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Message de mimifi12 posté le 23-02-2017 à 15:58:31 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je viens vers vous pour que si possible vous me signaliez les erreurs dans mon exposé, s'il vous plait.
Merci pour vos réponses.
Gabriel Garcia Marquez, a Columbian Author
- Who is Gabriel Garcia Marquez ?
Gabriel Garcia Marquez, a writer and journalist was born on March 6, 1927 in Aracataca. It’s a city in the North-Est of Columbia. He died On April 17, 2014. He had been diagnosed with cancer in the late 1990s. He writing fictions and non-fiction. His fiction work introduced readers to magical realism, which combines more conventional storytelling with fantasy. He is considered as one of the most significant authors of the 20th century.
- His childhood
Gabriel Garcia Marquez is the eldest of twelves children. But he lived with his grandparents because his parents moved in Barranquilla. His father want become a pharmacist. His grandmother told tales of the fantastic and his parents dating adventures. She is a spring of inspiration for him. His grandfather is also a pring of inspiration for his political and social awareness. Indeed, he was against the Banana massacre on december 1928. The USA threatened to invade Columbia if he doesn’t protect the company of United Fruit. So, a lot of worker was killed by the Columbia army because they went on strike. In One hundred of Solitude, Gabriel Garcia Marquez talks about this massacre. We can say that his grandparents influenced his early development very strongly. After the death of his grandfather in 1938, he had joined his parents. He had helped his parent with a job because they have financial problems.
- His studies
Gabriel Garcia Marquez was sent to an internship in Barranquilla after to have move in Sucre with his family in 1939. He had needed to start his formal education. But after a moment, he return in Barranquilla and he have a good result. For his studies in high school of Zipaquira, the Principal has presented to Gabriel Garcia Marquez two major poets : Eduardo Carranza and Jorge Rojas. After his high school diploma, he studied law and journalism in Bogotá and Cartagena because his father wanted this.
- His professional life
He began his career as a journalist in 1948. For his job, he was travelling in Columbia, France, Mexico and Spain. He was also a film maker. He has produced Erendira. This is the sad history of Erendira, a girl prostitute by his grandmother. Gabriel Garcia Marquez has published his first novel in 1955: Leaf Storm. It’s a novel about a dead person relate by a colonel, his daughter and his grandson. After, all his book was a world success as we can see.
- His Nobel Prize
He was awarded the Nobel Prize for Literature in 1982 for his book: One hundred of Solitude.This books was a big success in the world. Five years after his publication, this book was publish in 23 country. Gabriel Garcia Marquez was very surprised by this success.
So, this book talk about a Traveller’s prophecy on the Buendia family in Macondo, a village of South America. They have sentence to one hundred of Solitude. We will follow this family across the ages: birth, life and decline. They will experience revolution, civil war, destruction…. It’s a mythical epic.
After one hundred of Solitude, his books was between journalism, history and popular novel.
- His other books
Love in the time of Cholera (1985) is a love story. Florentino, a young telegraph poor and Fermina, a beautiful woman swear to get married. But, one day, Fermina weds Juvénal, a young doctor. So, Florentino tries to become rich to deserve the Fermina’s love.
The story of a Shipwrecked Sailor (1970) is the testimony of Luis Alejandro Velasco. He is the only survivor of eight columbian sailor, fell inthe sea in 1955. Indeed, they was on the war ship Caldas. So, this book is the story of ten days of sinking.
In Chronicle of a Death Foretold (1981) Vicario brothers have announce their murderous file. So, all the village is on alert excerpt Santiago Nasar. At the dawn, in front of his door, his body is found. This book will narrate : why this crime coudn’t be évoid ?
- Movies about books
A lot of his books was adapted in movies. For exemple, in 1986, there is Chronicle of a death foretold and in 2007 there is in the time of Cholera.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 23-02-2017 21:49
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Edited by lucile83 on 24-02-2017 07:36
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Message de mimifi12 posté le 23-02-2017 à 15:58:31 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je viens vers vous pour que si possible vous me signaliez les erreurs dans mon exposé, s'il vous plait.
Merci pour vos réponses.
Gabriel Garcia Marquez, a Columbian Author
- Who is Gabriel Garcia Marquez ?
Gabriel Garcia Marquez, a writer and journalist was born on March 6, 1927 in Aracataca. It’s a city in the North-Est of Columbia. He died On April 17, 2014. He had been diagnosed with cancer in the late 1990s. He writing fictions and non-fiction. His fiction work introduced readers to magical realism, which combines more conventional storytelling with fantasy. He is considered as one of the most significant authors of the 20th century.
