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Essay - The emerging-market banks
Message de sushis posté le 25-05-2010 à 05:01:13 (S | E | F)
Hello, here is my essay. If you want to underline the mistakes, you are welcome.
The emerging-market banks are starting to lead finance. Formerly, whereas emerging countries was already the factory of the world, the finance was still led by the west. Now things have changed.
Emerging-markets banks have kept old virtues like prudence. Thanks to that, most of the banks have more in deposit than they lend out unlike banks in rich country. And the state has also played an important role. In China, India, Russia and Brazil the state owned a big part of the banking system.
But in order to grow, emerging countries will maybe have to abandon this template. If consumers spend more, banks' deposits will decrease and banks will become less safe. Furthermore, people could also shift their deposits towards capital markets. And about the attempt to serve the hundreds of millions of unbanked people, while noble, the outcome is uncertain: it could lead to a disaster.
If they made the same mistakes as the west, they will have the same woes. It will be the case if they lend too much in hope to have a fast economic growth.
Thank you!
Message de sushis posté le 25-05-2010 à 05:01:13 (S | E | F)
Hello, here is my essay. If you want to underline the mistakes, you are welcome.
The emerging-market banks are starting to lead finance. Formerly, whereas emerging countries was already the factory of the world, the finance was still led by the west. Now things have changed.
Emerging-markets banks have kept old virtues like prudence. Thanks to that, most of the banks have more in deposit than they lend out unlike banks in rich country. And the state has also played an important role. In China, India, Russia and Brazil the state owned a big part of the banking system.
But in order to grow, emerging countries will maybe have to abandon this template. If consumers spend more, banks' deposits will decrease and banks will become less safe. Furthermore, people could also shift their deposits towards capital markets. And about the attempt to serve the hundreds of millions of unbanked people, while noble, the outcome is uncertain: it could lead to a disaster.
If they made the same mistakes as the west, they will have the same woes. It will be the case if they lend too much in hope to have a fast economic growth.
Thank you!
Réponse: Essay - The emerging-market banks de notrepere, postée le 25-05-2010 à 05:43:43 (S | E)
Hello! Les Français dorment, je travaille. 
The emerging-market banks are starting to lead finance (lead in the financial recovery; lead in the financial world). Formerly, whereas emerging countries was [accord] already the factory of the world, the finance was still led by the west (West). Now things have changed.
Emerging-markets banks have kept old virtues like (such as) prudence. Thanks to that (Because of this), most of the banks have more in deposit than they lend out unlike banks in rich (wealthy) country (Just one country?). And the state has also played an important role. In China, India, Russia and Brazil the state owned (past tense? do they still follow this model today or just in the past?) a big part of the banking system.
But in order to grow, emerging countries will (this means there is no doubt) maybe (this means there is doubt) have to abandon this template (model).
But in order to grow, emerging countries may need to abandon this model, or, will need to abandon this model. (You choose)
If consumers spend more, the banks' deposits will decrease and banks will become less safe. Furthermore, people could also shift their deposits towards capital markets.
And about the attempt to serve the hundreds of millions of unbanked people, while noble, the outcome is uncertain: it could lead to a disaster.
I don't understand this statement.
If they made [temps] the same mistakes as the west, they will have the same woes (suffer similar consequences. It (This) will be the case if they lend too much in hope to have a (hopes of having) fast economic growth.
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Modifié par notrepere le 25-05-2010 05:48
Réponse: Essay - The emerging-market banks de sushis, postée le 25-05-2010 à 14:25:13 (S | E)
Merci pour les corrections, j'ai presque tout compris ! Et pour ce que je n'ai pas compris (this à la place de it par exemple) je vais voir la leçon
Et pour cette phrase :
And about the attempt to serve the hundreds of millions of unbanked people, while noble, the outcome is uncertain: it could lead to a disaster.
Voici ce que j'ai voulu dire (je ne fais pas un traduction très proche, je modifie un peu la phrase pour bien expliquer ce que j'ai voulu dire) :
Et au sujet de la tentative de fournir un service bancaire aux centaines de millions de personnes qui n'ont pas de comptes en banques, bien que l'idée soit noble, le résultat est incertain : cela pourrait conduire à un désastre.
Et pour le mot "unbanked" bien qu'il ne soit pas courant, je l'ai vu dans un article d'un journal sérieu donc je tiens à l'utiliser.
Réponse: Essay - The emerging-market banks de notrepere, postée le 26-05-2010 à 22:07:01 (S | E)
Bonjour!Et au sujet de la tentative de fournir un service bancaire aux centaines de millions de personnes qui n'ont pas de comptes en banques, bien que l'idée soit noble, le résultat est incertain : cela pourrait conduire à un désastre.
And although the idea of attempting to provide banking services to the millions of people without them is noble, the result would be uncertain and could lead to disaster (or could have disastrous consequences).
I changed the word order so that it would read better.
Réponse: Essay - The emerging-market banks de sushis, postée le 28-05-2010 à 03:05:19 (S | E)
Thanks to that (Because of this)
Vu qu'il s'agit d'un événement positif, "thanks to this" n'est-il pas préférable ?
Réponse: Essay - The emerging-market banks de notrepere, postée le 28-05-2010 à 17:25:46 (S | E)
Hello!Yes, "Thanks to this" is OK too.
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