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Message de sandrine34 posté le 01-06-2011 à 11:54:01 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
j'ai une présentation orale demain sur le thème "la délocalisation d'industries et ses conséquences".
Pouvez-vous me dire s'il vous plaît si j'ai fait des fautes de vocabulaire et de grammaire. Vu mon niveau en anglais, je pense qu'il y en a beaucoup
.
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.
Good morning. Today I am going to talk about delocalization of industries and consequences. I’ve divided my presentation in two parties. The first part will be devoted to the description of definition of the expression “delocalization of industries”. Secondly, I will treat to consequences of delocalization of industries.
So, the first part of my talk is the definition of delocalization of industries.
We often speak in the media about "delocalization of industries ", and many imagine themselves that the delocalization concern essentially companies which close production units on the national territory, to install them in the other countries. Only, this expression reflects a party of the realty. Indeed, it is not the company in itself which delocates, but it is the company which delocates all its production or a part of its production. The expression ‘delocalization of industries” concerns thus more widely a transfer of production. It is goods which were produced on our territory, by our own employees, and which are now to be produced in another country, by local employees. When we speak about delocalization, it is thus first of all about "delocalization of production”. To dread at best this phenomen, it is not thus enough to be interested in the only delocalization of industries, but in the delocalization of production in their group.
We shall thus try here to give a wide enough definition to encircle the problem in all its dimensions: the word delocalization concerns the production abroad of the goods intended to be distributed on our national market, and which previously were produced on our territory or who could be produced there. From this definition, we can now deepen more exactly the phenomen. We can distinguish then two types of delocalization of production: the direct delocalization and the indirect delocalization.
The direct delocalization is the most visible because the most mediatized, especially since they come along with redundancies, with redundancy plans, and especially since they generate very often social movements of protest. It is the case on the company which decides deliberately to open or to enlarge a production unit abroad, while limiting or downright by deleting its production units on the national territory. These direct delocalization are relatively limited in number.
The indirect delocalization of production is less spectacular but certainly the most important. They result essentially from delocalization of suppliers and subcontractors, and concern various sectors of the economy.
Now, let's move on to the next part which is devoted to the consequences of the delocalization of industries.
The negative consequences on countries while undergoing the delocalization which are often emphases, however we forget the positive consequences on the countries which benefit from these delocalization.
A policy of delocalization pulls first of all a job loss in the country of origin. The employees are dismissed to delocate their production site towards a country where the hand of work is less expensive. But these job losses in the country of origin are translated in return, by job creations in the countries where companies delocate.
Furthermore, there are the other advantages and inconveniences. For example, the companies which delocate are going to exploit the resources of the country which undergoes the delocalization. We think of natural resources, pollution, and exploited workers ect…
Other advantage, salaries abroad are less brought up, production costs are thus cheaper. The consumer eventually pays very often cheaper for the end product. Furthermore, there is much more investment in the countries which undergo the delocalization
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-06-2011 11:54
Message de sandrine34 posté le 01-06-2011 à 11:54:01 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
j'ai une présentation orale demain sur le thème "la délocalisation d'industries et ses conséquences".
Pouvez-vous me dire s'il vous plaît si j'ai fait des fautes de vocabulaire et de grammaire. Vu mon niveau en anglais, je pense qu'il y en a beaucoup
.Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.
Good morning. Today I am going to talk about delocalization of industries and consequences. I’ve divided my presentation in two parties. The first part will be devoted to the description of definition of the expression “delocalization of industries”. Secondly, I will treat to consequences of delocalization of industries.
So, the first part of my talk is the definition of delocalization of industries.
We often speak in the media about "delocalization of industries ", and many imagine themselves that the delocalization concern essentially companies which close production units on the national territory, to install them in the other countries. Only, this expression reflects a party of the realty. Indeed, it is not the company in itself which delocates, but it is the company which delocates all its production or a part of its production. The expression ‘delocalization of industries” concerns thus more widely a transfer of production. It is goods which were produced on our territory, by our own employees, and which are now to be produced in another country, by local employees. When we speak about delocalization, it is thus first of all about "delocalization of production”. To dread at best this phenomen, it is not thus enough to be interested in the only delocalization of industries, but in the delocalization of production in their group.
We shall thus try here to give a wide enough definition to encircle the problem in all its dimensions: the word delocalization concerns the production abroad of the goods intended to be distributed on our national market, and which previously were produced on our territory or who could be produced there. From this definition, we can now deepen more exactly the phenomen. We can distinguish then two types of delocalization of production: the direct delocalization and the indirect delocalization.
