleil par rapport à la terre, l'ombre zéro, on ne peut pas lui rajouter des minutes sur un cadran d'horloge. a quarter to twelve in the morning)
It’s(prétérit) a bit frustrating because I have(logiquement, plus que parfait pour l'antériorité) missed two courses actually (j'aurais plutôt mis already). But, I was in a good shape and my mood, the crucial factor in the last two years, was correct (my mood was correct ne se dit guère). In fact I have(plus que parfait, antériorité) done a good workout yesterday, and I (plus que parfait à cause du depuis en since)attended to (verbe transitif) a course, for the first time since(since réclame une date, un point, pas une durée, mettez in) 6 days !
As you may have noticed, I am a bit lost in my mind and I have to focus
Then I was chilling (sens ? ), failing on my goals (sens?), and only (ce only fait bizarre, vouliez-vous dire : (I was so disorganized that)I didn't go out for lunch until a quarter to one ?) at a quarter past one , I went out for lunch. I ate (plutôt I had) a salad and fish, with vegetables and mash(ed) potatoes, and for
I attend(prétérit) a course of logic afterwards. I find(prétérit) myself good (On peut dire aussi i thought I did well), participating in class, but only to have some explanations.
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