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Message de baskelise posté le 18-05-2011 à 21:20:54 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
J'ai écrit un texte et j'ai pas mal de problèmes avec les temps du passé.
Est-ce que vous pouvez me dire s'il y a des erreurs de conjugaison ou autre s'il vous plaît?
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.
One day, Tom and Sally decided to go for a walk in the rainforest. They suggested accompany them to Jack and Hilary their friends but not feeling well, they preferred to sit still in the guest house. Thus, Tom and Sally went into the forest early on in the afternoon with a rucksack, where they put a card that their host gave them, a torch, a compass, a few biscuits and a bottle of water. Arriving on the edge of the forest, Tom had the idea, not following the footpath, he announced his idea to Sally. Seeing that Sally wasn't convinced, he said that it would more be pleasant to walk to oneself than among the other walkers and maybe they would have the chance to see a lot of animals and in any case they had a map and a compass so they couldn't get lost. Sally was persuaded, they sank into the rainforest.
After several hours of walking, Tom and Sally stopped near of a watercourse to have a break. They sat down on a stone and began to eat their biscuits. When Tom bent down to close his rucksack, Tom realised that there was a sign on the stone engraved. He observed this sign and faced facts: he knew this mark, he studies in class. He told Sally that was a sign of the tribe, named Maya. He rounded the stone to see if there would be another but he saw that there was a big hole. He lit up with with his torch and discovered that it isn't a hole but the entrance of a tunnel. He decided with Sally to continue.
After several meters, where were kneeling, they arrived in a large room where there were large statues and statuettes representing the Maya's chief, and all sorts of objects who belonged to them.
Seeing it was late, they went back on their step, taking with them a statue to show at others their discovery. After the tunnel, the night had been falling, Tom was going to take the compass in the backpack but he realised that he wasn't inside. He was remembering that he placed on the stone while they had eaten. He asked Sally if she didn't catch with her but she said no. Then he went around the stone but he didn't find it. He began again with the help of Sally, but this time we had been looking under the leafs, but they didn't see anything. They realised th at they had clearly lost their compass and they was harder to find their way.
They had been trying to join the lane but half an hour later they found themselves in front of the stone.
They decided to stay the right way around until the sunrise will have. They finished the few cookies and then they had been trying to sleep, but the rain forced them to protect in the shelter in the tunnel. At dawn, they had been continuing their way to the village. An hour later, as they looked for the path, they had heard people call them. They recognised among that voices, their friends Jack and Hilary. Tom and Sally turned to call and told them, they didn't far and thanks to their voices, they found their way and their friends. Tom and Sally told them what they had arrived and they discovered, why they not returned to the village yesterday. Arriving at the guest house, the two adventurers had the same idea : to go to their bed early and forget this night.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 18-05-2011 21:33
Message de baskelise posté le 18-05-2011 à 21:20:54 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
J'ai écrit un texte et j'ai pas mal de problèmes avec les temps du passé.
Est-ce que vous pouvez me dire s'il y a des erreurs de conjugaison ou autre s'il vous plaît?
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.
One day, Tom and Sally decided to go for a walk in the rainforest. They suggested accompany them to Jack and Hilary their friends but not feeling well, they preferred to sit still in the guest house. Thus, Tom and Sally went into the forest early on in the afternoon with a rucksack, where they put a card that their host gave them, a torch, a compass, a few biscuits and a bottle of water. Arriving on the edge of the forest, Tom had the idea, not following the footpath, he announced his idea to Sally. Seeing that Sally wasn't convinced, he said that it would more be pleasant to walk to oneself than among the other walkers and maybe they would have the chance to see a lot of animals and in any case they had a map and a compass so they couldn't get lost. Sally was persuaded, they sank into the rainforest.
After several hours of walking, Tom and Sally stopped near of a watercourse to have a break. They sat down on a stone and began to eat their biscuits. When Tom bent down to close his rucksack, Tom realised that there was a sign on the stone engraved. He observed this sign and faced facts: he knew this mark, he studies in class. He told Sally that was a sign of the tribe, named Maya. He rounded the stone to see if there would be another but he saw that there was a big hole. He lit up with with his torch and discovered that it isn't a hole but the entrance of a tunnel. He decided with Sally to continue.
After several meters, where were kneeling, they arrived in a large room where there were large statues and statuettes representing the Maya's chief, and all sorts of objects who belonged to them.
Seeing it was late, they went back on their step, taking with them a statue to show at others their discovery. After the tunnel, the night had been falling, Tom was going to take the compass in the backpack but he realised that he wasn't inside. He was remembering that he placed on the stone while they had eaten. He asked Sally if she didn't catch with her but she said no. Then he went around the stone but he didn't find it. He began again with the help of Sally, but this time we had been looking under the leafs, but they didn't see anything. They realised th at they had clearly lost their compass and they was harder to find their way.
They had been trying to join the lane but half an hour later they found themselves in front of the stone.
They decided to stay the right way around until the sunrise will have. They finished the few cookies and then they had been trying to sleep, but the rain forced them to protect in the shelter in the tunnel. At dawn, they had been continuing their way to the village. An hour later, as they looked for the path, they had heard people call them. They recognised among that voices, their friends Jack and Hilary. Tom and Sally turned to call and told them, they didn't far and thanks to their voices, they found their way and their friends. Tom and Sally told them what they had arrived and they discovered, why they not returned to the village yesterday. Arriving at the guest house, the two adventurers had the same idea : to go to their bed early and forget this night.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 18-05-2011 21:33
Réponse: Correction/Walk in rain forest de may, postée le 19-05-2011 à 20:35:24 (S | E)
Bonjour,
One day, Tom and Sally decided to go for a walk in the rainforest/deux mots . They suggested accompany them to Jack and Hilary their friends but not feeling well, they preferred to sit still in the guest house (rephrase car l'idée n'est pas bien organiséé ). Thus, Tom and Sally went into the forest early
After several hours of walking, Tom and Sally stopped near of/by a watercourse to have a break. They sat down on a stone and began to eat their biscuits. When Tom bent down to close his rucksack, Tom realised that there was a sign on the stone engraved. He observed this sign and faced facts: he knew this mark, he studies/past perfect in class. He told Sally that was a/autre article sign of the tribe, named Maya. He rounded/circled the stone to see if there would be another.... but he saw that there was a big hole. He lit... up with with his torch and discovered that it isn't/past tense a hole but the entrance of a tunnel. He decided with Sally to continue/ordre des mots.
After several meters, where were kneeling/rephrase, they arrived in/autre prep. a large room where there were large statues and statuettes representing the Maya's chief, and all sorts of objects who/pronom belonged to them.
I will come back later...
Réponse: Correction/Walk in rain forest de may, postée le 21-05-2011 à 02:41:42 (S | E)
Bonjour,
OK, for the rest..
Seeing it was late, they went back on their step, taking with them a statue to show at/autre préposition...need an article others their discovery. After the tunnel, the night had been falling, Tom was (going to) about to take the compass in the backpack but he realised that he/it wasn't inside. He was remembering/simple past, not continuous that he placed on the stone while they had eaten/past perfect continuous. He asked Sally if she didn't catch/autre verbe with her but she said no. Then he went around the stone but he didn't find it. He began/started again with the help of Sally/ Sally's help ,
They had been trying to join the lane but half an hour later they found themselves back in front of the stone.
They decided to stay.... the right way
Best wishes!
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Modifié par may le 21-05-2011 02:43
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