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Message de frulux1 posté le 18-11-2012 à 13:41:40 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je dois rendre un "projet" en anglais (en fait c'est un genre de rédaction) et comme ça peut rapporter pas mal de points je sollicite votre aide (notamment pour la correction de quelques et/ou quelques idées que je pourrais ajouter).
J'ai choisi comme sujet "How to keep using technologies after Sandy?" et me suis basé sur un article du NY Times " Lien internet
... -no-power/ " de David Pogue. Je me permets donc de vous envoyer ce que j'ai écrit en vous remerciant d'avance.
How to keep using technologies after Sandy?
On the 29th November hurricane Sandy hits New-York. In the United States, Hurricane Sandy affected at least 24 states, from Florida to Maine and west to Michigan and Wisconsin, with particularly severe damage in New Jersey and New York. Its storm surge hit New York City on October 29, flooding streets, tunnels and subway lines and cutting power in and around the city. These outages have a lot of consequences and I’m going to deal about one of those consequences thanks to an article from the New-York Times of the 4th November written by David Pogue: How to keep electronics going with no power?
In a first time, the journalist deals with the problem of the internet which was cut because of the hurricane. He says that a lot of people go to public libraries which still have an internet access for example but there are too many people so the connection isn’t good. So, David Pogue as another solution, he uses his cell phone as an antenna (but he has to pay 20$ per month for this service) but after a moment the connection becomes “an excruciating 1984-era connection” so it’s not a very good solution. I have the feeling that, in this special case, looking for an internet connection mustn’t be a priority and I guess that it’s not a very sane attitude but it shows us that, now, it’s nearly impossible to live without an internet connection.
In a second time David Pogue speaks about the problem of power: “The problem with using the phone as Internet, of course, is keeping it charged.” We learn that after a previous windstorm the journalist bought a generator (it costs 600$) which is “big, heavy, deafening, stinky, apparently dangerous contraption. (“Using a generator indoors or in your garage WILL KILL YOU IN MINUTES,” says a metal plaque on the top.)”. Even if it has a lot of defaults this generator allows him to save the food in the fridge or to keep his phone charged. He also has a device which works with one single principle: as you walk, your movements charge up the battery so you can charge little devices but it’s not very efficient, in fact you have to walk for 26 minutes to make a 1-minute call on the 3G cellular network. As the two firsts solutions don’t work so he has to find a third: a solar-chargeable backup battery which seems to be more efficient because “the company says that one charge will give a Smartphone about 6.5 hours of talk time” so this third solution seems to be the better solution. But, again it’s pretty ridiculous to try to find power in this situation. In fact, I think that if people are looking for power to save the food in their fridge or to charge their phones to be able to call their family in order to say that they are well looking for power is a noble cause but if people are looking for power to be able to connect on Facebook or to play video games for example, it becomes a pretty ridiculous cause.
In a last time, the author deals with, I think, the most important problems: how to have hot water or heat without power. Unfortunately, these are the cases where he has the least solution. About having showers with hot water, David Pogue says that, usually, big companies like his newspaper open them doors to allow people to have a shower in their local but this time even the building of the NY Times was touched by Sandy so people cannot come. So, the author says that the only solution is to search some family or friends who weren’t touch by the hurricane in order to have a shower. The other huge problem is to have heater. In fact the solution is the same as for having hot water, you have to find some friends or family who still have heater or, as David Pogue says, you have to “walk around in parkas and sleep under a mound of blankets”. To conclude, the author notices that school are closed and that’s why he will go to a dear friend in Boston with his family to have hot water, heat and access to technologies.
In conclusion, I think that this article was not very useful because it was published three days after the hurricane and it doesn’t answer the important things like how having hot water or heat. I would have preferred that David Pogue find some gadgets to have hot water despite of finding so many gadgets to keep connect on Facebook because I think that, in this case of emergency keeping connecting on the social networks isn’t really important, it’s not vital (even if the author is a specialist of new technologies, he could have use his knowledge to help people in vital needs by finding technologies which can really help them). But I chose this article to show the huge place that takes technologies in our life and also to show that it can be pretty dangerous.
Link of the article: Lien internet
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Modifié par lucile83 le 18-11-2012 14:58
Message de frulux1 posté le 18-11-2012 à 13:41:40 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je dois rendre un "projet" en anglais (en fait c'est un genre de rédaction) et comme ça peut rapporter pas mal de points je sollicite votre aide (notamment pour la correction de quelques et/ou quelques idées que je pourrais ajouter).
J'ai choisi comme sujet "How to keep using technologies after Sandy?" et me suis basé sur un article du NY Times " Lien internet
... -no-power/ " de David Pogue. Je me permets donc de vous envoyer ce que j'ai écrit en vous remerciant d'avance.
How to keep using technologies after Sandy?
On the 29th November hurricane Sandy hits New-York. In the United States, Hurricane Sandy affected at least 24 states, from Florida to Maine and west to Michigan and Wisconsin, with particularly severe damage in New Jersey and New York. Its storm surge hit New York City on October 29, flooding streets, tunnels and subway lines and cutting power in and around the city. These outages have a lot of consequences and I’m going to deal about one of those consequences thanks to an article from the New-York Times of the 4th November written by David Pogue: How to keep electronics going with no power?
In a first time, the journalist deals with the problem of the internet which was cut because of the hurricane. He says that a lot of people go to public libraries which still have an internet access for example but there are too many people so the connection isn’t good. So, David Pogue as another solution, he uses his cell phone as an antenna (but he has to pay 20$ per month for this service) but after a moment the connection becomes “an excruciating 1984-era connection” so it’s not a very good solution. I have the feeling that, in this special case, looking for an internet connection mustn’t be a priority and I guess that it’s not a very sane attitude but it shows us that, now, it’s nearly impossible to live without an internet connection.