- His childhood
Gabriel Garcia Marquez is the eldest of twelves children. But he lived with his grandparents because his parents moved in Barranquilla. His father want become a pharmacist. His grandmother told tales of the fantastic and his parents dating adventures. She is a spring of inspiration for him. His grandfather is also a pring of inspiration for his political and social awareness. Indeed, he was against the Banana massacre on december 1928. The USA threatened to invade Columbia if he doesn’t protect the company of United Fruit. So, a lot of worker was killed by the Columbia army because they went on strike. In One hundred of Solitude, Gabriel Garcia Marquez talks about this massacre. We can say that his grandparents influenced his early development very strongly. After the death of his grandfather in 1938, he had joined his parents. He had helped his parent with a job because they have financial problems.
- His studies
Gabriel Garcia Marquez was sent to an internship in Barranquilla after to have move in Sucre with his family in 1939. He had needed to start his formal education. But after a moment, he return in Barranquilla and he have a good result. For his studies in high school of Zipaquira, the Principal has presented to Gabriel Garcia Marquez two major poets : Eduardo Carranza and Jorge Rojas. After his high school diploma, he studied law and journalism in Bogotá and Cartagena because his father wanted this.
- His professional life
He began his career as a journalist in 1948. For his job, he was travelling in Columbia, France, Mexico and Spain. He was also a film maker. He has produced Erendira. This is the sad history of Erendira, a girl prostitute by his grandmother. Gabriel Garcia Marquez has published his first novel in 1955: Leaf Storm. It’s a novel about a dead person relate by a colonel, his daughter and his grandson. After, all his book was a world success as we can see.
- His Nobel Prize
He was awarded the Nobel Prize for Literature in 1982 for his book: One hundred of Solitude.This books was a big success in the world. Five years after his publication, this book was publish in 23 country. Gabriel Garcia Marquez was very surprised by this success.
So, this book talk about a Traveller’s prophecy on the Buendia family in Macondo, a village of South America. They have sentence to one hundred of Solitude. We will follow this family across the ages: birth, life and decline. They will experience revolution, civil war, destruction…. It’s a mythical epic.
After one hundred of Solitude, his books was between journalism, history and popular novel.
- His other books
Love in the time of Cholera (1985) is a love story. Florentino, a young telegraph poor and Fermina, a beautiful woman swear to get married. But, one day, Fermina weds Juvénal, a young doctor. So, Florentino tries to become rich to deserve the Fermina’s love.
The story of a Shipwrecked Sailor (1970) is the testimony of Luis Alejandro Velasco. He is the only survivor of eight columbian sailor, fell inthe sea in 1955. Indeed, they was on the war ship Caldas. So, this book is the story of ten days of sinking.
In Chronicle of a Death Foretold (1981) Vicario brothers have announce their murderous file. So, all the village is on alert excerpt Santiago Nasar. At the dawn, in front of his door, his body is found. This book will narrate : why this crime coudn’t be évoid ?
- Movies about books
A lot of his books was adapted in movies. For exemple, in 1986, there is Chronicle of a death foretold and in 2007 there is in the time of Cholera.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 23-02-2017 21:49
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Edited by lucile83 on 24-02-2017 07:36
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Réponse : Correction/Columbian Author de here4u, postée le 23-02-2017 à 23:38:37 (S | E)
Hello !
I think you've misplaced your work as this is the "English only Forum"
...So I'll start correcting and our dear Lucile will tranfer it all if necessary ...
Gabriel Garcia Marquez, a Columbian Author
- Who is Gabriel Garcia Marquez?
Gabriel Garcia Marquez, a writer and journalist was born on March 6, 1927 in Aracataca. It’s a city in the North-Est of Columbia. He died On (no capital here!) April 17, 2014. He had been diagnosed with cancer in the late 1990s. He writing (auxiliary? and tense, I suppose!) fictions and non-fictionS. His fiction work introduced readers to magical realism, which combines more conventional storytelling with fantasy. He is considered as one of the most significant authors of the 20th century.
- His childhood
Gabriel Garcia Marquez is (wrong tense)the eldest of twelves children. But he lived with his grandparents because his parents moved in Barranquilla. His father want become = construction!)a pharmacist. His grandmother told tales of the fantastic(clumsy) and his parents dating adventures. She is a spring (= source of inspiration!) of inspiration for him. His grandfather is also a pring of inspiration for his political and social awareness. Indeed, he was against the Banana massacre on december 1928. The USA threatened to invade Columbia if he doesn’t protect the company of United Fruit. So, a lot of worker was (plurals are necessary!)killed by the Columbia army because they went = tense ! the strike had happened before their deaths on strike. In One hundred of Solitude, Gabriel Garcia Marquez talks about(wrong tense and clumsy vocabulary this massacre. We can say that his grandparents influenced his early development very strongly. After the death of his grandfather in 1938, he had?? joined his parents. He had?? helped his parent with a job because they have financial problems.
