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Message de mar4gaux posté le 30-11-2013 à 17:31:48 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai un devoir oral à rendre sur les héros.
Voici mon écrit: Pouvez-vous le corriger s'il vous plai?
Bon weekend à vous.
In our world, there are famous heores like both:
- Winston Churchill was born in November 1874 and died in January 1965. He was th sixtyfirst prime minister of the united kingdom. He governed it during the second world war and has been returned again in 1950.
The second world war has been disastrous and Churchill, thanks to his speeches, gave courage and hope for English people. He was very good strategist who attacked and defended with acumen: "You ask, what is our policy? I will say it is to wage war by sea, land and air.".
Churchill was brave and strong. He was a man who said the truth: "I have nothing to offet but blood, toil, hears and sweat."
He was also a good speaker who passed on his courage to his patriotes: "you ask, what is our aim? I can answer in one word VICTORY!"
Thanks to these heroes, after war, there was peace.
- Rosa Parks was born in February 1913 and died in October 2005. She was an American woman who fight against segregation. Firstly she was dress-maker but after she was an activist.
She was brave, like Churchill, because she confronted the whites to have the same rights that them.
In December 1955, she was sitted on a place reserved to the whites and she refused to give her sit to a white then she was tossed in prison and has been famous.
This woman was the changing and even if she was firstly rejected, nowadays everbody considere her as a hero.
But there also are anonymous people who contribute to the good of the world:
- There are occupations which help people, save people or learn the life to children as teachers, doctors, policemen and firemen.
The firemen save lives everyday from fire or other. They are not famous and don't need to be it but they want to be necessary.
The teachers are also heroes like Grant in "A lesson before dying" written by M. Gaines in 1993. He gives hope to Jefferson who has been sentenced to death for a murder he did not commit.
All of them are not famous but society needs them everyday because with out them it will be desastrous.
They are daily heroes.
- In the world, there are people who help others. Their job is to do what the city doesn't do. They are called the "real-life superheroes".
Their goal is not to save people but to help people in the everyday life. They want to rise against insecurity.
These real life superheroes think about others before them and fight against apathy.
They also want to remain anonymous so they don't have many friend.
PS. Comment pourrais-je dire: d'après la définition?
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-11-2013 17:51
Message de mar4gaux posté le 30-11-2013 à 17:31:48 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai un devoir oral à rendre sur les héros.
Voici mon écrit: Pouvez-vous le corriger s'il vous plai?
Bon weekend à vous.
In our world, there are famous heores like both:
- Winston Churchill was born in November 1874 and died in January 1965. He was th sixtyfirst prime minister of the united kingdom. He governed it during the second world war and has been returned again in 1950.
The second world war has been disastrous and Churchill, thanks to his speeches, gave courage and hope for English people. He was very good strategist who attacked and defended with acumen: "You ask, what is our policy? I will say it is to wage war by sea, land and air.".
Churchill was brave and strong. He was a man who said the truth: "I have nothing to offet but blood, toil, hears and sweat."
He was also a good speaker who passed on his courage to his patriotes: "you ask, what is our aim? I can answer in one word VICTORY!"
Thanks to these heroes, after war, there was peace.
- Rosa Parks was born in February 1913 and died in October 2005. She was an American woman who fight against segregation. Firstly she was dress-maker but after she was an activist.
She was brave, like Churchill, because she confronted the whites to have the same rights that them.
In December 1955, she was sitted on a place reserved to the whites and she refused to give her sit to a white then she was tossed in prison and has been famous.
This woman was the changing and even if she was firstly rejected, nowadays everbody considere her as a hero.
But there also are anonymous people who contribute to the good of the world:
- There are occupations which help people, save people or learn the life to children as teachers, doctors, policemen and firemen.
The firemen save lives everyday from fire or other. They are not famous and don't need to be it but they want to be necessary.
The teachers are also heroes like Grant in "A lesson before dying" written by M. Gaines in 1993. He gives hope to Jefferson who has been sentenced to death for a murder he did not commit.
All of them are not famous but society needs them everyday because with out them it will be desastrous.
They are daily heroes.
- In the world, there are people who help others. Their job is to do what the city doesn't do. They are called the "real-life superheroes".
Their goal is not to save people but to help people in the everyday life. They want to rise against insecurity.
These real life superheroes think about others before them and fight against apathy.
They also want to remain anonymous so they don't have many friend.
PS. Comment pourrais-je dire: d'après la définition?
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-11-2013 17:51
Réponse: Devoir héros/correction de tagada2, postée le 30-11-2013 à 22:16:56 (S | E)
Hello,
In our world, there are famous heroes like Winston Churchill and Rosa Parks.
Winston Churchillwas born in November 1874 and died in January 1965. He was the sixtyfirst Prime Minister of the United Kingdom. He governed it during second world war and has been returned again in 1950. (JE NE COMPRENDS PAS)
Second world war was disastrous and Churchill, thanks to his speeches, gave courage and hope to the English people. He was a very good strategist who attacked and defended with acumen: "You ask, what is our policy? I will say it is to wage war by sea, land and air.".
Churchill was brave and strong. He was known to say the truth: "I have nothing to offet but blood, toil, hears and sweat."
He was also a good speaker who passed on his courage to his patriotes: "you ask, what is our aim? I can answer in one word VICTORY!"
Thanks to these heroes, after war, there was peace.
- Rosa Parks was born in February 1913 and died in October 2005. She was an American woman who fight against segregation. Firstly she was dress-maker but after she was an activist.
She was brave, like Churchill, because she confronted the whites to have the same rights.
In December 1955, she was sitted on a place in a bus reserved to white people and she refused to give her seat to one of them then she was tossed in prison and has been famous.
This woman embodies change and even if she was firstly rejected, nowadays everbody consider her as a heroin.
But there also are anonymous people who contribute to the good of the world:
- There are associations which help people, save them or learn things of life to children as teachers, doctors, policemen and firemen.
For instance, firemen save million of lifes everyday from fire or other. They are not famous and don't need to be but they
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-12-2013 08:44
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