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Message de kaleid posté le 29-12-2013 à 23:36:05 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je souhaiterais que quelqu'un m'aide en corrigeant mes fautes de mon exposé sur William Shakespeare.Je tiens à préciser que mon exposé est assez long, donc je comprendrais que personne ne veuille le corriger (en plus, il est sûrement rempli de fautes que je n'ai pas remarquées). Donc, je tiens à remercier ceux (ou celles) qui auront l'amabilité, le temps ainsi que la gentillesse de bien vouloir m'aider.
I am going to focus on the life of the famous english playwriht :William Shakespeare.
The document represent this famous author.
William Shakespeare was porn at Stratford-upon-Avon in 1594 and he died in the same city in 1616.When he was born, he was christened.
This document refer to position of Stratfor-upon-Avon.We can see it is in the middle of England.After this picture, they are photo of Stratford-upon-Avon.We can notice a bridge and also the house' of William Shakespeare.
William Shakespeare was the son of John Shakespeare a tradesman of Stratford and Mary Arden.William was the eldest son and third child of his family.
The picture focus on the father of William Shakespeare.We can see William Shakespeare look like is father.
When he has 18, he maried with Anne Hathaway in the temple Grafton in 1582 and he has 3 son named Susanna, Hamnet and Judith.
The document refer to the temple Grafton.We can notice is a very magnificent church.
Shakespeare has also go in the highly reputed school "King Edward VI"
We can see in this photo the greatly school "Edward VI".
The years following 1580 are the years also know as the lost years of William Shakespeare.
Shakespeare has renowned as a famous playwright, thanks to drama like Hamlet who was published in 1601; Orthello in 1604 or Romeo and Juliette.
In 1594,Shakespeare was committed in the troop of James
Burbage.The troop name was "the troop of Lord Chamberlain".
Before he died,Shakespeare wrotte himself his epitaph.
"My friend, for the love of the Savior,abstain
Dig the dirt off me.
Blessed is the man who will save these stones
But cursed be he violating my ossuary"
The legend tell there are works unprecedented of the author, but nobody has verified by fear of the curse.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-12-2013 07:46
Message de kaleid posté le 29-12-2013 à 23:36:05 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je souhaiterais que quelqu'un m'aide en corrigeant mes fautes de mon exposé sur William Shakespeare.Je tiens à préciser que mon exposé est assez long, donc je comprendrais que personne ne veuille le corriger (en plus, il est sûrement rempli de fautes que je n'ai pas remarquées). Donc, je tiens à remercier ceux (ou celles) qui auront l'amabilité, le temps ainsi que la gentillesse de bien vouloir m'aider.
I am going to focus on the life of the famous english playwriht :William Shakespeare.
The document represent this famous author.
William Shakespeare was porn at Stratford-upon-Avon in 1594 and he died in the same city in 1616.When he was born, he was christened.
This document refer to position of Stratfor-upon-Avon.We can see it is in the middle of England.After this picture, they are photo of Stratford-upon-Avon.We can notice a bridge and also the house' of William Shakespeare.
William Shakespeare was the son of John Shakespeare a tradesman of Stratford and Mary Arden.William was the eldest son and third child of his family.
The picture focus on the father of William Shakespeare.We can see William Shakespeare look like is father.
When he has 18, he maried with Anne Hathaway in the temple Grafton in 1582 and he has 3 son named Susanna, Hamnet and Judith.
The document refer to the temple Grafton.We can notice is a very magnificent church.
Shakespeare has also go in the highly reputed school "King Edward VI"
We can see in this photo the greatly school "Edward VI".
The years following 1580 are the years also know as the lost years of William Shakespeare.
Shakespeare has renowned as a famous playwright, thanks to drama like Hamlet who was published in 1601; Orthello in 1604 or Romeo and Juliette.
In 1594,Shakespeare was committed in the troop of James
Burbage.The troop name was "the troop of Lord Chamberlain".
Before he died,Shakespeare wrotte himself his epitaph.
"My friend, for the love of the Savior,abstain
Dig the dirt off me.
Blessed is the man who will save these stones
But cursed be he violating my ossuary"
The legend tell there are works unprecedented of the author, but nobody has verified by fear of the curse.
-------------------
Modifié par lucile83 le 30-12-2013 07:46
Réponse: Correction/William Shakespeare de linsey34, postée le 30-12-2013 à 00:28:44 (S | E)
Bonjour,
I am going to focus on the life of the famous english playwriht :William Shakespeare.
The document represent this famous author.
William Shakespeare was porn at Stratford-upon-Avon in 1594 and he died in the same city in 1616.When he was born, he was christened.
This document refer to position of Stratfor-upon-Avon.We can see it is in the middle of England.After this picture, they are photo of Stratford-upon-Avon.We can notice a bridge and also the house' of William Shakespeare.
William Shakespeare was the son of John Shakespeare a tradesman of Stratford and Mary Arden.William was the eldest son and third child of his family.
The picture focus on the father of William Shakespeare.We can see William Shakespeare look like is father.
When he has 18, he maried with Anne Hathaway in the temple Grafton in 1582 and he has 3 son named Susanna, Hamnet and Judith.