- His studies
Gabriel Garcia Marquez was sent to an internship(clumsy!) in Barranquilla after to have move in
Sucre with his family in 1939. He had needed to start his formal education. (tense??) But after a moment, he return in Barranquilla and he have a good resultS. For his studies in XXX high school of Zipaquira, the Principal has presented to Gabriel Garcia Marquez two major poets= vocabulary + word order! : Eduardo Carranza and Jorge Rojas. After his high school diploma, he studied XXX law and journalism in Bogotá and Cartagena because his father wanted this. Réponse : Correction/Columbian Author de mimifi12, postée le 24-02-2017 à 21:44:01 (S | E)
Hello !
I'm really sorry
Thank you for you answer. It's really nice
I try to correct :
in green, I don't understand or I don't know. In blue, I have corrected.
Gabriel Garcia Marquez, a Columbian Author
- Who is Gabriel Garcia Marquez?
Gabriel Garcia Marquez, a writer and journalist was born on March 6, 1927 in Aracataca. It’s a city in the North-Est of Columbia. He died on April 17, 2014. He had been diagnosed with cancer in the late 1990s. He has written fictions and non-fiction . His fiction work introduced readers to magical realism, which combines more conventional storytelling with fantasy. He is considered as one of the most significant authors of the 20th century.
- His childhood
Gabriel Garcia Marquez was the eldest of twelve children. But he lived with his grandparents because his parents moved to Barranquilla. His father would like to become a pharmacist. His grandmother told fantasy tales and his parents' dating adventures. She was a source of inspiration for him. His grandfather was also a source of inspiration for his political and social awareness. Indeed, he was against the Banana massacre on December 1928. The USA threatened to invade Columbia if he doesn’t protect the company of United Fruit. So, a lot of workers were killed by the Columbia army because they were on strike. In One hundred of Solitude, Gabriel Garcia Marquez relates this massacre. We can say that his grandparents influenced his early development very strongly. After the death of his grandfather in 1938, he has joined his parents. He has helped his parent with a job because they have financial problems.
- His studies
Gabriel Garcia Marquez was sent to Colegio jesuita San José in Barranquilla after to have move in Sucre with his family in 1939. He had needed to start his formal education. (tense??) But after a moment, he is returned to Barranquilla and he have a good results. For his studies in the Liceo Nacional de Zipaquira, the Principal has presented to Gabriel Garcia Marquez two major poets= vocabulary + word order! : Eduardo Carranza and Jorge Rojas. After his high school diploma, he studied the law and journalism in Bogotá and Cartagena because his father wanted this.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 25-02-2017 08:48
Pas de rouge/rose sur les forums, merci.
Réponse : Correction/Columbian Author de laure95, postée le 25-02-2017 à 18:13:34 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
- His father would like to become a pharmacist: c'est son père qui voulait être pharmacien ou son père voulait que son fils soit pharmacien?
-he doesn’t protect the company of United Fruit: mettre au passé.
- He has helped his parent (pluriel)with a job (mal dit, utiliser le verbe travailler) because they have (passé) financial problems
- after to have move: after + verbe + -ing.
-He had needed to start: mettre au prétérit simple pas au past perfect.
- he is returned to Barranquilla: temps? Mettre le verbe to return au prétérit simple.
- he have (passé)a (pas de a) good results
- the Principal (the headmaster)has presented to Gabriel Garcia Marquez two major poets: ordre des mots après presented
Réponse : Correction/Columbian Author de here4u, postée le 25-02-2017 à 18:40:28 (S | E)
Hello !
- His professional life
He began his career as a journalist in 1948. For his job, he was travelling in= tense + movement ...Columbia, France, Mexico and Spain. He was also a film maker. He has produced Erendira. This is the sad history of Erendira, a girl prostitute by his grandmother. Gabriel Garcia Marquez has published his first novel in 1955: Leaf Storm. It’s a novel about a dead person relate by a colonel,?? his daughter and his grandson. After, all his book = le livre en entierwas a world success as we can see.
- His Nobel Prize
He was awarded the Nobel Prize for Literature in 1982 for his book: One hundred XXXXX of Solitude.This books was a big success in the world. Five years after his publication, this book= it was publish = participe passéin 23 country. Gabriel Garcia Marquez was very surprised by this success.
So, this book talk about a Traveller’s prophecy on the Buendia family in Macondo, a village of South America. They have sentence = passif !- auxiliaire et participe passéto one hundred XXXXX of Solitude. We will follow this family across the ages: birth, life and decline. They will experience X revolution, XXX civil war, destruction…. It’s a mythical epic.
After one hundred XXXXX of Solitude, his books was between journalism, history and popular novel.
- His other books
Love in the time of Cholera (1985) is a love story. Florentino, a young telegraph poor and Fermina, a beautiful woman swear to get married. But, one day, Fermina weds Juvénal, a young doctor. So, Florentino tries to become rich to deserve the Fermina’s love.
