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Oral sujet d'actualité - Clementi Ty
Message de lexxor posté le 04-10-2010 à 20:51:17 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à vous j'aurais besoin d'un petit coup de pouce pour ma présentation oral sur un sujet d'actualité de 5 minutes ! j'ai choisi de parler du suicide de Tyler Clementi
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Pouvez-vous m'aider a corriger ma préparation s'il vous plait?
Voici le résultat :
Good afternoon everybody and thank you for coming !
I am going to start with my presentation my name is Alexandre, I prepare a Highter Diploma in Electrical and Electronic Engineering at the University Institute of Technology in Poitiers. Now i'm talking about the Tyler Clementi Suicide in New Jersey.
Tyler Clementi commited suicide the 22 september after discovering that his roomate, Ravi and Wei live-streamed Clementi in a Sexual encounter with another male student without his knowledge.
The clementi's family lawyer said that after learning of the violation of his privacy, Clementi jumped off the George Washington Bridge which connects New Jersey with upper Manhattan. Ravi and Wei were charged with illegally taping Clementi having sex and posting the image on internet. They could face up to five years in prison
To conclue there is one dead child, driven to suicide by the careless act of two others whose lives are ruined and whose names will be inextricably linked to this terrible event.
Merci beaucoup de votre aide !!!
Message de lexxor posté le 04-10-2010 à 20:51:17 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à vous j'aurais besoin d'un petit coup de pouce pour ma présentation oral sur un sujet d'actualité de 5 minutes ! j'ai choisi de parler du suicide de Tyler Clementi
Lien Internet
Pouvez-vous m'aider a corriger ma préparation s'il vous plait?
Voici le résultat :
Good afternoon everybody and thank you for coming !
I am going to start with my presentation my name is Alexandre, I prepare a Highter Diploma in Electrical and Electronic Engineering at the University Institute of Technology in Poitiers. Now i'm talking about the Tyler Clementi Suicide in New Jersey.
Tyler Clementi commited suicide the 22 september after discovering that his roomate, Ravi and Wei live-streamed Clementi in a Sexual encounter with another male student without his knowledge.
The clementi's family lawyer said that after learning of the violation of his privacy, Clementi jumped off the George Washington Bridge which connects New Jersey with upper Manhattan. Ravi and Wei were charged with illegally taping Clementi having sex and posting the image on internet. They could face up to five years in prison
To conclue there is one dead child, driven to suicide by the careless act of two others whose lives are ruined and whose names will be inextricably linked to this terrible event.
Merci beaucoup de votre aide !!!
Réponse: Oral sujet d'actualité - Clementi Ty de gerondif, postée le 04-10-2010 à 22:20:20 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
texte assez correct et assez fluide.
Good afternoon everybody and thank you for coming !
I am going to start with my presentation ne se dit guère !
cf The Rolling Stones "Sympathy for the Devil" premières paroles:"Please allow me to introduce myself" on peut penser à : laissez moi me présenter, auxiliaire let...)
my name is Alexandre, I prepare a Highter Diploma in Electrical and Electronic Engineering at the University Institute of Technology in Poitiers. Now i'm talking about (j'aurais mis un futur proche)the Tyler Clementi Suicide in New Jersey.
Tyler Clementi commited(2t) suicide on the 22nd of September after discovering that his roomate(2m), Ravi and Wei live-streamed(plus logique au plus qaue parfait) Clementi in a Sexual encounter with another male student without his knowledge.
The Clementi's(mettez le nom de famille au pluriel) family lawyer said that after learning of the violation of his privacy, Clementi jumped off the George Washington Bridge which connects New Jersey with upper Manhattan. Ravi and Wei were charged with illegally taping Clementi having sex and posting the image on ****(manque un article) internet. They could face up to five years in prison
To conclude (je ne suis pas sûr que ce verbe conclude convienne) there is one dead child, driven to suicide by the careless act of two others whose lives are ruined and whose names will be inextricably linked to this terrible event.
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