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Message de dadoush35 posté le 19-11-2016 à 12:28:02 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous!
j'ai rédigé un court texte et j'aimerais savoir si vous y trouvez des fautes s'il vous plait
Merci beaucoup, à plus tard!
Le voici :
Amazon is an American e-business company created ten years ago which sells various products.
Today, Amazon wants to evolve by attracting artisans in five countries. It will get a lot of craftsmen from forty countries in touch with buyers who are looking for handmade products, this strategy exists already in America.
Amazone raised 267 million dollars after its promise to develop their business internationally in 2015.
It also boosts sales after developing a strategy : introducing the workers’ profile in the platform. It shows the story of the products and attracts customers.
Amazon has an important customer base and has warehouse to stock a lot of goods and carry out the deliveries.
Amazon is really similar to its competitors and will have to be competitive to face them and prove that it can be a handmade reference.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-11-2016 10:39
Message de dadoush35 posté le 19-11-2016 à 12:28:02 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous!
j'ai rédigé un court texte et j'aimerais savoir si vous y trouvez des fautes s'il vous plait
Merci beaucoup, à plus tard!
Le voici :
Amazon is an American e-business company created ten years ago which sells various products.
Today, Amazon wants to evolve by attracting artisans in five countries. It will get a lot of craftsmen from forty countries in touch with buyers who are looking for handmade products, this strategy exists already in America.
Amazone raised 267 million dollars after its promise to develop their business internationally in 2015.
It also boosts sales after developing a strategy : introducing the workers’ profile in the platform. It shows the story of the products and attracts customers.
Amazon has an important customer base and has warehouse to stock a lot of goods and carry out the deliveries.
Amazon is really similar to its competitors and will have to be competitive to face them and prove that it can be a handmade reference.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-11-2016 10:39
Réponse : Correction/ court texte de laure95, postée le 20-11-2016 à 10:28:52 (S | E)
Bonjour,
- this strategy exists already in America: ALREADY n'est pas à la bonne place.
- - to develop their business: mettre ITS à la place de THEIR.
- It also boosts sales (mettre au present perfect)after developing a strategy
- It shows the story (pas le bon mot ici je pense)of the products
Réponse : Correction/ court texte de dadoush35, postée le 20-11-2016 à 14:23:36 (S | E)
Bonjour, voici ma correction :
- this strategy already exists in America
- to develop its business
- It has also boosted sales after developing a strategy
- It shows the history of the products
Merci beaucoup, bonne journée!!
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