The document refer to the temple Grafton.We can notice is a very magnificent church.
Shakespeare has also go in the highly reputed school "King Edward VI"
We can see in this photo the greatly school "Edward VI".
The years following 1580 are the years also know as the lost years of William Shakespeare.
Shakespeare has renowned as a famous playwright, thanks to drama like Hamlet who was published in 1601; Orthello in 1604 or Romeo and Juliette.
In 1594,Shakespeare was committed in the troop of James
Burbage.The troop name was "the troop of Lord Chamberlain".
Before he died,Shakespeare wrotte himself his epitaph.
"My friend, for the love of the Savior,abstain
Dig the dirt off me.
Blessed is the man who will save these stones
But cursed be he violating my ossuary"
The legend tell there are works unprecedented of the author, but nobody has verified by fear of the curse.
Réponse: Correction/William Shakespeare de kaleid, postée le 30-12-2013 à 12:50:56 (S | E)
Je te remercie sincèrement de m'avoir aidé pour exposé sur Shakespeare en le corrigeant.
Sur ce je te souhaite une bonne fin de journée ainsi qu'une bonne fin d'année
et encore merci pour ton aide qui m'aura été précieuse.-------------------
Modifié par lucile83 le 30-12-2013 14:16
Réponse: Correction/William Shakespeare de bluestar, postée le 30-12-2013 à 14:07:05 (S | E)
Hello,
A few small points.
Shakespeare had one son and two daughters, not three sons.
"The troop of Lord Chamberlain" is usually called the "Lord Chamberlains Men".
Orthello..Juliette
Réponse: Correction/William Shakespeare de kaleid, postée le 30-12-2013 à 14:16:31 (S | E)
Thank you!
Réponse: Correction/William Shakespeare de kaleid, postée le 30-12-2013 à 17:53:44 (S | E)
Après correction (j'ai eu du mal), voici ce que j'ai obtenu. Quelqu'un pourrait-il s'il vous plait me recorriger. Merci d'avance à ceux qui le feront et encore merci à linsey34 et à bluestar.
I am going to focus on the life of the famous english(J'ai pas trouvé) playwriht :William Shakespeare.
The document represent(J'ai pas trouvé aussi) this famous author.
William Shakespeare was born at Stratford-upon-Avon in 1594 and he died in the same city in 1616.When he was born, he was christened.
This document refers to the position of Stratford-upon-Avon.We can see it is in the middle of England.After this picture, there are photo of Stratford-upon-Avon.We can notice a bridge and also the house of William Shakespeare.
William Shakespeare was the son of John Shakespeare a tradesman of Stratford and Mary Arden.William was the eldest son and third child of his family.
The picture focus (Je n'ai point trouvé la faute) on the father of William Shakespeare.We can see William Shakespeare looks like his father.
When he had 18, he maried Anne Hathaway in the temple Grafton (J'ai pas trouvé la faute) in 1582 and he had 3 son named Susanna, Hamnet and Judith.
The document refers to the temple Grafton.We can notice is (J'ai pas trouvé ici aussi) a very magnificent church.
Shakespeare was also go in the highly repute school "King Edward VI"
We can see in this photo the greatly(Pareil, j'ai pas trouvé) school "Edward VI".
The years following 1580 are the years also knew as the lost years of William Shakespeare.
Shakespeare was renowned as a famous playwright, thanks to drama like Hamlet in 1601; Othello in 1604 or Romeo and Juliet.
In 1594,Shakespeare was committed in the troop of James
Burbage,the troop was usually called "Lord Chamberlains Men"
Before he died,Shakespeare wrote itself his epitaph.
"My friend, for the love of the Savior,abstain
Dig the dirt off me.
Blessed is the man who will save these stones
But cursed be he violating my ossuary"
The legend say there are in his ossuary works unprecedented of the author, but nobody has verified by fear of the curse.
-------------------
Modifié par lucile83 le 30-12-2013 17:57
Erreurs en bleu, pas en rouge, merci.
Réponse: Correction/William Shakespeare de linsey34, postée le 30-12-2013 à 22:34:06 (S | E)
You're welcome
I am going to focus on the life of the famous english(J'ai pas trouvé) playwriht :William Shakespeare.
English with a capital letter
The document represent(J'ai pas trouvé aussi) this famous author.
Sujet = the document = it / Il faut maintenant accorder le verbe avec le sujet 
William Shakespeare was born at Stratford-upon-Avon in 1594 and he died in the same city in 1616.When he was born, he was christened.
This document refers to the position of Stratford-upon-Avon.We can see it is in the middle of England.After this picture, there are photos of Stratford-upon-Avon.We can notice a bridge and also the house of William Shakespeare.
William Shakespeare was the son of John Shakespeare a tradesman of Stratford and Mary Arden.William was the eldest son and third child of his family.
The picture focus (Je n'ai point trouvé la faute) on the father of William Shakespeare.We can see William Shakespeare looks like his father.
Verbe: focus à accorder avec le sujet "the picture"
When he had 18, he married Anne Hathaway in the temple Grafton (J'ai pas trouvé la faute) in 1582 and he had 3 son named Susanna, Hamnet and Judith.
