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Message de pitchows posté le 17-04-2010 à 10:55:13 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,j'aimerais bien être corrigée.
Je vous en remercie d'avance.
Sangstrom wants a poison because he wants to kill a person.
The druggist goes in behind shop for not be heard.
He wants to know why and who Sangstrom wants to kill.
I think that Sangstrom him will says who he wants to kill and why .
Then,the druggist him will give a poison.
The druggist wants to check if Sangstrom deserve the poison.
Sangstrom wants to kill her wife with the poison .
I think that the druggist is going to give the poison for some money.
The druggist has put some poison in the coffee of Sangstrom.
Sangstrom feels that it is not serious .
Sangstrom intends to shoot on the druggist with a pistol.
To stop Sangstrom,the druggist him says that if he shoot on him, he'll not found an antidote .
I think that it will have a homicide.
Merci.
Message de pitchows posté le 17-04-2010 à 10:55:13 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,j'aimerais bien être corrigée.Je vous en remercie d'avance.
Sangstrom wants a poison because he wants to kill a person.The druggist goes in behind shop for not be heard.
He wants to know why and who Sangstrom wants to kill.
I think that Sangstrom him will says who he wants to kill and why .
Then,the druggist him will give a poison.
The druggist wants to check if Sangstrom deserve the poison.
Sangstrom wants to kill her wife with the poison .
I think that the druggist is going to give the poison for some money.
The druggist has put some poison in the coffee of Sangstrom.
Sangstrom feels that it is not serious .
Sangstrom intends to shoot on the druggist with a pistol.
To stop Sangstrom,the druggist him says that if he shoot on him, he'll not found an antidote .
I think that it will have a homicide.
Merci.
Réponse: Correction de (mes) phrases de kha007, postée le 19-04-2010 à 13:39:54 (S | E)
Salut,
je ne suis pas vraiment bon en anglais. voila un peu mon avis.
Sangstrom wants a poison because he wants to kill a person (je crois qu'on peut dire «for killing someone».
The druggist goes in behind shop for not be heard.(que veux tu dire par là?)
He wants to know why and who (plus simple the reasons that ) Sangstrom wants to kill.
I thought that Sangstrom will tell him who his victim and his reason .
Then,the druggist him will give a poison.
The druggist wants to check if Sangstrom deserve the poison.
Sangstrom wants to kill her wife with the poison .
I think that the druggist is going to give the poison for some money.
The druggist has put some poison in the coffee of Sangstrom.
Sangstrom feels that it is not serious .
Sangstrom intends to shoot on the druggist with a pistol.
To stop Sangstrom,the druggist him says that if he shoot on him, he'll not found an antidote .
I think that it will have a homicide.
j'ai pas tout corrigé simplement c'est difficile de de faire une correction propr avec l'édteur du site.
Réponse: Correction de (mes) phrases de titomm, postée le 19-04-2010 à 17:28:36 (S | E)
hello,
Sangstrom wants a poison for killing someone. (peut-être mieux vaut-il utilisé "in order to kill someone", car pour exprimer "pour + verbe", il est préférable d'utiliser "to" ou "in order to" + verbe. A confirmer! Pour ma part la première réponse me semblait correcte.)
The druggist goes
) be heard.He wants to know why and who Sangstrom wants to kill.
I think that Sangstrom wiil "tell him" who he wants to kill and why .
Then,the druggist him (probleme de placement dans la phrase) will give a poison.
The druggist wants to check if Sangstrom deserve (conjugaison!) the poison.
Sangstrom wants to kill her (sangstrom est un homme ou une femme?) wife with the poison .
I think that the druggist is going to give the poison for some money.
The druggist
Sangstrom feels that it is not serious .
Sangstrom intends to shoot on the druggist with a pistol.
To stop Sangstrom,the druggist him (placement??) says that if he shoot (conjugaison) on him, he'll not found (conjugaison) an antidote .
I think that it will have (quelle est la strcture pareticulière pour "il y a", à conjuguer ici au futur
) a homicide. Voila pour les fautes que j'ai pu voir... hihihi...
See ya.
Réponse: Correction de (mes) phrases de irishseb, postée le 20-04-2010 à 16:48:50 (S | E)
Hello
Titomm, je crois que tu as oublié quelques fautes, voici ma correction:
"Sangstrom wants a poison
The druggist goes at the back of the shop
He wants to know who Sangstrom wants to kill, and why.
I think that Sangstrom will tell him who he wants to kill and why .
Then,the druggist will give him a poison.
The druggist wants to check if Sangstrom deserves the poison.
Sangstrom wants to kill his wife with the poison .
I think that the druggist is going to give him the poison for some money.
The druggist
Sangstrom feels that it is not serious .
Sangstrom intends to shoot
To stop Sangstrom,the druggist tells him that if he shoots
I think there won't be a homicide.
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Modifié par irishseb le 20-04-2010 16:50
Réponse: Correction de (mes) phrases de pitchows, postée le 06-05-2010 à 18:44:21 (S | E)
ok merci beaucoup.
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