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Message de bend86 posté le 11-02-2014 à 22:39:09 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous et à toutes,
Pour la semaine prochaine prochaine je dois faire un exposé oral sur un héros/personnage qui a des sortes de pouvoir et j'ai choisi Astérix :D . Je dois résumer un des ses exploits, j'ai donc choisi de résumer le tome 1. Le problème c'est que l'on doit tout mettre aux temps du passé et malheureusement le passé n'est pas mon fort.
Donc si vous avez le temps j'aimerais bien que vous vérifiiez la conjugaison de mon texte.
Centurion Crismus Bonus, head of the Roman garrison at the fortified camp of Compendium was very keen on discovering the secret of the Gauls' superhuman strength after so he sent a spy disguised as a Gaul into the village. The spy reported his discovery back to the Centurion. Crismus believed that with this potion, he could overthrow Julius Caesar, and became Emperor himself. So, he ordered to kidnap the druid and then he tortured him.
Asterix learnt of Getafix's capture, and managed to sneak into the Roman camp where Getafix was being held captive. He heard Crismus was planning to overthrow Caesar using the magic potion. Asterix found Getafix and they concocted a scheme to trouble the Romans. Getafix pretended to agree to the Centurion's ultimatum of making the potion, and demanded unusual ingredients. While Crismus soldiers try to found this unusual ingredients, Asterix and Getafix were lounging around in comparative luxury, enjoying themselves at the Romans' expense.
After all the ingredients were found, Getafix prepared a fake potion. The Romans had tested it on one man , and when he tested his strength on Asterix, Asterix pretended to be knocked out. The Romans had drunk the potion and all of them were poisoned. They pleaded with Getafix to made an antidote, so he did an antidote and he also prepared a small quantity of the real magic potion for Asterix to drank so that they could fight their way out.
As Getafix and Asterix were attempting to escape, they were stopped by a huge army of Roman reinforcements are captured again. It turned out that Julius Caesar was leading the army and checking on the condition of the area. Upon meeting Asterix and Getafix, Caesar learnt of Crismus Bonus' intentions. He punished Crismus and frees Asterix and Getafix for giving him the information, while reminding them that they are still enemies.
Comme vous pouvez le voir je vous ai mis les verbes en rose pour bien les voir.
Et sinon j'ai appris les différents cours de ce site sur les temps du passé mais je fais toujours plein de fautes...
J'espère que l'un de vous aura le temps et la gentillesse de m'aider, sinon merci quand même d'avoir pris la peine de lire ce post.
Cordialement,
Bend86
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Modifié par lucile83 le 11-02-2014 23:13
Evitez le rose s'il vous plaît, merci.
Message de bend86 posté le 11-02-2014 à 22:39:09 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous et à toutes,
Pour la semaine prochaine prochaine je dois faire un exposé oral sur un héros/personnage qui a des sortes de pouvoir et j'ai choisi Astérix :D . Je dois résumer un des ses exploits, j'ai donc choisi de résumer le tome 1. Le problème c'est que l'on doit tout mettre aux temps du passé et malheureusement le passé n'est pas mon fort.
Donc si vous avez le temps j'aimerais bien que vous vérifiiez la conjugaison de mon texte.
Centurion Crismus Bonus, head of the Roman garrison at the fortified camp of Compendium was very keen on discovering the secret of the Gauls' superhuman strength after so he sent a spy disguised as a Gaul into the village. The spy reported his discovery back to the Centurion. Crismus believed that with this potion, he could overthrow Julius Caesar, and became Emperor himself. So, he ordered to kidnap the druid and then he tortured him.
Asterix learnt of Getafix's capture, and managed to sneak into the Roman camp where Getafix was being held captive. He heard Crismus was planning to overthrow Caesar using the magic potion. Asterix found Getafix and they concocted a scheme to trouble the Romans. Getafix pretended to agree to the Centurion's ultimatum of making the potion, and demanded unusual ingredients. While Crismus soldiers try to found this unusual ingredients, Asterix and Getafix were lounging around in comparative luxury, enjoying themselves at the Romans' expense.
After all the ingredients were found, Getafix prepared a fake potion. The Romans had tested it on one man , and when he tested his strength on Asterix, Asterix pretended to be knocked out. The Romans had drunk the potion and all of them were poisoned. They pleaded with Getafix to made an antidote, so he did an antidote and he also prepared a small quantity of the real magic potion for Asterix to drank so that they could fight their way out.
