Histoire/the chief

Histoire/the chief
Message de bishem91 posté le 26-06-2015 à 13:22:15 (S | E | F)
Bonjour
Pouvez-vous corriger ce texte svp s'il vous plait?
Merci pour os réponses.

Once upon a time, there was a chief of a tribe : chief joseph. He was terrible because he hate his people and he doesn’t give them to eat. But the youngest boy in the tribe was intelligent and he went to speak to this chief. The chief was very angry to was humiliate from a child and he run away, he left the territory and we never heard something about him.


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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-06-2015 14:00

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Réponse: Histoire/the chief de sherry48, postée le 26-06-2015 à 14:13:53 (S | E)
Hello.

1. Don't forget capital letters for names!
2. You began in the past (...there was...) and you should continue in the past.

Once upon a time, there was a chief of a tribe : chief joseph. He was terrible because he hate_ his people and he doesn’t give them ____ to eat. But the youngest boy in the tribe was intelligent and he went to speak to this chief. The chief was very angry to was humiliate_from (different preposition) a child and he run away. He left the territory and we never heard something* about him.

*You hear something or you don't hear anything. Another good way to say this would be with passive voice. Nothing..ever heard or He...never heard. I'll leave you to fill in what is missing.

Sherry

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Réponse: Histoire/the chief de bishem91, postée le 30-06-2015 à 14:27:15 (S | E)
Thank you very much for your correction:
Once upon a time, there was a chief of a tribe : chief joseph. He was terrible because he hates his people and he doesn’t give them something to eat. But the youngest boy in the tribe was intelligent and he went to speak to this chief. The chief was very angry to was humiliate by a child and he run away. He left the territory and we don't hear anything about him.

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Réponse: Histoire/the chief de bernard02, postée le 30-06-2015 à 14:45:11 (S | E)
Bonjour,

voici quelques points à corriger :
Once upon a time, there was a chief of a tribe : chief joseph (majuscule). He was terrible because he hates (non : prétérit) his people and he doesn’t (idem)give them something (non : pas 'something' dans une expression à la forme négative) to eat. But the youngest boy in the tribe was intelligent and he went to speak to this chief. The chief was very angry to was(infinitif) humiliate (faute : il manque une lettre) by a child and he run(prétérit) away. He left the territory and we don't hear (pas le bon temps) anything (pas 'anything') about him.

Bon courage !

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