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Un fin renard /Thème
Message de here4u posté le 21-02-2014 à 14:34:12 (S | E | F)
Hello Everybody !
I was told that this spot existed and that I could make other people work (My dream !
)
Here's a text over which I pored years ago.
I still have the correction and my different drafts, but I'm sure all this can be up-dated and improved ! Who will have a go ? COME ON ! 
Un fin renard.
Notre héros s'était figuré assez légèrement qu'il s'amuserait sans peine aux dépens d'une sorte de bel esprit de province, hâbleur de son métier ; Il trouva que la logique de la province vaut mieux que ses petits vers. Loin de mystifier Du Poirier, il eut toutes les peines du monde à ne pas tomber lui-même dans quelque position ridicule. Ce qu'il y a de sûr, c'est qu'il fut complètement guéri de l'ennui par la vue d'un animal aussi étrange. Du Poirier pouvait avoir cinquante ans; ses traits étaient grands et fort prononcés. Deux petits yeux gris-vert, fort enfoncés dans la tête, s'agitaient, se remuaient avec une activité étonnante et semblaient lancer des flammes : ils faisaient pardonner une longueur étonnante au nez qui les séparait. Dans beaucoup de positions, ce nez malheureux donnait au docteur la physionomie d'un renard alerte. Ce qui achevait la ressemblance, dès qu'on avait eu le malheur de l'apercevoir, c'était une épaisse forêt de cheveux d'un blond fort hasardé, qui hérissaient le front et les tempes du docteur. Au total, on ne pouvait oublier cette tête une fois qu'on l'avait vue; à Paris, elle eût peut-être fait horreur; en province, où l'on s'ennuie, tout ce qui promet une sensation est reçu avec empressement, et le docteur était à la mode.
STENDHAL, Lucien Leuwen, 1834-1835
La correction sera publiée le 13 mars après 20h.
Bon courage à tous.
here4u
Message de here4u posté le 21-02-2014 à 14:34:12 (S | E | F)
Hello Everybody !
I was told that this spot existed and that I could make other people work (My dream !
)Here's a text over which I pored years ago.
I still have the correction and my different drafts, but I'm sure all this can be up-dated and improved ! Who will have a go ? COME ON ! Un fin renard.
Notre héros s'était figuré assez légèrement qu'il s'amuserait sans peine aux dépens d'une sorte de bel esprit de province, hâbleur de son métier ; Il trouva que la logique de la province vaut mieux que ses petits vers. Loin de mystifier Du Poirier, il eut toutes les peines du monde à ne pas tomber lui-même dans quelque position ridicule. Ce qu'il y a de sûr, c'est qu'il fut complètement guéri de l'ennui par la vue d'un animal aussi étrange. Du Poirier pouvait avoir cinquante ans; ses traits étaient grands et fort prononcés. Deux petits yeux gris-vert, fort enfoncés dans la tête, s'agitaient, se remuaient avec une activité étonnante et semblaient lancer des flammes : ils faisaient pardonner une longueur étonnante au nez qui les séparait. Dans beaucoup de positions, ce nez malheureux donnait au docteur la physionomie d'un renard alerte. Ce qui achevait la ressemblance, dès qu'on avait eu le malheur de l'apercevoir, c'était une épaisse forêt de cheveux d'un blond fort hasardé, qui hérissaient le front et les tempes du docteur. Au total, on ne pouvait oublier cette tête une fois qu'on l'avait vue; à Paris, elle eût peut-être fait horreur; en province, où l'on s'ennuie, tout ce qui promet une sensation est reçu avec empressement, et le docteur était à la mode.
STENDHAL, Lucien Leuwen, 1834-1835
La correction sera publiée le 13 mars après 20h.
Bon courage à tous.
here4u
Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de notrepere, postée le 21-02-2014 à 19:27:26 (S | E)
Hello here4u. I'm glad you're here4us 
. Now, after reading your exercise, I would like to say a couple of things that people have said to me in my previous exercises:Are you trying to kill us? I think this should be at least 10 stars!
Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de gerondif, postée le 21-02-2014 à 23:21:25 (S | E)
Hello,
a rather difficult text, with expressions that don't mean anything any more (cheveux d'un blond hasardés?? je ne sais pas ce que ça veut dire) I'll improvise something in
A sly fox/ a clever fox.