As Getafix and Asterix were attempting to escape, they were stopped by a huge army of Roman reinforcements are captured again. It turned out that Julius Caesar was leading the army and checking on the condition of the area. Upon meeting Asterix and Getafix, Caesar learnt of Crismus Bonus' intentions. He punished Crismus and frees Asterix and Getafix for giving him the information, while reminding them that they are still enemies.
Comme vous pouvez le voir je vous ai mis les verbes en rose pour bien les voir.
Et sinon j'ai appris les différents cours de ce site sur les temps du passé mais je fais toujours plein de fautes...
J'espère que l'un de vous aura le temps et la gentillesse de m'aider, sinon merci quand même d'avoir pris la peine de lire ce post.
Cordialement,
Bend86
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Modifié par lucile83 le 11-02-2014 23:13
Evitez le rose s'il vous plaît, merci.
Réponse: Correction/ passé de gerondif, postée le 11-02-2014 à 22:56:09 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
c'est bien, vous n'avez pas raté grand chose:
bleu erreurs
vert: corrections offertes
Centurion Crismus Bonus, head of the Roman garrison at the fortified camp of Compendium was very (eager to + infinitif irait mieux)keen on discovering the secret of the Gauls' superhuman strength
Asterix learnt of Getafix's capture, and managed to sneak into the Roman camp where Getafix was being held captive. He heard Crismus was planning to overthrow Caesar using the magic potion. Asterix found Getafix and they concocted a scheme to trouble(to annoy?) the Romans. Getafix pretended to agree to the Centurion's ultimatum of making the potion, and demanded unusual ingredients. While Crismus soldiers try(prétérit en ing) to found this unusual ingredients, Asterix and Getafix were lounging around in comparative luxury, enjoying themselves at the Romans' expense.
After all the ingredients were (had been) found, Getafix prepared a fake potion. The Romans had tested it on one man , and when he tested his strength on Asterix, Asterix pretended to be knocked out. The Romans (had) drunk the potion and all of them were poisoned. They pleaded with Getafix to made an antidote, so he did(made) an antidote and he also prepared a small quantity of the real magic potion for Asterix to drank (infinitif) so that they could fight their way out.
As Getafix and Asterix were attempting to escape, they were stopped by a huge army of Roman reinforcements and captured again. It turned out that Julius Caesar was leading the army and checking on the condition of the area. Upon meeting Asterix and Getafix, Caesar learnt of Crismus Bonus's intentions. He punished Crismus and freed Asterix and Getafix for giving him the information, while reminding them that they are (prétérit) still enemies.
Réponse: Correction/ passé de chantal91, postée le 12-02-2014 à 14:00:18 (S | E)
Centurion Crismus Bonus, head of the Roman garrison at the fortified camp of Compendium was very keen on discovering the secret of the Gauls' superhuman strength after (pourquoi ce mot?) so he sent a spy disguised as a Gaul into the village. The spy reported his discovery back to the Centurion. Crismus believed that with this potion, he could overthrow Julius Caesar, and became become Emperor himself. So, he ordered to kidnap the druid and then he tortured him.
Asterix learnt of Getafix's capture, and managed to sneak into the Roman camp where Getafix was being held captive. He heard Crismus was planning to overthrow Caesar using the magic potion. Asterix found Getafix and they concocted a scheme to trouble the Romans. Getafix pretended to agree to the Centurion's ultimatum of making the potion, and demanded unusual ingredients. While Crismus soldiers tried to find these unusual ingredients, Asterix and Getafix were lounging around in relative luxury, enjoying themselves at the Romans' expense.
After all the ingredients were found, Getafix prepared a fake potion. The Romans had tested it on one man , and when he tested his strength on Asterix, Asterix pretended to be knocked out. The Romans had drunk the potion and all of them were poisoned. They pleaded with Getafix to make an antidote, so he did so and he also prepared a small quantity of the real magic potion for Asterix to drink so that they could fight their way out.
As Getafix and Asterix were attempting to escape, they were stopped by a huge army of Roman reinforcements and captured again. It turned out that Julius Caesar was leading the army and checking on the condition of the area. Upon meeting Asterix and Getafix, Caesar learnt of Crismus Bonus' intentions. He punished Crismus and freed Asterix and Getafix for giving him the information, while reminding them that they were still enemies.
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