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Message de boahancock posté le 03-05-2012 à 22:32:56 (S | E | F)
Hello everybody,
here is a debate I wrote, could you correct it, please ?
Thank you for your help!
L : How do you do .
Q : How do you do.
L: So, today we are going to debate about murals and graffiti. To me, it is visual pollution. And what about your feelings ? What do you think about this ? Are you for or against?
Q: I think it’s just art. To start, a colorfoul painting is better than a grey, dull wall.
L: Certainly, but sometimes it is just a way of marking one’s territory and we’re not animals. I think the man who spray paint on a wall looks like a dog pissing in a garden to tell the other dogs which could pass here : “hey, it’s my house, not yours!”. It’s just absurd.
Q: I can’t believe such a thing ! I suppose it is purely a form of expression which lets the humans express their feelings, and usually it is beautiful … Why forbid that ?
L: Because it can express insults ! Grafitti can be offensive and on a monument, it can spoil it. On top of that, it is a total lack of respect for private property !
Q:Ok, it can be a lack of respect but nowadays there are exhibitions of murals so the artists can spray paint freely and legally. Why would they degrade private property if they can spray paint easily and show it to the whole world ?
L: Because, on the contrary it is a way of rebelling against society.
Q: I see you are definitely against grafitti and murals, you are stubborn I see you haven’t been hearing me since the start of the debate. Bye and I hope I won’t see you soon !
L : Bye M. “defender of the art” !
Bye !
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Modifié par lucile83 le 04-05-2012 06:04
Message de boahancock posté le 03-05-2012 à 22:32:56 (S | E | F)
Hello everybody,
here is a debate I wrote, could you correct it, please ?
Thank you for your help!
L : How do you do .
Q : How do you do.
L: So, today we are going to debate about murals and graffiti. To me, it is visual pollution. And what about your feelings ? What do you think about this ? Are you for or against?
Q: I think it’s just art. To start, a colorfoul painting is better than a grey, dull wall.
L: Certainly, but sometimes it is just a way of marking one’s territory and we’re not animals. I think the man who spray paint on a wall looks like a dog pissing in a garden to tell the other dogs which could pass here : “hey, it’s my house, not yours!”. It’s just absurd.
Q: I can’t believe such a thing ! I suppose it is purely a form of expression which lets the humans express their feelings, and usually it is beautiful … Why forbid that ?
L: Because it can express insults ! Grafitti can be offensive and on a monument, it can spoil it. On top of that, it is a total lack of respect for private property !
Q:Ok, it can be a lack of respect but nowadays there are exhibitions of murals so the artists can spray paint freely and legally. Why would they degrade private property if they can spray paint easily and show it to the whole world ?
L: Because, on the contrary it is a way of rebelling against society.
Q: I see you are definitely against grafitti and murals, you are stubborn I see you haven’t been hearing me since the start of the debate. Bye and I hope I won’t see you soon !
L : Bye M. “defender of the art” !
Bye !
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Modifié par lucile83 le 04-05-2012 06:04
Réponse: Correction/court débat de dsmith, postée le 04-05-2012 à 03:33:49 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Voilà quelques corrections:
...the man who spray paint... paint n'est pas conjugé correctement.
...which could pass here... better to use "might"
...which lets the humans... pas besoin de "the"
...hearing... better to use "listening to"
Très bien fait!!! félicitations.
Doug
Réponse: Correction/court débat de boahancock, postée le 04-05-2012 à 20:26:19 (S | E)
Bonsoir Doug !
Merci beaucoup, c'est normal je suis en section européenne anglais en classe de seconde, je ne peut pas me permettre d'avoir un faible niveau d'anglais étant donné que j'ai trois matières en anglais (anglais courant, maths et histoire !)
Merci de vos compliments et de vos éléments de correction! ^_^
boahancock
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