Oraux / Progrès
Cours gratuits > Forum > Forum anglais: Questions sur l'anglais || En basMessage de mrlama posté le 16-05-2013 à 22:54:10 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir.
Voilà mon deuxième texte que j'ai préparé pour mon oral. Si quelqu'un passe par là ce serait aimable à lui de me corriger; je passe mon oral demain.
Merci d'avance.
I am going to talk about the notion of Progress. First of all I would like to give a quick definition of that notion. The idea of progress it’s a gradual betterment: especially: the progressive development of humankind. There was an advanced in all domains during the last century. The period the most representative of the progress is the sixties. For instance in music, some rock bands appears and revolutionized the music like Beatles, The Who, The doors, and the rolling stone. How we can see in the movie “Good morning England” we could hear them with our transistor radios on the frequency of pirate-radio who broadcasting rock’n’roll 24h a day .These Rock band Bringing with them a new culture. Indeed the 60’was the symbol of youth and drugs. The young people were more numerous because of baby boom. They embody a new generation, rebel and engaged. They stood for a powerful social and cultural force. Comes along with that, a more consumerism of drugs like marijuana or LSD by Hippies anti-establishmentarianism. To sum up they invented a counter culture, a culture with values and lifestyles that go against those of established society.
However, there was not only the consumerism of drug who increased, in the sixties it was the 30-year boom period, people spent all their money. We enter in a general consumer society with the development of electric and domestic appliances, advertising. Moreover, the color TV appeared in 1967 on BBC2 mainly with sports programs then his first coverage the landing on the moon in 1969 of Neil Armstrong.
The sixties were characterized too by a forward movement for women with the sexual revolution. Like in the movie studied in class “Made in Dagenham” his main character Rita O Grady embodies the feminist movement in the 60’, they reclaim an equal pay than male, to be consider as skilled worker, so she will keep on striking. Besides, they could have access to the contraception and with the uptake of the pills they could sleep around without having to place a pregnancy.
PS : n'hésitez pas à donner votre avis sur la pertinence du texte
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Modifié par lucile83 le 16-05-2013 22:56
Réponse: Oraux / Progrès de hushpuppy, postée le 17-05-2013 à 03:57:47 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Voilà je crois que c'est le dernier
I am going to talk about the notion of Progress. First of all I would like to give a quick definition of that notion. The idea of progress it’s(seulement le verbe) a gradual betterment: especially: the progressive development of humankind. There was an advanced(nom) in all domains during the last century. The period the most representative of
However, there was not only the consumerism of drug who(pas une personne) increased, in the sixties it was the 30-year boom period, people spent all their money. We enter(passé) in--(autre mot) a general consumer society with the development of electric and domestic appliances, ---(conjonction) advertising. Moreover, the color TV appeared in 1967 on BBC2 mainly with sports programs then his(pas une personne) first coverage the landing on the moon in 1969 of Neil Armstrong.
The sixties were characterized too(autre mot) by a forward(autre mot) movement for women with the sexual revolution. Like in the movie studied in class “Made in Dagenham” his main character Rita O Grady embodies(passé) the feminist movement in the 60’-(lettre), they reclaim(passé, et c'était une nouvelle chose, donc pas "re") an equal pay than(préposition d’égalité) male(pluriel), to be consider(passé) as skilled worker,
Bonne chance ce matin
Réponse: Oraux / Progrès de mrlama, postée le 18-05-2013 à 00:51:22 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup à toi Puppy, ton aide m'a été d'un grand secours. Malheureusement mon oral s'est pas super bien passé, comme je l'avais dit je suis plutôt mauvais en anglais et le stress ne m'a pas aidé En tout cas merci d'avoir corrigé mes 3 textes
Réponse: Oraux / Progrès de hushpuppy, postée le 18-05-2013 à 12:03:02 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Pas de problème mais c'est dommage ton message ! Ne désespère pas ! Tu écris déjà bien et l'oral vient avec du temps
Bon courage et bonne continuation !
Réponse: Oraux / Progrès de sombrenoire, postée le 18-05-2013 à 20:11:10 (S | E)
Pour te rassurer, je ne comprend pas grand chose à ton texte. Bon j'ai pas fais d'anglais pendant une petite année et là il me manque beaucoup de vocabulaire à apprendre, de la grammaire/syntaxe et les verbes irréguliers à revoir.
Enfin bref, je trouve ça pas mauvais
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