The direct delocalization is the most visible because the most mediatized, especially since they come along with redundancies, with redundancy plans, and especially since they generate very often social movements of protest. It is the case on the company which decides deliberately to open or to enlarge a production unit abroad, while limiting or downright by deleting its production units on the national territory. These direct delocalization are relatively limited in number.
The indirect delocalization of production is less spectacular but certainly the most important. They result essentially from delocalization of suppliers and subcontractors, and concern various sectors of the economy.
Now, let's move on to the next part which is devoted to the consequences of the delocalization of industries.
The negative consequences on countries while undergoing the delocalization which are often emphases, however we forget the positive consequences on the countries which benefit from these delocalization.
A policy of delocalization pulls first of all a job loss in the country of origin. The employees are dismissed to delocate their production site towards a country where the hand of work is less expensive. But these job losses in the country of origin are translated in return, by job creations in the countries where companies delocate.
Furthermore, there are the other advantages and inconveniences. For example, the companies which delocate are going to exploit the resources of the country which undergoes the delocalization. We think of natural resources, pollution, and exploited workers ect…
Other advantage, salaries abroad are less brought up, production costs are thus cheaper. The consumer eventually pays very often cheaper for the end product. Furthermore, there is much more investment in the countries which undergo the delocalization
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-06-2011 11:54
Réponse: Correction/présentation orale de notrepere, postée le 01-06-2011 à 17:38:39 (S | E)
HelloEn rouge: inutile; à supprimer
Today I am going to talk about delocalization (1) of industries and (2) consequences. I’ve divided my presentation in two parties. The first part will be devoted to the
So, the first part of my talk is the definition of delocalization of industries.
(1) Ce mot n'existe pas en anglais britannique (ni delocate). Il faut consulter un dictionnire pour obtenir une bonne traduction
(2) Mot manquant; il faut traduire le mot 'ses'
(3) Ce verbe n'a rien dire dans le contexte
We often speak in the media about "delocalization of industries ", and many imagine themselves that the delocalization concern (4) essentially companies which close production units on the national territory (5), to install them in the other countries. Only, this expression reflects a party of the reality. Indeed, it is not the company in itself which delocates, but it is the company which delocates all of its production or a part of its production. The expression ‘delocalization of industries” concerns thus more widely a transfer of production. It is goods which were produced on our territory, by our own employees, and which are now to be produced in another country, by local employees. When we speak about delocalization, it is thus first of all about "delocalization of production”. To dread at best this phenomen (6), it is not thus (8) enough to be interested in the only (8) delocalization of industries, but in the delocalization of production in their group.
(4) accorde
(5) un autre expression
(6) orthographe
(8) ordre des mots
We shall thus try here to give a wide enough definition to encircle the problem in all of its dimensions: the word delocalization concerns the production abroad of the goods intended to be distributed on our national market, and which previously were produced on our territory or who could be produced there. From this definition, we can now deepen more exactly the phenomen (6). We can distinguish then two types of delocalization of production: the direct delocalization and the indirect delocalization.
The direct delocalization is the most visible because it is the most mediatized, especially since they come along with redundancies, with redundancy plans, and especially since they generate very often social movements of protest. This is the case of the company which decides deliberately to open or to enlarge a production unit abroad, while limiting or downright by deleting its production units on the national territory. These direct delocalization are relatively limited in number.
The indirect delocalization of production is less spectacular but certainly the most important. They result essentially from delocalization of suppliers and subcontractors, and concern various sectors of the economy.
Now, let's move on to the next part which is devoted to the consequences of the delocalization of industries.
The negative consequences on countries while undergoing the delocalization which are often emphases, however we forget the positive consequences on the countries which benefit from these delocalization.
(9) 'these' est utiliser avant un mot pluriel; il faut 'this' ou mettre le mot qui suit au pluriel
A policy of delocalization pulls first of all a job loss in the country of origin. The employees are dismissed to delocate their production site towards a country where the hand of work (10) is less expensive. But these job losses in the country of origin are translated in return, by job creations in the countries where companies delocate.
Furthermore, there are the other advantages and inconveniences. For example, the companies which delocate are going to exploit the resources of the country which undergoes the delocalization. We think of natural resources, pollution, and exploited workers ect…
Other advantage, salaries abroad are less brought up (10), production costs are thus cheaper. The consumer eventually pays very often cheaper (11) for the end product. Furthermore, there is much more investment in the countries which undergo the delocalization
(10) mal dit; il faut une autre expression
(11) il faut refaire; pas clair et mal écrit
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