Correction /Social networks

Correction /Social networks
Message de timothelegent posté le 22-03-2013 à 17:52:47 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,

Pouvez-vous m'aider s'il vous plaît?v
Voyez-vous des erreurs dans mon texte?

Social networks like Facebook and Twitter have become very attractive, that's why they are used every day by many people.
Sometimes, these sites are a way for them to talk with their relatives and to share private informations.
However, only some users know the risks of these social networks.
If I post something about me, everybody can see my profile and read this publication even if they aren't friend with me. This is the first danger.
Moreover, our private informations and all the things we have shared will stay on internet. In other words, these social networks keep all our personal informations with our pictures, our messages, etc...
Consequently, anybody could know everything about us on internet.
So, in my opinion, Facebook, MySpace or Twitter would be very useful if everyone would be warned against the dangers of these social networks.

Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 22-03-2013 21:48

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Réponse: Correction /Social networks de notrepere, postée le 22-03-2013 à 18:41:26 (S | E)
Bonjour

Votre texte est bon.

Social networks like Facebook and Twitter have become very attractive. That's why they are used every day by many people.
Sometimes, these sites are a way for people to talk with their relatives and to share private informations(information ne se trouve pas au pluriel).
However, only some users know the risks of these social networks.
If I post something about me, everybody can see my profile and read this information even if they aren't friends with me. This is the first danger.
Moreover, our private informations and all the things we have shared will stay on the internet. In other words, these social networks keep all our personal informations with our pictures, our messages, etc...
Consequently, people could know averything about us on the internet.
So, in my opinion, Facebook, MySpace or Twitter would be very useful if
everyone would be warned against the dangers of these social networks.

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Réponse: Correction /Social networks de timothelegent, postée le 22-03-2013 à 18:49:22 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup!

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Réponse: Correction /Social networks de gerondif, postée le 22-03-2013 à 19:55:04 (S | E)
Bonjour,

quelques suppléments anglophiles!
Social networks like Facebook and Twitter have become very attractive. That's why they are used every day by many (a lot of) people.(certaines vieilles grammaires déconseillaient many en forme affirmative mais depuis, cet usage se perd)
Sometimes, these sites are a way for people to talk with their relatives and to share private information with them.
However, only some users know the risks of these social networks.
If I post something about myself(I et myself sont la même personne), everybody can see my profile and read this information even if they aren't friends with me. This is the first danger.
Moreover, our private information and all the things we have shared will stay on the internet. In other words, these social networks keep all our personal information with our pictures, our messages, etc...
Consequently, people could know everything about us on the internet.
So, in my opinion, Facebook, MySpace or Twitter would be very useful if
everyone was/were (if people were)(subjonctif) warned against the dangers of these social networks.

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Réponse: Correction /Social networks de timothelegent, postée le 23-03-2013 à 11:48:41 (S | E)
Merci à vous deux pour vos réponses!

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