Our hero had figured, somewhat light-headedly, that he could easily have fun at the expense of some country wit, since he was a bragger by trade. He found out that provincial logic is (was) better than his petty poetry. Far from mystifying Du Poirier, he found it hard (he was hard put to it) not to fall himself into a somewhat ridiculous situation. For sure, He was completely cured from boredom by the sight of such a strange animal (creature). Du Poirier could have been fifty or so.He had big rugged features.His two tiny deep-set green-grey eyes would move about with an astonishing eagerness and seemed to throw out flames. They made you forget (forgive) how amazingly long his nose was that stood out between them. In most poises of his head,that unfortunate (wretched) nose would make the doctor look like a fox on the look-out. What made the resemblance even stronger, once you had unfortunately noticed it, was a thick mane of somewhat fair hair which bristled out of the doctor's forehead and temples. With all that, it was utterly impossible to forget such a head once you had caught sight of it.In Paris, it would have horrified you, but in the country, where people easily get bored, anything bearing the promise of something sensational is eagerly welcomed, and the doctor was indeed fashionable (the latest craze)
Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de here4u, postée le 22-02-2014 à 01:00:47 (S | E)
Eh, gerondif ... you're not going to censor Stendhal, are you ?
As I'm very kind and generous
, I'm going to help on this obsolete expression : "blond fort hasardé" is a euphemism for red hair (which could have been guessed regarding a fox, couldn't it ? I'm really lenient ...
As for your fast, extraordinarily fast work ... may I remind you that you're given a lot of extra time (till March 13th) because there was a rebellion in my reception box ... yes, I am lenient indeed ...
Now, for my inability to master computing and this precise site, I'm now unable to see what you wrote, I can't remember your work ... and can't find the way to see your message now ... So, I'll come back to you later !
Anyway ... that was very courageous of you ...
Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de here4u, postée le 22-02-2014 à 01:15:36 (S | E)
HI, notrepere !
I couldn't agree more ! It's not an easy "thème" ("version" for you, which is a little 'less difficult', normally ...)
What's important is to respect the level and period of the language ... Here, we have a text of the early nineteenth century, and the great difficulty will be to render the language of the time ...(Not modern American English, I'm sorry ! )
Come on ! May the force be with all of you !
Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de mamou3, postée le 22-02-2014 à 14:26:53 (S | E)
Hello Here4u,
First, thank you for this exercise ! It's very difficult to translate that old fashion way to write but I tried to respect the spirit of Stendhal !
A cunning fox
Our hero had imagined himself rather lightly that he would have good time easily at the expense of a kind of beautiful country dumpkin, braggart as his vocation. He found that provincial logic is worth better than his small verse. Far from duping Du Poirier, he had all the trouble in the world himself not to fall into some ridiculous position. What there is sure that he was completely cured of the boredom by the vision of such a strange animal. Du Poirier could be fifty years old; his features were large and extremely marked. Two small grey-green eyes, extremely deep-set in the head, moved around continuously and seemed to cast flames: they redeemed the astonishing length of the nose which separated them. In a lot of positions, that unfortunate nose gave to the doctor the appearance of a spry fox. What completed the likeness, as soon as one had had misfortune to see it, they were a bushy forest of red hair, which bristled the forehead and the temples of the doctor. In total, you could not forget that head once you had seen it; in Paris, it would perhaps make horror; in province, where one is bored, everything that promised a feeling is received with eagerness, and the doctor was fashionable.
Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de here4u, postée le 22-02-2014 à 18:48:35 (S | E)
Thank you very much, mamou !
Glad to meet you here !
Common friends have "told me" that the "team" appreciated individual corrections (besides the official one on March 13,) and I promise I'll look through your work carefully tonight ! It's great of you to have taken the period and style of the extract into account ... The difficulty is there !
Thanks again for posting so fast ... I know that it's a real incentive for some others who have told me so ... and frankly speaking, it's the first time I have been given papers back so early in my whole teaching time !
gerondif and mamou3
s of the Fast Workers ! For all of You who might be interested ... you may take your time ! It will be great too !
Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de notrepere, postée le 23-02-2014 à 03:54:54 (S | E)
HelloThank you for this exercise.
