Correction/maison hantée

Correction/maison hantée
Message de julainy posté le 01-11-2012 à 13:50:17 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,

je suis en premiere ES et en anglais on doit faire une petite rédaction sur une maison hantée ,donc le début de l'histoire commence par A year ago.
En gros sa femme a entendu des bruits, il ne la croyait pas jusqu'à la nuit suivante donc ça doit êtreau PASSE et je dois continuer la suite du texte.
Merci d'avance pour toute aide.

But then the following night, in the middlee, I heard the door creak. If we have a cat, it's certainlyhim but my wife was allergic. I go out of the bed, i wake up my wife and i said her "something is in down, stay here". So i open the door and i feel like someone (frole?) to brush against me. I am rush towards the switch knob but this one don't light off because of the storm, i guess. I move on the bedroom and i take a flash light. I am down and i see a shadow appear and disappear, i said "hello, someone it is in my house?" no answer. Suddenly, i heard a scream very shriek. I running in the bedroom and i see above my wife a fog like this things longed my wife and when I approached this thing, it went away.
I leaned over my wife opened her eyes and I suddenly awoke. Bad dream. It seems that watching harry potter with Dementors and paranormal activity on Halloween night background do not mix.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-11-2012 13:55

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Réponse: Correction/maison hantée de notrepere, postée le 04-11-2012 à 21:59:45 (S | E)
Hello

But then the following night, in the middlee, I heard the door creak. If we have(temps) a cat, it's certainly him but my wife was allergic. I got out of the bed, i wake (temps) up my wife and i said (mauvaise traduction du verbe 'dire') her "something is in down, stay here" (mal dit). So i open (temps de narration demande un temps passé) the door and i feel (idem) like someone (frole?) to brush (forme +ing) against me. I am rush (temps de narration) towards the switch knob but this one don't(temps) light off (mauvaise préposition) because of the storm, i guess. I move on the bedroom (sur la chambre) and i take a flash light. I am down and i see a shadow appear and disappear, i said "hello, someone it is (forme d'une question - 'it' ne va pas) in my house?" no answer. Suddenly, i heard a scream very shriek(autre mot comme 'shrill'). I running (temps) in (autre préposition) the bedroom and i see (temps) above my wife a fog like this things longed my wife and when I approached this thing, it went away.
I leaned over my wife opened her eyes and I suddenly awoke. Bad dream. It seems that watching harry potter with Dementors and Paranormal Activity on Halloween night background do not mix.

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Réponse: Correction/maison hantée de violet91, postée le 04-11-2012 à 23:40:17 (S | E)

Hello ...qui est ' à l'ouest ?'

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Réponse: Correction/maison hantée de anonyme, postée le 05-11-2012 à 06:47:39 (S | E)
Bonjour,

I wake I said I open I feel I guess I take I see I heard

Bonne journée !

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