Quel auxiliaire pour donner l'âge ? Have or be ?
Grafton temple
The document refers to the temple Grafton.We can notice there is (J'ai pas trouvé ici aussi) a very magnificent church.
Shakespeare was also go in the highly repute school "King Edward VI"
C'est bien du preterit mais quel est le preterit du verbe GO ?
We can see in this photo the great
The years following 1580 are the years also knew as the lost years of William Shakespeare.
Non, participe passé !
Shakespeare was renowned as a famous playwright, thanks to drama like Hamlet in 1601; Othello in 1604 or Romeo and Juliet.
In 1594,Shakespeare was committed in the troop of James
Burbage,the troop was usually called "Lord Chamberlains Men"
Before he died,Shakespeare wrote itself his epitaph.
himself était OK
C'est l'ordre des mots qui ne va pas!"My friend, for the love of the Savior,abstain
Dig the dirt off me.
Blessed is the man who will save these stones
But cursed be he violating my ossuary"
The legend say: verbe à accorder there are in his ossuary works unprecedented: ordre des mots of the author, but nobody has verified by fear of the curse.
Réponse: Correction/William Shakespeare de kaleid, postée le 30-12-2013 à 23:46:30 (S | E)
Voilà, je pense que là tout est bon ( sauf un endroit où j'ai un petit doute). Sinon encore merci linsey34 (tellement que je dit "merci" je sais plus où j'en suis
), tu m'as beaucoup aidé et appris en même temps que je suis (presque) sûr de ne plus faire des fautes aussi bête. Encore merci et passe une bonne fin de soirée.Sinon je voudrais aussi si c'est possible ton avis ou celui de quelqu'un qui s'y connait sur mon exposée.Si j'ai été assez précis ou si il y a assez d'informations.Je sais que je demande beaucoup mais je veux vraiment réussir mon exposée car j'ai dejà réussi à avoir un 16,5 (coefficient 3) en anglais choses qui m'arrive jamais ( comme quoi les efforts finissent par payer).
I am going to focus on the life of the famous English playwriht :William Shakespeare.
The document represents this famous author.
William Shakespeare was born at Stratford-upon-Avon in 1594 and he died in the same city in 1616.When he was born, he was christened.
This document refers to the position of Stratford-upon-Avon.We can see it is in the middle of England.After this picture, there are photo of Stratford-upon-Avon.We can notice a bridge and also the house of William Shakespeare.
William Shakespeare was the son of John Shakespeare a tradesman of Stratford and Mary Arden.William was the eldest son and third child of his family.
The picture focuses on the father of William Shakespeare.We can see William Shakespeare looks like his father.
When he was 18, he maried Anne Hathaway in the Grafton temple in 1582 and he had 3 son named Susanna, Hamnet and Judith.
The document refers to the Grafton temple.We can notice there is a very magnificent church.
Shakespeare is also went in the highly repute school "King Edward VI"
We can see in this photo the greatly school "Edward VI".
The years following 1580 are the years also known as the lost years of William Shakespeare.
Shakespeare was renowned as a famous playwright, thanks to drama like Hamlet in 1601; Othello in 1604 or Romeo and Juliet.
In 1594,Shakespeare was committed in the troop of James
Burbage,the troop was usually called "Lord Chamberlains Men"
Before he died,Shakespeare himself wrote his epitaph.
"My friend, for the love of the Savior,abstain
Dig the dirt off me.
Blessed is the man who will save these stones
But cursed be he violating my ossuary"
The legend says there are in his ossuary unprecedented works of the author, but nobody has verified by fear of the curse.
Réponse: Correction/William Shakespeare de linsey34, postée le 31-12-2013 à 00:17:46 (S | E)
Well done kaleid
Tes erreurs ne sont pas bêtes ! You're learning
Quelques remarques:
After this picture, there are photo of Stratford-upon-Avon.
Singulier ou pluriel ?
William Shakespeare was the son of John Shakespeare a tradesman of Stratford
Il faut changer la préposition !
When he was 18, he maried Anne Hathaway
avec 2 R à "maried"
and he had 3 son named Susanna, Hamnet and Judith.
Comme il l'avait été dit précédemment par bluestar
Shakespeare
Pourquoi garder l'auxiliaire BE ? Useless
"repute" ? Ici il faut un adjectif
Je suis certaine que tu en connais un très commun pour dire "célèbre" !We can see in this photo the greatly school "Edward VI".
Pourquoi la marque -ly qui fait de l'adjectif un adverbe ?
Réponse: Correction/William Shakespeare de bluestar, postée le 31-12-2013 à 10:11:59 (S | E)
Bonjour..
playwright -- in the first line
"in the temple Grafton"....No, Temple Grafton is the name of a village, not a church or a temple, so "in Temple Grafton" is correct.
Réponse: Correction/William Shakespeare de kaleid, postée le 31-12-2013 à 10:25:36 (S | E)
D'accord encore un GROS merci pour votre aide qui m'aura vraiment appris beaucoup de choses.
Et je vous prie de m'excuser pour avoir pris de votre temps alors que c'était les vacances ( pour la plupart des gens).
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