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Message de nicolas49 posté le 27-04-2012 à 17:44:53 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
voici une rédaction que j'ai faite, malheureusement je ne suis pas très bon en orthographe, donc pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger mes nombreuses fautes s'il vous plait?
Le sujet: A journalist writes an article. The mystery has been solved, the police know who threatened the lady.
The author of death threats from Clarissa Lisle was discovered by a private detective.
Indeed (en effet?), for over two years now, the famous actress Clarissa Lisle received death threats from an unknown sender. There were about thirty letters addressed to Clarissa Lisle and they had all were typewritten. None of these had been written by hand. After a few months to live in fear, her husband Sir George and herself decided to engage a private detective. So, they made calls (ils ont fait appel?) to the famous female private detective, Cordelia Gray.
Months of research have enabled (ont permis?) the detective to find the author of these letters. Indeed, according to the investigator, the culprit is a woman called Serena Dickson. She was apparently a friend who had studied in the same school of theatre that Clarissa. And jealous of Clarissa’s success, she decided to send to her death threats in order to ruin her actress’ career. When she heard of that, Clarissa was very shocked and surprised because she loved this woman and she was very close to her when she was a student.
Merci encore.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-04-2012 19:32
Message de nicolas49 posté le 27-04-2012 à 17:44:53 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
voici une rédaction que j'ai faite, malheureusement je ne suis pas très bon en orthographe, donc pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger mes nombreuses fautes s'il vous plait?
Le sujet: A journalist writes an article. The mystery has been solved, the police know who threatened the lady.
The author of death threats from Clarissa Lisle was discovered by a private detective.
Indeed (en effet?), for over two years now, the famous actress Clarissa Lisle received death threats from an unknown sender. There were about thirty letters addressed to Clarissa Lisle and they had all were typewritten. None of these had been written by hand. After a few months to live in fear, her husband Sir George and herself decided to engage a private detective. So, they made calls (ils ont fait appel?) to the famous female private detective, Cordelia Gray.
Months of research have enabled (ont permis?) the detective to find the author of these letters. Indeed, according to the investigator, the culprit is a woman called Serena Dickson. She was apparently a friend who had studied in the same school of theatre that Clarissa. And jealous of Clarissa’s success, she decided to send to her death threats in order to ruin her actress’ career. When she heard of that, Clarissa was very shocked and surprised because she loved this woman and she was very close to her when she was a student.
Merci encore.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-04-2012 19:32
Réponse: Correction/journalist de notrepere, postée le 27-04-2012 à 18:00:11 (S | E)
BonjourVotre texte est bon et il n'y a pas de grosses fautes.
The author of death threats towards Clarissa Lisle was discovered by a private detective.
Indeed, for over two years now, the famous actress Clarissa Lisle received(il faut un temps 'perfect') death threats from an unknown sender. There were about thirty letters addressed to Clarissa Lisle and they
Months of research have enabled the detective to find the author of these letters. Indeed, according to the investigator, the culprit is a woman named Serena Dickson. She was apparently a friend who had studied in the same theatrical school
Réponse: Correction/journalist de nicolas49, postée le 27-04-2012 à 18:21:54 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup donc je devrais corriger la phrase
"Clarissa Lisle received death threats" par
"Clarissa Lisle has received death threats " ou
"Clarissa Lisle had received death threats" ?
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-04-2012 19:34
Mise en forme
Réponse: Correction/journalist de notrepere, postée le 27-04-2012 à 19:46:37 (S | E)
Bonjour"Clarissa Lisle has received death threats " ou
"Clarissa Lisle had received death threats" ?
Les deux conviennent. Le choix dépend de ce que vous voulez dire.
She had received them (we assume she is no longer receiving them)
She has received them (she may or may not be receiving them still)
Cordialement
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