In a second time David Pogue speaks about the problem of power: “The problem with using the phone as Internet, of course, is keeping it charged.” We learn that after a previous windstorm the journalist bought a generator (it costs 600$) which is “big, heavy, deafening, stinky, apparently dangerous contraption. (“Using a generator indoors or in your garage WILL KILL YOU IN MINUTES,” says a metal plaque on the top.)”. Even if it has a lot of defaults this generator allows him to save the food in the fridge or to keep his phone charged. He also has a device which works with one single principle: as you walk, your movements charge up the battery so you can charge little devices but it’s not very efficient, in fact you have to walk for 26 minutes to make a 1-minute call on the 3G cellular network. As the two firsts solutions don’t work so he has to find a third: a solar-chargeable backup battery which seems to be more efficient because “the company says that one charge will give a Smartphone about 6.5 hours of talk time” so this third solution seems to be the better solution. But, again it’s pretty ridiculous to try to find power in this situation. In fact, I think that if people are looking for power to save the food in their fridge or to charge their phones to be able to call their family in order to say that they are well looking for power is a noble cause but if people are looking for power to be able to connect on Facebook or to play video games for example, it becomes a pretty ridiculous cause.
In a last time, the author deals with, I think, the most important problems: how to have hot water or heat without power. Unfortunately, these are the cases where he has the least solution. About having showers with hot water, David Pogue says that, usually, big companies like his newspaper open them doors to allow people to have a shower in their local but this time even the building of the NY Times was touched by Sandy so people cannot come. So, the author says that the only solution is to search some family or friends who weren’t touch by the hurricane in order to have a shower. The other huge problem is to have heater. In fact the solution is the same as for having hot water, you have to find some friends or family who still have heater or, as David Pogue says, you have to “walk around in parkas and sleep under a mound of blankets”. To conclude, the author notices that school are closed and that’s why he will go to a dear friend in Boston with his family to have hot water, heat and access to technologies.
In conclusion, I think that this article was not very useful because it was published three days after the hurricane and it doesn’t answer the important things like how having hot water or heat. I would have preferred that David Pogue find some gadgets to have hot water despite of finding so many gadgets to keep connect on Facebook because I think that, in this case of emergency keeping connecting on the social networks isn’t really important, it’s not vital (even if the author is a specialist of new technologies, he could have use his knowledge to help people in vital needs by finding technologies which can really help them). But I chose this article to show the huge place that takes technologies in our life and also to show that it can be pretty dangerous.
Link of the article: Lien internet
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Modifié par lucile83 le 18-11-2012 14:58
Réponse: Aide/ projet de lucile83, postée le 19-11-2012 à 23:35:00 (S | E)
Anyone? thanks
(topic lost during the changing of the site server)
Réponse: Aide/ projet de sherry48, postée le 20-11-2012 à 01:00:01 (S | E)
Hello.
On the 29th November (the 29th of or November 29th
hurricane Sandy hits New-York. ...These outages have a lot of consequences and I’m going to deal about
(different word) one of those consequences thanks to an article from the New-York Times of the 4th November written by David Pogue: How to keep electronics going with no power? (thanks to a New York Times article...In a first time the journalist deals with the problem of the internet which was cut because of the hurricane. He says that a lot of people go to public libraries which still have an internet access for example but there are too many people so the connection isn’t good. So, David Pogue _as another solution, he uses his cell phone as an antenna (but he has to pay 20$ ($ first) per month for this service) but after a moment the connection becomes “an excruciating 1984-era connection” so it’s not a very good solution. ...
In a second time David Pogue speaks about the problem of power: “The problem with using the phone as Internet, of course, is keeping it charged.” We learn that after a previous windstorm the journalist bought a generator (it costs 600$) which is _ “big, heavy, deafening, stinky, apparently dangerous contraption. (“Using a generator indoors or in your garage WILL KILL YOU IN MINUTES,” says a metal plaque on the top.)”. Even if it has a lot of defaults
this generator allows him to save the food in the fridge or to keep his phone charged. ...As the two firsts (wrong order of words) solutions don’t work so he has (past tense?) to find a third: a solar-chargeable backup battery which seems to be more efficient because “the company says that one charge will give a Smartphone about 6.5 hours of talk time” so this third solution seems to be the better
(superlative) solution. In a last time, the author deals with, I think, the most important problems: how to have hot water or heat without power. Unfortunately, these are the cases where he has the least solution_. About having showers with hot water, David Pogue says that, usually, big companies like his newspaper open them
doors to allow people to have a shower in their local but this time even the building of the NY Times was touched by Sandy so people cannot come. So, the author says that the only solution is to search __ some family or friends who weren’t touch by the hurricane in order to have a shower. The other huge problem is to have heater. In fact the solution is the same as for having hot water, you have to find some friends or family who still have heater or, as David Pogue says, you have to “walk around in parkas and sleep under a mound of blankets”. To conclude, the author notices that school_ are closed and that’s why he will go to a dear friend in Boston with his family to have hot water, heat and access to technologies.(Singular sounds better to me)In conclusion, I think that this article was not very useful because it was published three days after the hurricane and it doesn’t answer the important things like how having
hot water or heat. I would have preferred that David Pogue find some gadgets to have hot water despite of finding so many gadgets to keep connect_ on Facebook because I think that, in this case of emergency keeping connecting on the social networks isn’t really important, it’s not vital (even if the author is a specialist of new technologies, he could have use_ his knowledge to help people in vital needs by finding technologies which can really help them). But I chose this article to show the huge place that takes technologies in our life and also to show that it can be pretty dangerous. Sherry
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