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Message de julie32 posté le 12-02-2011 à 20:14:48 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je suis complètement démoralisée. Je dois faire un exposé pour Lundi en anglais. J'ai choisi comme sujet le Handball. Nous sommes deux à le faire et j'ai choisi de faire la première partie concernant le Handball en Général. Le problème, c'est que je suis vraiment, mais vraiment très mauvaise en Anglais. Je m'y prends assez tard mais étant à la fac j'ai eu pas mal de boulot qui m'ont un peu fait mettre cet exposé de côté. Donc, il est fait, mais le problème, c'est que j'ai besoin de quelqu'un pour corriger toutes mes fautes ( et je suis sure qu'il y en a des tonnes). J'espère que quelqu'un m'aidera d'ici lundi. Voici mon exposé à corriger :
Today, We'll talk to handball.
Firstly, I will introduce this presentation by talking about General Handball .
I - Some Generality
A- Definition and Rules of the Handball
Handball is a team sport in which two teams composed by seven players each compete with a ball to throw it into the goal of the other team.
A match is composed by two periods of 30 minutes at the end of which the team with the most goals has win.
The modern rules of handball have been created by the Danish Holger Nielsen in 1898. The Principle of the game is to score as many goals as possible while dribbling with the ball and making passes.The Player with the ball can't sit stationary more than 3 seconds and can't do only three steps without dribbling.
B- Players
Each team is composed by 7 players on court and up to 7 substitute players on the bench. Of the 7 players on the field, there is the goalkeeper who is responsible for defense purposes.
Left winger usually develops on the left side of the field. In defense, he will take office on the far left of the defense on the side along the touchline. In attack, always on the left side, he will lead against attacks.
The left rear part of the back line and is positioned on the left side of the center rear.
The center back or center half, placed in the midfield, leading the attacks and takes or attempts to penetrate the defense and is also called "playmaker. " Defensive position, he will be responsible for countering the opposing pivot.
The pivot is the attacking player who plays mainly on the six-meter line in the opposing back line, also called "lineman". Defensive position, he generally plays to his defense to try to intercept the ball or obstruct the transmission of the ball at the attackers.
The right rear part of the back line and is positioned on the right side of the center rear.
S'il vous plait, aidez-moi, je deviens dingue
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Modifié par lucile83 le 12-02-2011 20:42
Message de julie32 posté le 12-02-2011 à 20:14:48 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je suis complètement démoralisée. Je dois faire un exposé pour Lundi en anglais. J'ai choisi comme sujet le Handball. Nous sommes deux à le faire et j'ai choisi de faire la première partie concernant le Handball en Général. Le problème, c'est que je suis vraiment, mais vraiment très mauvaise en Anglais. Je m'y prends assez tard mais étant à la fac j'ai eu pas mal de boulot qui m'ont un peu fait mettre cet exposé de côté. Donc, il est fait, mais le problème, c'est que j'ai besoin de quelqu'un pour corriger toutes mes fautes ( et je suis sure qu'il y en a des tonnes). J'espère que quelqu'un m'aidera d'ici lundi. Voici mon exposé à corriger :
Today, We'll talk to handball.
Firstly, I will introduce this presentation by talking about General Handball .
I - Some Generality
A- Definition and Rules of the Handball
Handball is a team sport in which two teams composed by seven players each compete with a ball to throw it into the goal of the other team.
A match is composed by two periods of 30 minutes at the end of which the team with the most goals has win.
The modern rules of handball have been created by the Danish Holger Nielsen in 1898. The Principle of the game is to score as many goals as possible while dribbling with the ball and making passes.The Player with the ball can't sit stationary more than 3 seconds and can't do only three steps without dribbling.
B- Players
Each team is composed by 7 players on court and up to 7 substitute players on the bench. Of the 7 players on the field, there is the goalkeeper who is responsible for defense purposes.
Left winger usually develops on the left side of the field. In defense, he will take office on the far left of the defense on the side along the touchline. In attack, always on the left side, he will lead against attacks.
The left rear part of the back line and is positioned on the left side of the center rear.
The center back or center half, placed in the midfield, leading the attacks and takes or attempts to penetrate the defense and is also called "playmaker. " Defensive position, he will be responsible for countering the opposing pivot.
The pivot is the attacking player who plays mainly on the six-meter line in the opposing back line, also called "lineman". Defensive position, he generally plays to his defense to try to intercept the ball or obstruct the transmission of the ball at the attackers.
The right rear part of the back line and is positioned on the right side of the center rear.
S'il vous plait, aidez-moi, je deviens dingue
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Modifié par lucile83 le 12-02-2011 20:42
Réponse: Correction Exposé de notrepere, postée le 12-02-2011 à 21:15:39 (S | E)
HelloToday, We'll talk to handball.
parler à = talk to (somebody)
parler de = talk about (something)
Firstly, I will introduce this presentation by talking about General Handball .
en générale ne se traduit pas comme "General" + nom en anglais. Consultez un dictionnaire, s'il vous plaît.
I - Some Generality [pluriel]
A- Definition and Rules of the [à supprimer] Handball
Handball is a team sport in which two teams composed by (of) seven players each compete with a ball to throw it into the goal of the other team.
A match is composed by two periods of 30 minutes [ou two thirty-minute periods] at the end of which the team with the most goals has [à supprimer] win [accorde 'team' qui a le sens du mot pluriel].
The modern rules of handball have been [on ne peut pas utiliser le "present perfect" avec une date particulière; il faut le prétérit] created by the Danish Holger Nielsen in 1898. The Principle of the game is to score as many goals as possible while dribbling with the ball and making passes. The Player with the ball can't sit stationary more than 3 seconds and can
B- Players
Each team is composed by 7 players on court and up to 7 substitute players on the bench. Of the 7 players on the field, there is the goalkeeper who is responsible for defense purposes [un autre mot].
The Left winger usually develops [un autre mot] on the left side of the field. In defense, he will take office on the far left of the defense on the side along the touchline. In attack, always on the left side, he will lead against attacks.
The left rear part of the back line and is positioned [n'a pas de sens] on the left side of the center rear.
The center back or center half, placed in the midfield, leading [leads] the attacks and takes or attempts to penetrate the defense and is also called "playmaker. " In his Defensive position, he will be responsible for countering the opposing pivot.
The pivot is the attacking player who plays mainly on the six-meter line in the opposing back line, also called "lineman". In his Defensive position, he generally plays to his defense to try to intercept the ball or obstruct the transmission of the ball at the attackers.
The right rear part of the back line and is positioned [comme au dessous n'a pas de sens] on the right side of the center rear.
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Modifié par notrepere le 12-02-2011 21:33
Réponse: Correction Exposé de julie32, postée le 13-02-2011 à 09:35:32 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour cette aide précieuse. Sur certains points, je me rend compte que j'aurais pu éviter les fautes. En tout cas, merci beaucoup.
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