Correction/journal de bord
Cours gratuits > Forum > Forum anglais: Questions sur l'anglais || En basCorrection/journal de bord
Message de ldeor posté le 01-11-2015 à 17:00:21 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je suis élève en 3e et j'aurais besoin d'une correction s'il vous plait pour un devoir que j'ai fait sur la page d'un journal de bord d'un aventurier (un trappeur) . J'ai essayé de me corriger au mieux mais je pense qu'il reste encore des erreurs...
Merci d'avance pour votre aide.
Voici le texte:
On this morning, it was foggy and snowy, the thermometer was about 5 degrees.I got dresse and I put off the fire before going to the traps I had set up the day before.
There was nothing, neither in the first trap, nor in the second. But a little rabbit was snared on the third...
I returned to my camp to roast and eat the rabbit.
After this frugal meal, I gathered my compass, my candle, the pages extracted of my notebook, and my old bear fur on a wooden box.
Few minutes later, I was walking trough the wood, and digging by hand on the sow in search of plants or roots, when I saw a cave. I went inside and discovered a bear who was sleeping.
I thought that it was the opportunity to have a new bear fur. But suddenly, the woke and attacked me.So, I began to run and to shout.
Fortunately, there were some Indians hunting near to the cave. When they heard me, they came and killed the bear with spears and arrows.
-------------------
Modifié par lucile83 le 01-11-2015 17:22
Message de ldeor posté le 01-11-2015 à 17:00:21 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je suis élève en 3e et j'aurais besoin d'une correction s'il vous plait pour un devoir que j'ai fait sur la page d'un journal de bord d'un aventurier (un trappeur) . J'ai essayé de me corriger au mieux mais je pense qu'il reste encore des erreurs...
Merci d'avance pour votre aide.
Voici le texte:
On this morning, it was foggy and snowy, the thermometer was about 5 degrees.I got dresse and I put off the fire before going to the traps I had set up the day before.
There was nothing, neither in the first trap, nor in the second. But a little rabbit was snared on the third...
I returned to my camp to roast and eat the rabbit.
After this frugal meal, I gathered my compass, my candle, the pages extracted of my notebook, and my old bear fur on a wooden box.
Few minutes later, I was walking trough the wood, and digging by hand on the sow in search of plants or roots, when I saw a cave. I went inside and discovered a bear who was sleeping.
I thought that it was the opportunity to have a new bear fur. But suddenly, the woke and attacked me.So, I began to run and to shout.
Fortunately, there were some Indians hunting near to the cave. When they heard me, they came and killed the bear with spears and arrows.
-------------------
Modifié par lucile83 le 01-11-2015 17:22
Réponse: Correction/journal de bord de bluestar, postée le 01-11-2015 à 17:19:59 (S | E)
Bonjour...
Erreurs en bleu..
On this morning, it was foggy and snowy, the thermometer was about 5 degrees.I got dresse and I put off the fire before going to the traps I had set up the day before.
There was nothing, neither in the first trap, nor in the second. But a little rabbit was snared on in the third...
I returned to my camp to roast and eat the rabbit.
After this frugal meal, I gathered my compass, my candle, the pages extracted of my notebook, and my old bear fur on a wooden box.
Few minutes later, I was walking trough(orth.) the wood, and digging by hand on the sow in search of plants or roots, when I saw a cave. I went inside and discovered a bear who was sleeping.
I thought that it was the opportunity to have a new bear fur. But suddenly, the..(nom?).. woke and attacked me.So, I began to run and to shout.
Fortunately, there were some Indians hunting near
Réponse: Correction/journal de bord de ldeor, postée le 01-11-2015 à 17:37:08 (S | E)
Merci pour ton aide, je viens de voir que j'avais aussi fait des fautes de frappe!
Par contre par quoi dois -je remplacer : extracted of my notebook?
Réponse: Correction/journal de bord de bluestar, postée le 01-11-2015 à 18:44:23 (S | E)
Bonsoir..
From my notebook, pas of...
Réponse: Correction/journal de bord de ldeor, postée le 01-11-2015 à 19:11:09 (S | E)
Merci!
Cours gratuits > Forum > Forum anglais: Questions sur l'anglais