The story of a Shipwrecked Sailor (1970) is the testimony of Luis Alejandro Velasco. He is the only survivor of eight columbian sailor, fell in the sea in 1955. Indeed, they was on the war ship Caldas. So, this book is the story of ten days of sinking.
In XXX Chronicle of a Death Foretold (1981) Vicario brothers have announce their murderous file. So, all the village = le village entier! is on alert excerpt Santiago Nasar. At the dawn, in front of his door, his body is found= ordre des mots. This book will narrate : why this crime coudn’t be évoid ?
- Movies about books
A lot of his books was adapted in movies. For exemple, in 1986, there isXXX Chronicle of a death foretold and in 2007 there is in the time of Cholera.(tous les titres en italiques!)
Réponse : Correction/Columbian Author de mimifi12, postée le 28-02-2017 à 09:35:08 (S | E)
Bonjour,
merci beaucoup pour votre aide.
Voilà mon texte avec les modifications en vert et les fautes que je n'ai pas comprise ou réussi à corriger en rouge.
Gabriel Garcia Marquez, a Columbian Author
- Who is Gabriel Garcia Marquez?
Gabriel Garcia Marquez, a writer and journalist was born on March 6, 1927 in Aracataca. It’s a city in the North-Est of Columbia. He died on April 17, 2014. He had been diagnosed with cancer in the late 1990s. He has written fictions and non-fiction. His fiction work introduced readers to magical realism, which combines more conventional storytelling with fantasy. He is considered as one of the most significant authors of the 20th century.
- His childhood
Gabriel Garcia Marquez was the eldest of twelve children. But he lived with his grandparents because his parents moved to Barranquilla. His father would like to become a pharmacist. His grandmother told fantasy tales and his parents' dating adventures. She was a source of inspiration for him. His grandfather was also a source of inspiration for his political and social awareness. Indeed, he was against the Banana massacre on December 1928. The USA threatened to invade Columbia if he didn’t protected the company of United Fruit. So, a lot of workers were killed by the Columbia army because they were on strike. In One hundred of Solitude, Gabriel Garcia Marquez relates this massacre. We can say that his grandparents influenced his early development very strongly. After the death of his grandfather in 1938, he has joined his parents. He has helped his parents with working because they had financial problems.
- His studies
Gabriel Garcia Marquez was sent to Colegio jesuita San José in Barranquilla after have moving in Sucre with his family in 1939. He needed to start his formal education. But after a moment, he returned to Barranquilla and he had good results. For his studies in the Liceo Nacional de Zipaquira, the headmaster has presented two major poets to Gabriel Garcia Marquez : Eduardo Carranza and Jorge Rojas. After his high school diploma, he studied the law and journalism in Bogotá and Cartagena because his father wanted this.
- His professional life
He began his career as a journalist in 1948. For his job, he had travelled to Columbia, France, Mexico and Spain. He was also a film maker. He has produced Erendira. This is the sad history of Erendira, a girl prostitute by his grandmother. Gabriel Garcia Marquez had published his first novel in 1955: Leaf Storm. It’s a novel about a dead person relate by a colonel (raconter du point de vue du colonel…) , his daughter and his grandson. After, all his books (je veut dire : tous ses livres) was a world success as we can see.
- His Nobel Prize
He was awarded the Nobel Prize for Literature in 1982 for his book: One hundred years of Solitude.This books was a big success in the world. Five years after the publication, it was publish in 23 countries. Gabriel Garcia Marquez was very surprised by this success.
So, this book talks about a Traveller’s prophecy on the Buendia family in Macondo, a village of South America. They have sentenced to one hundred years of Solitude. We will follow this family across ages: birth, life and decline. They will experience the revolution, the civil war, destruction…. It’s a mythical epic.
After one hundred years of Solitude, his books were between journalism, history and popular novel.
- His other books
Love in the time of Cholera (1985) is a love story. Florentino, a young poor telegraph and Fermina, a beautiful woman swear to get married. But, one day, Fermina weds Juvénal, a young doctor. So, Florentino tries to become rich to deserve Fermina’s love.
The story of a Shipwrecked Sailor (1970) is the testimony of Luis Alejandro Velasco. He is the only survivor to eight Columbian sailor, fell inthe sea in 1955. Indeed, they were on the war ship Caldas. So, this book is the story of ten days of sinking.
In the Chronicle of a Death Foretold (1981) Vicario brothers have announced their murderous files. So, all the village is on alert excerpt Santiago Nasar. At dawn, his body is found in front of his door. This book will narrate : why this crime coudn’t be avoid. (pourquoi le crime n’a pu être évité)
- Movies about books
A lot of his books were adapted in movies. For example, in 1986, there are the Chronicle of a death foretold and in 2007 there are in the time of Cholera.
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