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Correction- Essay - A World Without rule
Message de zawa posté le 04-02-2010 à 17:32:05 (S | E | F)
Today it is often said that a better World, would be a World without Rules. Can we be sure of it? No! I have seen the movie “LES ENFANTS DE TIMPELBACH”, children don’t respect any rules, and it is catastrophic! At first we could explain how it would be (the anarchy!), but second we could say that it would be a tyranny. Last we will explain why it would be intolerable, and that people would do anything
If there wasn’t any rules, people would do anything. For example “Les enfants de Timpelbach” when the parents abandoned their children, Children don’t respect any rules, and it is catastrophic! They are violents.
It would be a tyranny. That is to say Bigger should hit smaller. They wouldn’t respects rule and nobody could stop it.
Without rules, nobody would work. Schools could be closed, and pupils wouldn’t work. People could steal, kill, and do anything! There wouldn’t be any future.
A World without Rules would be Hell with a lot of devils! The hardest (toughest) could traumatize the weakest. It would be really stupid! We would be animals … (Or not …Because even animals have rules! )
Message de zawa posté le 04-02-2010 à 17:32:05 (S | E | F)
Today it is often said that a better World, would be a World without Rules. Can we be sure of it? No! I have seen the movie “LES ENFANTS DE TIMPELBACH”, children don’t respect any rules, and it is catastrophic! At first we could explain how it would be (the anarchy!), but second we could say that it would be a tyranny. Last we will explain why it would be intolerable, and that people would do anything
If there wasn’t any rules, people would do anything. For example “Les enfants de Timpelbach” when the parents abandoned their children, Children don’t respect any rules, and it is catastrophic! They are violents.
It would be a tyranny. That is to say Bigger should hit smaller. They wouldn’t respects rule and nobody could stop it.
Without rules, nobody would work. Schools could be closed, and pupils wouldn’t work. People could steal, kill, and do anything! There wouldn’t be any future.
A World without Rules would be Hell with a lot of devils! The hardest (toughest) could traumatize the weakest. It would be really stupid! We would be animals … (Or not …Because even animals have rules! )
Réponse: Correction- Essay - A World Without rule de gerondif, postée le 04-02-2010 à 18:08:39 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Today it is often said that a better World, would be a World without Rules. Can we be sure of it? No! I have seen the movie “LES ENFANTS DE TIMPELBACH”, children respect any (manque la négation)rules, and it is catastrophic! At first we could explain how it’s(en trop) would be (the anarchy!), but in the second way (ne se dit guère)we could say that it’s(en trop) would be a tyranny. In the third time ne se dit pas)we will explain why it would be intolerable, and that people would make(= fabriquer)plutôt do) anything
If there wasn’t any rule (le pluiel irait mieux), people would make anything. For example “Les enfants de Timpelbach” when the parents abandoned them children, Children respect any(négation ?) rules, and it is catastrophic! There are violent(il y a est suivi d'un nom, ici un il y a pluriel est suivi d'un adjectif esseulé)
It’s would be a tyranny. That is to say Bigger should hit smaller(vous l'avez mieux réussi un peu plus bas). There wouldn’t .... rule that why nobody could stop it.(peu compréhensible)
Without rules, nobody would work. Schools could be closed, and pupils wouldn’t work. People could steal, kill, and make anything like they would! There wouldn’t be any future.
A World without Rules would be
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