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Message de marionement posté le 19-04-2015 à 15:12:15 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai écrit un texte qui s'inscrit dans la notion "Espace et échange" de mon cours d'anglais. J'aimerais avoir votre avis et une correction/explication de mes fautes de grammaire et d'orthographe. Merci d'avance à tous ceux qui prendront le temps de lire et de corriger mon texte.
The freedom space which is Internet, is it dangerous ?
The « Space » which constitute Internet is less safe than we think. When we are behind our screen we feel safe, free and untouchable. We have the sensation to control what we're doing. However, Internet isn't a safe space especially if we're not careful.
There are a lot of hidden danger on the internet. Firtst, hen you're on twitter or facebook, for example, you're never sure to know who answer to our message. I remember, few years ago, I was on Facebook. I got a message from the pseudo of my friend. I talked a little bit but I realised quickly that it wasn't my friends so I left the conversation. I learned later than my friend account has been hacked. So I talked with a stranger...
Second, when people are behind their screen, they are tendency to be more extrem and aggressiv than they are in reality. Take the example of cyberbullying. Cyberbullying is bullying that takes place using electronic technology. Electronic technology includes devices and equipment such as cell phones, computers, and tablets as well as communication tools including social media sites, text messages, chat, and websites. Cyberbullying can happen 24 hours a day, 7 days a week, and reach a kid even when he or she is alone. It can happen any time of the day or night.
Third, Internet is a « space » which never forget... When something is posted, it's very diffcult to remove it especially on social media. Peter Cashmore, a social news guru has said : « privacy is dead and social media hold the smoking gun »
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-04-2015 18:22
Message de marionement posté le 19-04-2015 à 15:12:15 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai écrit un texte qui s'inscrit dans la notion "Espace et échange" de mon cours d'anglais. J'aimerais avoir votre avis et une correction/explication de mes fautes de grammaire et d'orthographe. Merci d'avance à tous ceux qui prendront le temps de lire et de corriger mon texte.
The freedom space which is Internet, is it dangerous ?
The « Space » which constitute Internet is less safe than we think. When we are behind our screen we feel safe, free and untouchable. We have the sensation to control what we're doing. However, Internet isn't a safe space especially if we're not careful.
There are a lot of hidden danger on the internet. Firtst, hen you're on twitter or facebook, for example, you're never sure to know who answer to our message. I remember, few years ago, I was on Facebook. I got a message from the pseudo of my friend. I talked a little bit but I realised quickly that it wasn't my friends so I left the conversation. I learned later than my friend account has been hacked. So I talked with a stranger...
Second, when people are behind their screen, they are tendency to be more extrem and aggressiv than they are in reality. Take the example of cyberbullying. Cyberbullying is bullying that takes place using electronic technology. Electronic technology includes devices and equipment such as cell phones, computers, and tablets as well as communication tools including social media sites, text messages, chat, and websites. Cyberbullying can happen 24 hours a day, 7 days a week, and reach a kid even when he or she is alone. It can happen any time of the day or night.
Third, Internet is a « space » which never forget... When something is posted, it's very diffcult to remove it especially on social media. Peter Cashmore, a social news guru has said : « privacy is dead and social media hold the smoking gun »
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-04-2015 18:22
Réponse: Freedom space/Internet de violet91, postée le 19-04-2015 à 18:21:51 (S | E)
Hello,
Je vous signale d'abord où il faut faire des retouches .Vous restez trop près du francais: n'oubliez pas la forme interrogative anglaise avcec inversion du sujet.
The freedom space which is Internet, is it dangerous ? ( forme interrogative)
The « Space » which constitute Internet is less safe than we think. When we are behind ( vous êtes devant)our screen we feel safe, free and untouchable. We have the sensation to control what we're doing. However, Internet isn't a safe space especially if we're not careful.
There are a lot of hidden danger( pl) on the internet. Firtst, hen you're on twitter or facebook, for example, you're never sure to know who answer to (temps , conjugaison et pas de préposition)our message. I remember, X few years ago, I was on Facebook. I got a message from the pseudo of my friend. ( génitif ) I talked a little bit ( peu élégant)but I realised quickly that it wasn't my friends so I left the conversation. I learned later than( autre conjonction) my friend account has( temps passé) been hacked. So I talked (past perfect continuous) with a stranger...
SecondX, when people are behind their screen, they are tendency to be more extrem and aggressiv ( both spelligs)than they are in reality. Take the example of cyberbullying. Cyberbullying is bullying that takes place using electronic technology. Electronic technology includes devices and equipment such as cell phones, computers, and tablets as well as communication tools including social media sites, text messages, chat, and websites. Cyberbullying can happen 24 hours a day, 7 days a week, and reach a kid even when he or she is alone. It can happen any time of the day or night.
ThirdX, Internet is a « space » which never forget... ( 3ème sg)When something is posted, it's very diffcult to remove it especially on social media. Peter Cashmore, a social news guru has said : « privacy is dead and social media ( vous l'entendez au pl.?) hold the smoking gun »
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