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Message de tsape01 posté le 16-12-2010 à 16:51:00 (S | E | F)
Salut a tous! Bonjour,
Je suis au "niveau débutant" et je suis présentement au chapitre 20.
Voici un texte que j'ai écrit en anglais et j'aimerais me faire corriger xxxxx ; çame m'aiderait beaucoup xxxxxx.
Merci!
Voici mon texte:
My name ist Tiwa Ernest.I am twenty years old.I am very happy to write this writing.My brother's name is Tiwa Stephane.Stephane is a first boy in my familie.Tiwa vicky is Tiwa Roger's wife and Roger is a husband of Vicky.Rachele is my aunt,Regime is my grandmother,Joe ist a husband of my aunt and my father is Joe's brother-in-law,then my father is Rachele's brother and Joe is Regime' son-in low.Rose is also my father's sister and almost Rose is my father's sister,she is also my aunt.Stephane is young and big.He is twenty-one.He frequent in the university.He is a small boy.He is older than me becose me I am nineteen.
Now so,I am watching a television.Eto'o Fils come just to scores a goal.My brother is sleeping.My father is a Hotel's maneger.His friend (a friend of my broder Olivier) come and ask:-Where is Olivier,your brother?I have answer
livier is sleeping since morning.He ask me again:Olivier plays football?I am say:-yes,he's but me,I dont play football.Like my brother sleeping again do you want to now what i do a long of my week?He says yes.I say ok:-I watch a television and for this time,Olivier play a game.I learn Music and Olivier carries a baby.
And a Olivier's friend ask me again:-What time do you wake up all the day?I am saying:-I wake up at half past nine.He is saying:-do you going out at five to four?I'm say:-No,I don't wake up at five to four and Olivier doesn't also wake up at the same time.(end of the conversation with Olivier's friend).
Me,I live in Yaounde.I am from Cameroun.I am a Cameroonian.I am the tallest boy in my family.My house is the most expensive in the town and I have any problems with my family.I speak always french.Goodbye.
xxxxxxx
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Modifié par lucile83 le 16-12-2010 17:39
Vos exigences ont été un peu restreintes.
Message de tsape01 posté le 16-12-2010 à 16:51:00 (S | E | F)
Je suis au "niveau débutant" et je suis présentement au chapitre 20.
Voici un texte que j'ai écrit en anglais et j'aimerais me faire corriger xxxxx ; ça
Merci!
Voici mon texte:
My name ist Tiwa Ernest.I am twenty years old.I am very happy to write this writing.My brother's name is Tiwa Stephane.Stephane is a first boy in my familie.Tiwa vicky is Tiwa Roger's wife and Roger is a husband of Vicky.Rachele is my aunt,Regime is my grandmother,Joe ist a husband of my aunt and my father is Joe's brother-in-law,then my father is Rachele's brother and Joe is Regime' son-in low.Rose is also my father's sister and almost Rose is my father's sister,she is also my aunt.Stephane is young and big.He is twenty-one.He frequent in the university.He is a small boy.He is older than me becose me I am nineteen.
Now so,I am watching a television.Eto'o Fils come just to scores a goal.My brother is sleeping.My father is a Hotel's maneger.His friend (a friend of my broder Olivier) come and ask:-Where is Olivier,your brother?I have answer
livier is sleeping since morning.He ask me again:Olivier plays football?I am say:-yes,he's but me,I dont play football.Like my brother sleeping again do you want to now what i do a long of my week?He says yes.I say ok:-I watch a television and for this time,Olivier play a game.I learn Music and Olivier carries a baby.And a Olivier's friend ask me again:-What time do you wake up all the day?I am saying:-I wake up at half past nine.He is saying:-do you going out at five to four?I'm say:-No,I don't wake up at five to four and Olivier doesn't also wake up at the same time.(end of the conversation with Olivier's friend).
Me,I live in Yaounde.I am from Cameroun.I am a Cameroonian.I am the tallest boy in my family.My house is the most expensive in the town and I have any problems with my family.I speak always french.Goodbye.
xxxxxxx
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Modifié par lucile83 le 16-12-2010 17:39
Vos exigences ont été un peu restreintes.
Réponse: Correction/texte en anglais de gerondif, postée le 16-12-2010 à 19:03:30 (S | E)
Bonjour,
essayons d'être assez compétent pour vous corriger !
My name ist(allemand) Tiwa Ernest.mettez le prénom en premier.
I am twenty years old.
