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Message de piixlownd posté le 14-09-2010 à 17:46:22 (S | E | F)
Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger ces 3 petits textes s'il vous plaît ?
Merci par avance
Last summer, I went to London during two weeks in July. I was in an international campus where I met lots of new people. Furthermore, I improved a little in English. At the end of August, I went to " Le Grau du Roi " with my parents and finally, I went two days to Paris for the birth of my cousin.
With my family we usually went to " Le Grau du Roi ". Every afternoon, we went to the beach and every morning I went into the centre of town with my mother. The landscapes are splendid and the life relaxing.
If I had the choice, I would go round of Italy with some friends because it is a wonderful country and the food is delicious! However, nothing would be planned! It would so be a journey with full surprises and new developments !
Merci !
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-09-2010 19:31
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Message de piixlownd posté le 14-09-2010 à 17:46:22 (S | E | F)
Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger ces 3 petits textes s'il vous plaît ?Merci par avance
Last summer, I went to London during two weeks in July. I was in an international campus where I met lots of new people. Furthermore, I improved a little in English. At the end of August, I went to " Le Grau du Roi " with my parents and finally, I went two days to Paris for the birth of my cousin.
With my family we usually went to " Le Grau du Roi ". Every afternoon, we went to the beach and every morning I went into the centre of town with my mother. The landscapes are splendid and the life relaxing.
If I had the choice, I would go round of Italy with some friends because it is a wonderful country and the food is delicious! However, nothing would be planned! It would so be a journey with full surprises and new developments !
Merci !
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-09-2010 19:31
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Réponse: Correction / International campus de gerondif, postée le 14-09-2010 à 18:29:00 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Last summer, I went to London during(mauvais choix pour pendant + durée; regardez cet exemple: I was ill for two weeks during the holidays. "during" implique une question "when" alors que "for two weeks" implique une question "how long", pendant combien de temps) two weeks in July. I was in an international campus where I met lots of new people. Furthermore, I improved a little in English. At the end of August, I went to " Le Grau du Roi " with my parents and finally, I went (pendant)two days to Paris(je mettrais to Paris avant pendant deux jours) for the birth of my cousin.
With my family we usually went(je mettrais un présent d'habitude) to " Le Grau du Roi ". Every afternoon, we went to the beach and every morning I went into the centre of town( les anglais simplifieraient ce "into" trop précis, on dit souvent: "I am going to the town-centre") with my mother. The landscapes are splendid and the (à supprimer,c'est une généralité)life relaxing.
If I had the choice, I would go round of(à supprimer) Italy with some friends because it is a wonderful country and the food is delicious! However, nothing would be planned! It would so(mal placé, à mettre en début de phrase) be a journey with full(avec "plein" de surprises !! full="rempli de", un liquide dans un réservoir ou des gens dans une salle, préférer ici "beaucoup de")(par contre, si vous supprimez with,ce full peut convenir, un séjour plein de, rempli de....) surprises and new developments !
il y a beaucoup de "went" dans votre texte !
Réponse: Correction / International campus de piixlownd, postée le 14-09-2010 à 20:19:02 (S | E)
Je vous remercie très sincèrement pour votre réponse rapide et pour vos explications qui m'ont beaucoup aidé ! J'ai appris pleins de choses !
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