Correction/avions
Cours gratuits > Forum > Forum anglais: Questions sur l'anglais || En basMessage de trauzeur posté le 20-11-2015 à 17:34:40 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
pouvez-vous m'aider s'il vous plaît à corriger ce devoir. Merci pour vos réponses.
Many years ago, travelling by plane was something only reserved for rich people because it was very expensive. With time, the airline industry has revolutionized due to low cost airlines making the majority of people able to afford it anymore. Logically, this move towards has some benefits in the society and inevitably drawbacks. In this essay, we will be presenting the pros and cons of low cost airlines.
First of all, it is important to point out the fact that low cost airline was something impossible to imagine in the beginning. But with the advancement of technology and science, things have changed a lot improving in that sense people’s lives.
One of the benefits of low cost airlines is that, almost everyone can afford an airline ticket. A middle man is now more likely to buy a ticket than it used to be. Consequently, it has made the world go faster in terms of communication, trade and so on… People can easily move from one place to another of the planet in just a few hours which is something up to a year, was only a privilege of rich people.
The other great benefit of low cost airlines is that they help people expand their business. Business people have now the opportunity to travel around the world to promote their business more easily. In terms of economic growth, it is a plus side extremely capital to a country because the business factor is at the centre of economic policies of every country in order to boost the growth.
What is more, with low cost airlines, travelling by plane is certainly the leader among means of transport. Not only it is getting safer and safer, but also it is moneysaving.
As for the downsides, we can say that the revolution of airline has also brought some major problems that need to be sorted out.
One of the biggest drawbacks of low cost airlines is that, certainly they have made the market of travel expand: which means there are more and more planes in the air. Consequently, the environment is put at risk because of the increase of carbon dioxide. Unfortunately, it has a negative impact on our planet. Greenhouse gas is more concentrated in the atmosphere creating climate change. This problem is more worrying these days. If we do not step in and take action, future generations will suffer.
Furthermore, we are now noticing that the number of crash every year is dramatically growing which raises the question of safety knowing that the likelihood of surviving a plane crash is weak. In addition to that, with the revolution of this sector, airlines are now the favourite target of terrorists.
The revolution of low cost airlines has also revolutionized the armed forces around the world which means that countries are more and more equipped for a war.
All in all, low cost airlines have certainly revolutionized travel and we’ve seen the greatest benefits in the society notably by improving people’s lives but, there are many inconvenients which people need to take care of otherwise, we will certainly put our planet at risk.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-11-2015 19:00
Réponse: Correction/avions de naomi26, postée le 21-11-2015 à 12:14:54 (S | E)
Bonjour, ici est ton devoir.
Many years ago, travelling by plane was something only reserved for rich people because it was very expensive. With time, the airline industry has revolutionized due to low cost airlines, therefore the majority of people are now able to afford it. This move towards low cost airlines has some benefits in society and inevitably has drawbacks. In this essay, we will be presenting the pros and cons of low cost airlines.
First of all, it is important to point out the fact that low cost airlines were something impossible to imagine in the beginning, but with the advancement of technology and science things have changed a lot, which has improved, in that sense, people’s lives.
One of the benefits of low cost airlines is that almost everyone can afford an airline ticket. A middle man (qui est a middle man? je pense ce doit etre a poorer person) is now more likely to buy a ticket than before. Consequently, it has made the world advance faster in terms of communication, trade and so on… People can easily move from one place to another on the planet in just a few hours which is something that was only a privilege of rich people up to a year ago.
The other great benefit of low cost airlines is that they help people expand their business. Business people now have the opportunity to travel around the world to promote their business more easily. In terms of economic growth, it is a huge benefit for the economy of a country because businesses are at the centre of economic policies, in order to boost the growth.
What is more, with low cost airlines, travelling by plane is certainly the leader among means of transport. Not only is it getting safer and safer, but also it is money saving.
As for the downsides, we can say that the revolution of airline has also brought some major problems that need to be sorted out.
One of the biggest drawbacks of low cost airlines is that they have made the market of travel expand which means there are more and more planes in the air. Consequently, the environment is put at risk because of the increase of carbon dioxide. Unfortunately, it has a negative impact on our planet: greenhouse gases are more concentrated in the atmosphere creating climate change. This problem is more worrying these days. If we do not step in and take action, future generations will suffer.
Furthermore, we are now noticing that the number of crashes every year is dramatically growing which raises the question of safety knowing that the likelihood of surviving a plane crash is weak. In addition to that, with the increase in popularity of low cost airlines, they are now the favourite target of terrorists.
The revolution of low cost airlines has also revolutionized the armed forces around the world which means that countries are more and more equipped for a war.
All in all, low cost airlines have certainly revolutionized travel and we have seen the greatest benefits in society notably by improving people’s lives, but there are many inconveniences which people need to take care of. Otherwise we will certainly put our planet at risk.
Réponse: Correction/avions de trauzeur, postée le 22-11-2015 à 14:19:04 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour cette correction. Mais j'ai un souci avec la structure d'une phrase que je n'ai pas compris.
Dans le devoir je dis :Not only it is getting safer and safer, but also...
Sur la correction vous avez dit :Not only is it getting safer and safer, but also...
Merci.
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