A fine fox
Our hero had imagined, quite casually, that he could easily have some fun at some country dweller's expense, being a braggart by trade. He had found that country mores were better than his silly poetry. Far from mystifying Du Poirier, he, himself, had to be on guard not to fall into some compromising position. One thing's for sure, he was completely cured of boredom at the sight of such a strange creature. Du Poirier was probably around 50 years old. His features were grand and strongly pronounced. His beady, grey-green eyes, deeply set in his face, were agitated. They darted about with astonishing activity and seemed to shoot out flames giving pardon to the protruding nose that separated them. From most perspectives, this unfortunate nose gave the doctor the face of a fox on the prowl. That which clinched the resemblance, as soon as one had the misfortune of seeing it, was the thick mane of red hair that bristled out of the doctor's forehead and temples. To be sure, one could not forget this face once one had seen it. In Paris, it was perhaps regarded as horrific, but in the country where people were bored, anything that promised a sensation was eagerly received, and the doctor was in vogue (he was a real fox
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Modifié par notrepere le 24-02-2014 03:43
No offense (
) here4u. I have learned () always to proceed every post on the forum with my "warning flag". I've gotten () used to it. Mais ne t'inquiète pas, tu peux me corriger. (
)Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de lakata, postée le 23-02-2014 à 15:49:37 (S | E)
Hello here4u!
Don't worry! I'm coming and think I will have finished your diabolic exercise by Easter. So, be patient, please!
Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de here4u, postée le 23-02-2014 à 23:45:47 (S | E)
Well, well ! Hello Lakata
You know what ... we had our first day of Spring in Paris ...
Took advantage of it to take a long walk in the sun ...Oh Dear!
I hadn't noticed notrepere's work above your post ! Everybody can see that he's nagging me and irritating me with his 
'Stars and Stripes' ... thus meaning and making me realize that I am unable to correct his work ! Well this is mean, NP ! You're not being a good sport here ! but I forgive you ... 
Good night to all of You,(except for NP again, who will take a good walk in the rain today (sorry!
) ... Justice exists, after all ! -------------------
Modifié par here4u le 24-02-2014 08:48
Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de lakata, postée le 25-02-2014 à 19:05:22 (S | E)
Hello dear here4u !
I'm not sure I should say thank you for this theme I found extremely hard and intellectually challenging! Anyway, I did my best although the best is the enemy of good...
A clever fox.
Our hero had quite unwisely figured he would have easily fun at the depense of some country wit, a braggart by trade. He found out that the provincial logic was much better than its poor poems. Far from taking Du Poirier in, he had a devil of a job to avoid putting himself in some awkward position. What is sure is that the sight of such a strange animal cured him completely of his boredom. Du Poirier could be fifty years old ; his face was large with strongly marked features. His two small grey-green deep-set eyes moved very quickly in an amazing way and seemed to throw flames, giving, as it were, to the unusual lenght of his nose between them the opportunity to be forgiven. Depending on the tilts of the head, this unfortunate nose could often make the doctor have the appearance of a brisk fox. What put the finishing touches to the likeness, once you had been unlucky enough to catch sight of it, was a thick and boldly blond forest of hair which made his brow and temples brushy. At the end of the day, once seen, no way for this head to be forgotten ; in Paris, it might have appeared to be repulsive, but in the country, were people easily get bored, they eagerly love to thrill to something, and that was why the doctor was fashionable.
Actually, I'm happy to tell you "Thank you!" here4u!
Waiting eagerly for the next one!Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de plumet98, postée le 26-02-2014 à 02:39:01 (S | E)
Hello,
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Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de here4u, postée le 26-02-2014 à 15:25:26 (S | E)
Hello, plumet
! Very very happy to welcome you here ! Thank you for your contribution to my challenge ! I'll sent you (and lakata! sorry, dear !
, I'm having a hard time keeping up with everything just now ...) your individual corrections asap ! Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de lakata, postée le 26-02-2014 à 16:55:05 (S | E)
Don't be sorry, dear U! Take your time!
Réponse: Un fin renard /Thème de zodiac97500, postée le 26-02-2014 à 22:10:21 (S | E)
Hello
Thanks again ! 
Sure, she is ! Undoubtedly ! 
Hello, everyone ! 