I am very happy to write this writing. répétition, this story, this text, this essay.
My brother's name is Stephane Tiwa.Stephane is a first boy (le plus vieux)in my familie.
vicky Tiwa is Tiwa Roger's wife and Roger is a husband of Vicky.(cas possessif)
Rachele is my aunt,Regime is my grandmother,Joe ist a husband of my aunt and my father is Joe's brother-in-law,then my father is Rachele's brother and Joe is Regime' son-in low.Rose is also my father's sister and almost Rose is my father's sister,she is also my aunt.Stephane is young and big.He is twenty-one.He frequent in (mettez un verbe: to go to , to attend)
(paragraphe familial assez indigeste, sinon pour manipuler le vocabulaire des liens familiaux)
so now ,I am watching a television.Eto'o Fils come just to scores(forme du temps à revoir) a goal.My brother is sleeping.My father is a Hotel's maneger.His friend (a friend of my broder Olivier) come(s du présent) and ask(idem):-Where is Olivier,your brother?I have answer: Olivier is sleeping(mauvais temps avec since) since morning.He ask(s) me again:Olivier plays football(familier comme forme interrogative)?I am say(n'existe pas comme conjugaison):-yes,he's,(ne pas abréger is) but me,I(forme d'insistance calquée sur le français) don't play football.Like (ne va pas pour dire comme en conjonction)my brother (auxiliaire être)sleeping again do you want to now(connaitre, savoir, orthographe) what i do a long of my week?He says yes.I say ok:-I watch a television and for this time(pendant ce temps, trouvez autre chose),Olivier play(s) a game.I learn Music and Olivier carries(il le transporte ? il est lourd ?) a baby.
And
Me,I(forme d'insistance française) live in Yaounde.I am from Cameroun.I am a Cameroonian.I am the tallest boy in my family.My house is the most expensive in (the) town and I have any(implique un verbe négatif, sinon, cherchez aucun) problems with my family.I always speak french.Goodbye.
difficile de vous "noter", revoyez vos conjugaisons du présent, les s en troisième personne du présent simple, le cas possessif, mais bravo pour la maîtrise des liens familiaux.
Réponse: Correction/texte en anglais de peet370, postée le 16-12-2010 à 19:40:19 (S | E)
Bonjour,
My name ist (auxiliare be sans le t) Tiwa Ernest. I am twenty years old. I am very happy to write this writing (mot incorrect). My brother's name is Tiwa Stephane. Stephane is a (pourquoi l'article indéfini a) first boy in my familie. Tiwa vicky is Tiwa Roger's wife and Roger is a husband of Vicky (utilisez ici le cas possessif). Rachele is my aunt, Regime is my grandmother, Joe ist a husband of my aunt (utiliser le cas possessif) and my father is Joe's brother-in-law, then my father is Rachele's brother and Joe is Regime' son-in low. Rose is also my father's sister and almost Rose is my father's sister, she is also my aunt. Stephane is young and big. He is twenty-one. He frequent in the university. He is a small boy. He is older than me becose (mot mal écrit) me I am nineteen.
Now so, I am watching a television. Eto'o Fils (il faut utiliser le cas possessif et mettre le mot français en anglais) come just scores (utiliser > auxiliaire avoir + just + verbe au passé) a goal. My brother is sleeping. My father is a Hotel's maneger (pas besoin de cas possessif). His friend (a friend of my broder, Olivier) come and ask : -Where is Olivier, your brother? I have answer livier is sleeping since morning. He ask me again: Olivier plays football? (il faudrait formuler la bonne question) I am say : -yes, he's but me, I dont play football. Like my brother sleeping again do you want to now what i do a long of my week? (je ne vois pas ce que pourrait signifier cette phrase) He says yes. I say ok: -I watch a television and for this time, Olivier play a game. I learn Music and Olivier carries a baby.
And a Olivier's friend ask me again: -What time do you wake up all the day? I am saying: -I wake up at half past nine. He is saying: -do you going out at five to four? I'm say : -No, I don't wake up at five to four and Olivier doesn't also wake up at the same time. (end of the conversation with Olivier's friend).
Me,I live in Yaounde. I am from Cameroun. I am a Cameroonian. I am the tallest boy in my family .My house is the most expensive in the town and I have any problems with my family. I speak always french.Goodbye.
Voilà, je pense que c'est corrigé il se peut qu'il y est encore des petites erreurs un membre prendra la suite ou corrigera les éventuelles erreurs restantes.
