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Message de justineg4 posté le 26-03-2011 à 17:13:06 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous
voila J'ai écrit un essai mais je pense qu'il y a des erreurs. Pouvez me dire si vous en trouvez et m'aider à les corriger s'il vous plaît?
Le voici:
when i was 20 years old, i spent my holiday to Bali in Indonésia.
I was over there with my friend Candy and we stayed two weeks.
First, we visited small typical and beautiful villages.
Balinese person are very kind and welcoming.
During our stay, we took part in a celebration: a wedding, and see all traditions.
It was unforgettable.
The landscapes were magnificent with the rice-field and their temples.
In conclusion, it was my best holiday and i hope i will visit other country in Indonesia.
Mercibcp beaucoup pour votre aide
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Modifié par bridg le 26-03-2011 17:36
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-03-2011 17:36
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Message de justineg4 posté le 26-03-2011 à 17:13:06 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous
Le voici:
when i was 20 years old, i spent my holiday to Bali in Indonésia.
I was over there with my friend Candy and we stayed two weeks.
First, we visited small typical and beautiful villages.
Balinese person are very kind and welcoming.
During our stay, we took part in a celebration: a wedding, and see all traditions.
It was unforgettable.
The landscapes were magnificent with the rice-field and their temples.
In conclusion, it was my best holiday and i hope i will visit other country in Indonesia.
Merci
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Modifié par bridg le 26-03-2011 17:36
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-03-2011 17:36
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Réponse: Bali/Correction de dolfine56, postée le 26-03-2011 à 17:54:05 (S | E)
Hi,
don't forget to use I, and no i to say je"
Réponse: Bali/Correction de gerondif, postée le 26-03-2011 à 17:59:22 (S | E)
Bonjour,
when i was 20 years old, i spent my holiday to(spend n'est pas un verbe de mouvement) Bali in Indonésia.
I was over there with my friend Candy and we stayed for two weeks.
First, we visited small typical and beautiful villages.
Balinese person(le pluriel de person est people) are very kind and welcoming.
During our stay, we took part in a celebration: a wedding, and see(prétérit) all traditions.
It was unforgettable.
The landscapes were magnificent with the rice-field(pluriel) and their temples.
In conclusion, it was my best holiday and i hope i will visit other country(pluriel) in Indonesia.
Réponse: Bali/Correction de chadwick, postée le 26-03-2011 à 18:04:31 (S | E)
Bonjour justineg4,
j'ai remarqué certains points qui me semblent incorrects :
"when I was 20 years old, I spent my holiday to (ne faudrait-il pas plutôt "in"?) Bali in Indonesia (pas d'accent en anglais).
I was over there with my friend Candy and we stayed two weeks.
First, we visited small typical and beautiful villages.
Balinese person (c'est au pluriel donc plutôt "people") are very kind and welcoming.
During our stay, we took part in a celebration: a wedding, and see all traditions.
It was unforgettable.
The landscapes were magnificent with the rice-field and their temples.
In conclusion, it was my best holiday and I hope I will visit other countries than (pour plus de sens, non?) Indonesia."
Ce ne sont que des propositions. D'autres personnes pourront peut-être confirmer et vous en dire un peu plus peut-être.
Cordialement
Chadwick
Ah, gerondif a été plus rapide et a remarqué en plus "see" qui devrait être au prétérit, en effet.
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Modifié par chadwick le 26-03-2011 18:06
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-03-2011 18:51
Réponse: Bali/Correction de notrepere, postée le 27-03-2011 à 00:05:27 (S | E)
Hello'spend' convient dans le context.
2 [transitive] to use time for a particular purpose; to pass time (Oxford)
spend something + adverb/preposition
We spent the weekend in Paris.
How do you spend your spare time?
Her childhood was spent in Italy.
to use time doing something or being somewhere (Cambridge)
I think we need to spend more time together.
I spent a lot of time cleaning that room.
I've spent years building up my collection.
I spent an hour at the station waiting for the train.
How long do you spend on your homework?
My sister always spends ages in the bathroom.
We spent the weekend in London.
You can spend the night here if you like.
Réponse: Bali/Correction de gerondif, postée le 27-03-2011 à 12:05:16 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Ce n'est pas l'usage de spend qui est corrigé mais la préposition qui suit:
I went to Bali, I flew to Bali (mouvement, déplacement)
mais:
I spent the weekend in Paris,
I spent my holiday in Bali.
I had a wonderful time in Bali.
Réponse: Bali/Correction de justineg4, postée le 27-03-2011 à 22:59:01 (S | E)
Bonjour et merci
je vais pouvoir corriger tout ça.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 28-03-2011 08:29
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