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Message de phy21 posté le 25-12-2010 à 16:10:50 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je passe mon bac cette année et je dois m'entrainer à faire des " essay " .
J'aimerais savoir si quelqu'un pouvait m'aider à corriger mes fautes s'il vous plaît .
Merci pour vos réponses.
An english saying claims " Money can't buy hapiness " . Lot of people think yes, money does allow someone to buy nice things,however money can't by everything. We can wonder if the money always can buy everything we want. On the one hand we will see if the money buy everything we want and on the other hand we will see why the money can't buy everything we want.
The money can buy lot of things. When we walk in the street we can see lots of shops. We can buy jewels,food,toys,etc... But you can't buy the appetite,the health, the friendship etc..
That's why the money can't buy everything , we can't buy friends or a girl/boyfriend. The money can buy only the material things, it does'nt allow to buy the feelings.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 25-12-2010 16:12
Message de phy21 posté le 25-12-2010 à 16:10:50 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je passe mon bac cette année et je dois m'entrainer à faire des " essay " .
J'aimerais savoir si quelqu'un pouvait m'aider à corriger mes fautes s'il vous plaît .
Merci pour vos réponses.
An english saying claims " Money can't buy hapiness " . Lot of people think yes, money does allow someone to buy nice things,however money can't by everything. We can wonder if the money always can buy everything we want. On the one hand we will see if the money buy everything we want and on the other hand we will see why the money can't buy everything we want.
The money can buy lot of things. When we walk in the street we can see lots of shops. We can buy jewels,food,toys,etc... But you can't buy the appetite,the health, the friendship etc..
That's why the money can't buy everything , we can't buy friends or a girl/boyfriend. The money can buy only the material things, it does'nt allow to buy the feelings.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 25-12-2010 16:12
Réponse: Correction essay de alphonse46, postée le 25-12-2010 à 16:42:22 (S | E)
Bonjour,Phy
english: les mots faisant référence à des nations prennent une majuscule: English
an English saying claims, je préférerais:as the English saying goes
somebody buy something,money doesn't, but with money it does
'etc' = expression française, en anglais: and so on
Il n'est pas d'usage de mettre 'the' devant des généralités, telles que: appetite,health, friendship, or money and feelings
Bon courage
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Modifié par alphonse46 le 25-12-2010 17:38
Réponse: Correction essay de gerondif, postée le 25-12-2010 à 18:32:33 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
bleu ou rouge: erreurs à corriger. vert: erreurs corrigées.
An english saying claims " Money can't buy happiness " . Lot of people think yes("pensent que oui"? a lot of people think so,ou alors a lot of people think: "Yes, money can buy....) money does allow someone (correct mais me paraît trop académique, j'aurais mis you)to buy nice things,however money can't by everything. We can wonder if the money can always buy everything we want. On the one hand we will see if the money buys everything we want and on the other hand we will see why the money can't buy everything we want.
The money can buy lot of things. When we walk in (on)the street we can see lots of shops. We can buy jewels,food,toys,etc... But you can't buy the appetite,the health, the friendship etc.. (comme le dit Alphonse 34, pas de the devant une généralité)
That's why the money can't buy everything , we can't buy friends or a girl/boyfriend. The money can buy only the material things, it does'nt allow to buy the feelings.(allow est maladroit ici pensez aux Beatles: " Money can't buy me love".
Réponse: Correction essay de dsmith, postée le 26-12-2010 à 02:43:03 (S | E)
Bonjour - une correction:
A lot of people...
ou
Lots of people...
Tous les deux veulent dire la même chose. Mais on ne peut pas dire "Lot of people..."
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-12-2010 08:00
Réponse: Correction essay de phy21, postée le 26-12-2010 à 17:17:04 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour vos réponses .
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