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Message de raphaelle1999 posté le 15-04-2016 à 21:01:58 (S | E | F)
Hello!
Can you help me to correct my text on the importance of the commemorations of the World Wars please?
Thanks!
It is in reeding books of several author like Helen Dunmore for example talking about the World Wars taht I realized how much it's important to commemorate these events of the history. Both for my generation, futur generations or people who lived the first or the second world war. First, I think the most important goal of commemorations is to think and try not to recurrence mistakes of the past. In fact, If everybody forget what Hitler and his party does during the second world war for exemple there is a danger that its recurrence. Then, another aspect of commemorations is to, maybe, push young generations to defend their country in a situation of war. For this they can, for example, commit in the army. And finally, another goal really important of commemorations is the memory work. In fact, It's our duty to remember that if we are free today it's thanks to that people who fought for our freedom and who, most of the time, lost their lifes for their generation but also future generations. And, for people who lived these wars It have to be comforting to see that we are thankful for what they did to our country. To conclude, It is very important to commemorate the World Wars for many reasons all as important: Commemorations avoid ro reccurence mistakes of the past, they can give the desire to youth to defend their country, and, finally, commemorations are a demonstration among one other of the memory work.
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Edited by lucile83 on 15-04-2016 22:10
Message de raphaelle1999 posté le 15-04-2016 à 21:01:58 (S | E | F)
Hello!
Can you help me to correct my text on the importance of the commemorations of the World Wars please?
Thanks!
It is in reeding books of several author like Helen Dunmore for example talking about the World Wars taht I realized how much it's important to commemorate these events of the history. Both for my generation, futur generations or people who lived the first or the second world war. First, I think the most important goal of commemorations is to think and try not to recurrence mistakes of the past. In fact, If everybody forget what Hitler and his party does during the second world war for exemple there is a danger that its recurrence. Then, another aspect of commemorations is to, maybe, push young generations to defend their country in a situation of war. For this they can, for example, commit in the army. And finally, another goal really important of commemorations is the memory work. In fact, It's our duty to remember that if we are free today it's thanks to that people who fought for our freedom and who, most of the time, lost their lifes for their generation but also future generations. And, for people who lived these wars It have to be comforting to see that we are thankful for what they did to our country. To conclude, It is very important to commemorate the World Wars for many reasons all as important: Commemorations avoid ro reccurence mistakes of the past, they can give the desire to youth to defend their country, and, finally, commemorations are a demonstration among one other of the memory work.
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Edited by lucile83 on 15-04-2016 22:10
Réponse: Importance /commemorations de bluestar, postée le 16-04-2016 à 14:14:48 (S | E)
Bonjour..
It is in reeding (orth.)books of several author(pluriel apres 'several') like Helen Dunmore for example talking about the World Wars taht (orth)I realized how much it's important (structure a reviser: .."how adjectif pronom verbe")to commemorate these events of
Ne pas utiliser des lettres majuscules au milieu d'une phrase à l'exception des noms propres, par exemple les noms des pays, etc.
Réponse: Importance /commemorations de raphaelle1999, postée le 16-04-2016 à 14:50:10 (S | E)
Merci Bluestar!
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Réponse: Importance /commemorations de raphaelle1999, postée le 16-04-2016 à 15:07:19 (S | E)
Je reposte mon texte car j'ai oublié de corriger quelques erreurs.
It is in reading books of several authors like Helen Dunmore for example talking about the World Wars that i realized how important is to commemorate these events of the history both for my generation, future generations or people who lived during the first or the second world war. First, I think the most important goal of commemorations is to try not to reproduce mistakes of the past. In fact, if everybody forgets what Hitler and his party did during the second world war for exemple there is a danger that it will recurrence. Then, another aspect of commemorations is to, maybe, inspired young generations to defend their country in a situation of war. For this they can, for example, enrol in the army. And finally, another important goal of commemorations is the memory work. In fact, it's our duty to remember that if we are free today it's thanks to that people who fought for our freedom and who, most of the time, lost their lifes for their generation but also future generations. And, for people who lived during these wars it must be comforting to see that we are thankful for what they did to our country. To conclude, it is very important to commemorate the World Wars for many reasons all important: Commemorations avoid to reproduce mistakes of the past, they can give the desire to youth to defend their country, and, finally, commemorations are a demonstration of the memory work.
Réponse: Importance /commemorations de bluestar, postée le 16-04-2016 à 15:56:35 (S | E)
Bonjour..
It is in reading books of several authors like Helen Dunmore for example talking about the World Wars that i(majuscule) realized how important is to commemorate these events of
Réponse: Importance /commemorations de raphaelle1999, postée le 16-04-2016 à 20:16:47 (S | E)
It is in reading books of several authors like Helen Dunmore for example talking about the World Wars that I realized how important is to commemorate these events of history both for my generation, future generations or people who lived during the First or the Second World War. First, I think the most important goal of commemorations is to try not to repeat the mistakes of the past. In fact, if everybody forgets what Hitler and his party did during the second world war for exemple there is a danger that it will recur. Then, another aspect of commemorations is to, maybe, inspire young generations to defend their country in a situation of war. For this they can, for example, enrol in the army. And finally, another important goal of commemorations is the memory work . In fact, it's our duty to remember that if we are free today it's thanks to that those people who fought for our freedom and who, most of the time, lost their lives for their generation but also future generations. And, for people who lived during these wars it must be comforting to see that we are thankful for what they did for our country. To conclude, it is very important to commemorate the World Wars for many reasons all important: Commemorations avoid to reproducing the mistakes of the past, they can give the desire to youth to defend their country, and, finally, commemorations are a demonstration of the memory work.
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