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Message de lauraak posté le 05-05-2012 à 16:49:09 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous ,
J'ai un devoir maison à faire pour lundi 7 mai, j'aimerais que vous corrigiez mes fautes s'il vous plaît.
Merci pour vos réponses.
Le sujet : Write an e-mail. You have created a video game and want to sell it to a developer. You write an e-mail to the manager of a famous video company in order to present your project. Use the present perfect and the past simple ( prétérit).
Dear Mr Price,
I'm sending you an e-mail because I have created a video game and I want to sell it to a developer. So I decide to present you my project. You have to know that it's the first time I have created a video game. The name of my video game is Mario Kart DS, it's a video game of race, there are Mario who is the character principal and his friends (and enemies). There is a lot of circuit, we can chose our favourite character then we can start the game and do the crazy race. Also, you can throw various object as banana skin or fireball on competitor in order to pass them and win the race. There! the presentation is finish, I hope that you enjoy my project!
Thank you for you consideration. If you have any questions or concerns don't hesitate to let me know.
Sincerely.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 05-05-2012 17:07
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Modifié par lauraak le 05-05-2012 17:53
Message de lauraak posté le 05-05-2012 à 16:49:09 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous ,
J'ai un devoir maison à faire pour lundi 7 mai, j'aimerais que vous corrigiez mes fautes s'il vous plaît.
Merci pour vos réponses.
Le sujet : Write an e-mail. You have created a video game and want to sell it to a developer. You write an e-mail to the manager of a famous video company in order to present your project. Use the present perfect and the past simple ( prétérit).
Dear Mr Price,
I'm sending you an e-mail because I have created a video game and I want to sell it to a developer. So I decide to present you my project. You have to know that it's the first time I have created a video game. The name of my video game is Mario Kart DS, it's a video game of race, there are Mario who is the character principal and his friends (and enemies). There is a lot of circuit, we can chose our favourite character then we can start the game and do the crazy race. Also, you can throw various object as banana skin or fireball on competitor in order to pass them and win the race. There! the presentation is finish, I hope that you enjoy my project!
Thank you for you consideration. If you have any questions or concerns don't hesitate to let me know.
Sincerely.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 05-05-2012 17:07
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Modifié par lauraak le 05-05-2012 17:53
Réponse: Correction/Video game de lucile83, postée le 05-05-2012 à 17:12:59 (S | E)
Hello,
Dears
Mr Price,I'm sending you an e-mail because i
have created a video game and i want to sell it to a developer. So i decide to present you my project. You have to know that it's the first time i have created a video game. The name of my video game is Mario Kart DS, it's a video game of race, there are Mario who is the character principal and his friends (and enemies). There is a lot of circuit, we can chose our favourite character then we can start the game and do the crazy race. Also, you can throw various object as banana skin or fireball on competitor in order to pass them and win the race. There! the presentation is finish, i hope that you enjoy my project!Thank you for you consideration. If you have any questions or concerns don't hesitate to let me know.
Sincerely.
Corrigez déjà ces fautes et votre texte pourra être relu, merci.
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