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Future job/correction
Message de charlatan posté le 19-12-2011 à 21:27:21 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir !
S'il vous plaît , pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger ce paragraphe ?
Merci d'avance
Working as a doctor is my desire since I was a child . I chosed this job to do many things that other doctors didn’t before .
I’ll examine poors and give them drug without money . I’ll help their children to continue their education . Building a medical school is one of my main aims , it will be free only for poors.
I’ll travel to many countries to get more information about ills and to know how doctors should be .
I’ll study hard to achieve my dream because I can’t reach to what I want without education.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-12-2011 21:44
Message de charlatan posté le 19-12-2011 à 21:27:21 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir !
S'il vous plaît , pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger ce paragraphe ?
Merci d'avance
Working as a doctor is my desire since I was a child . I chosed this job to do many things that other doctors didn’t before .
I’ll examine poors and give them drug without money . I’ll help their children to continue their education . Building a medical school is one of my main aims , it will be free only for poors.
I’ll travel to many countries to get more information about ills and to know how doctors should be .
I’ll study hard to achieve my dream because I can’t reach to what I want without education.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-12-2011 21:44
Réponse: Future job/correction de alienor64, postée le 19-12-2011 à 23:48:28 (S | E)
Bonsoir Charlatan
- "....since I was a child " ( "since my childhood " )
- " I'll examine poors
" ( "les pauvres " : voir orthographe )- " ...it will be free only for poors
" ( même remarque que précédemment )- "...about ills.
.. " ( vous parlez des " malades " ou bien des "maladies " ? de toutes façons " ills " ne convient ni dans un cas ni dans l'autre )- "... to know how doctors should be "
- "...to reach to
want I want without education " ( "to reach something " ) / " education"? "training " serait plus adapté )Réponse: Future job/correction de headway, postée le 20-12-2011 à 08:56:26 (S | E)
Bonjour,
"Since/Eversince I was a child" est correct.
Vous pourriez tourner votre phrase de cette façon:
- I have always wanted to work as a doctor eversince I was a child.
Headway.
Réponse: Future job/correction de dsmith, postée le 21-12-2011 à 14:23:20 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Voici quelques corrections:
"I chosed..." to choose a un passé irrégulier. Regarde le dictionnaire ici: Lien internet
"...give them drug..." drug doit être pluriel.
I agree with the corrections of alienor64. However, I think "...since I was a child." is ok. "Since childhood" est bon.
"ever since I was a child." is good too - but "ever" and "since" are two seperate words, not one word.
"I'll examine..." est correcte. Mais je crois que c'est mieux: "I'll care for..."
Très bon paragraphe! Well done! Congratulations.
Doug
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