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Message de effemere posté le 20-05-2013 à 18:09:26 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
J'aimerais,s'il vous plait,que quelqu'un m'aide à corriger ce que j'ai écrit pour mon oral de bac ...
Merci beaucoup par avance
In a theme myths and heroes we talk about spies their lifestyle and their characteristics
We can ask a question: can we consider spies as heroes?
In a first part we will see how spies are in movies and after we will see what are differences between what spies on fiction are and what they are for real.
In this firth part we will see how spies are in movies with a famous example: James bond.
In class we studied a movie poster. We can see in this poster James bond who is aiming at a woman who is holding a crossbow. Actually we see only the legs on bottoms of this woman. She is wearing a swimming suit and high heel we can see that her skin in shinny and tanned. This woman is therefore sexy and seductive but she is very dangerous because she is armed. So we can say she is a femme fatale. James bond is wearing clean and elegant tuxedo. Around the two characters we can see some actions scenes like a man who are cling to a helicopter or a frog man who is attacked by a shark.
Thanks to this poster we can bring out a certain image of spies. They haven’t a boring live they ever life in action and sometimes they put their life in dangers but they are always alive and clean without hurt. However their enemies are beautiful, we want almost being in the place of the spies because movies give us that they have a lavish lifestyle, we admire them we want to be them as we want to be a hero. Spies are represented like heroes in this type of movies. But to my mind it’s only a stereotype almost lies.
Now we will see how spies are in real. Their principal goals are to have some intelligence from their enemies. For that they must have a particular personality. As a hero they must be brave and without doubt. They must be able to adapt in to all situation and they don’t be afraid of danger. But it’s maybe the only common trait with a hero .In fact they lie every times to protect their cover to carry out their mission. Sometimes they are confront to unfair situations and they have to make like if they don’t know it .Like it’s descript in the text that we have studies in class “CIA dairies”.
A part of them are outlaw because they take the right to kill while it’s forbidden. So they are not heroes like we can see in movies. Moreover they don’t have a lavish and beautiful lifestyle like we can see in spying movies. They have to protect themselves and sometimes they fail and they are in danger. They can be kidnapped they are in the mercy of their enemy they can suffer of blackmail of some people who wants discover him. So they are all times in danger that’s why they can’t have a normal family life so they haven’t a perfect quite beautiful life as we see in movie.
So in conclusion we can say when we speak about spies we think above all the film characters who save the world in secret but a spy can’t be called a heroes because they according with the definition of heroes
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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-05-2013 18:23
Message de effemere posté le 20-05-2013 à 18:09:26 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
J'aimerais,s'il vous plait,que quelqu'un m'aide à corriger ce que j'ai écrit pour mon oral de bac ...
Merci beaucoup par avance
In a theme myths and heroes we talk about spies their lifestyle and their characteristics
We can ask a question: can we consider spies as heroes?
In a first part we will see how spies are in movies and after we will see what are differences between what spies on fiction are and what they are for real.
In this firth part we will see how spies are in movies with a famous example: James bond.
In class we studied a movie poster. We can see in this poster James bond who is aiming at a woman who is holding a crossbow. Actually we see only the legs on bottoms of this woman. She is wearing a swimming suit and high heel we can see that her skin in shinny and tanned. This woman is therefore sexy and seductive but she is very dangerous because she is armed. So we can say she is a femme fatale. James bond is wearing clean and elegant tuxedo. Around the two characters we can see some actions scenes like a man who are cling to a helicopter or a frog man who is attacked by a shark.
Thanks to this poster we can bring out a certain image of spies. They haven’t a boring live they ever life in action and sometimes they put their life in dangers but they are always alive and clean without hurt. However their enemies are beautiful, we want almost being in the place of the spies because movies give us that they have a lavish lifestyle, we admire them we want to be them as we want to be a hero. Spies are represented like heroes in this type of movies. But to my mind it’s only a stereotype almost lies.
Now we will see how spies are in real. Their principal goals are to have some intelligence from their enemies. For that they must have a particular personality. As a hero they must be brave and without doubt. They must be able to adapt in to all situation and they don’t be afraid of danger. But it’s maybe the only common trait with a hero .In fact they lie every times to protect their cover to carry out their mission. Sometimes they are confront to unfair situations and they have to make like if they don’t know it .Like it’s descript in the text that we have studies in class “CIA dairies”.
A part of them are outlaw because they take the right to kill while it’s forbidden. So they are not heroes like we can see in movies. Moreover they don’t have a lavish and beautiful lifestyle like we can see in spying movies. They have to protect themselves and sometimes they fail and they are in danger. They can be kidnapped they are in the mercy of their enemy they can suffer of blackmail of some people who wants discover him. So they are all times in danger that’s why they can’t have a normal family life so they haven’t a perfect quite beautiful life as we see in movie.
So in conclusion we can say when we speak about spies we think above all the film characters who save the world in secret but a spy can’t be called a heroes because they according with the definition of heroes
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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-05-2013 18:23
Réponse: Correction/Mythes et héros de effemere, postée le 21-05-2013 à 20:06:50 (S | E)
Please ?
I would like some help
Réponse: Correction/Mythes et héros de hushpuppy, postée le 21-05-2013 à 21:30:12 (S | E)
Bonjour,
C'est bien, il y a des corrections en bleu et les suggestions en vert
In a(article défini) theme "myths and heroes" we talk about spies, their lifestyle(pluriel) and their characteristics
We can ask a(démonstratif) question: can we consider spies as heroes?
In a first part we will take a look at
In this first part we will see how spies appear to be in movies with a famous example: James Bond.
In class we studied a movie poster. We can see James bond in this poster who is aiming (article+nom) at a woman who is holding a crossbow. Actually we see only the legs
Thanks to this poster we can bring out a certain image of spies. They haven’t a boring live they ever life(always live?) in action and sometimes they put their life in dangers(singulier) but they always remain alive and clean of injuries. However their enemies are beautiful, we want almost being(être) in the place of the spies because movies give us the impression that they have a lavish lifestyle, we admire them we want to be like them as we want to be a hero. Spies are represented like heroes in this(pluriel) type(pluriel) of movies. But to(autre préposition) my mind it’s only a myth, maybe even lies.
Now we will see how spies are in real life. Their principal goals are to gain intelligence from their enemies. For that they must have a particular personality. As a hero they must be brave and without doubt. They must be able to adapt
Some of them are outlaw(pluriel) because they take the right to kill even though it’s forbidden. So they are not heroes like we can see in movies. Moreover they don’t have a lavish and beautiful lifestyle like we
So in conclusion we can say (conjonction) when we speak about spies we think above all to the film characters who save the world in secret but a spy can’t be called a heroes(singulier) because they (verbe) in accordance with the definition of heroes
Réponse: Correction/Mythes et héros de effemere, postée le 21-05-2013 à 22:58:54 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour votre aide !
J'ai tenu compte de vos conseils et de vos corrections, ça m'a vraiment aidé à améliorer mon texte
Je vous remercie encore du temps que vous m'avez accordé !
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