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Message de l0urax posté le 06-01-2010 à 21:14:50 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir,
tout d'abord j'éspère être sur le bon endroit, je viens de taper un texte et j'aimerais savoir s'il y a des fautes..
je vous remercie d'avance.
This document is an extract from a magazine article, It must have been written in NEWSWEEK.
The date is not specified but we can deduce that this article it was written in years two thousand,
because the photo of this woman reminds many photo magazines like "Rolling Stones" . It tackles
the theme of having children.
What jumps over the eyes is the image of a young woman holding baby shoes,we remark on his face feeling dubious.
At the top we can the name of the magazine in large print.
Finally on the left, there are two catchwords « HAVING KIDS », wich summarizing what the subject
deals.
This article is to raise people's consciousness to the fact that More and more couples are no longer choosing to have children. The photo shows the subject very well, the woman takes the tip of finger, she takes the shoes as a disgust, a sort of rejection ..
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Message de l0urax posté le 06-01-2010 à 21:14:50 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir,
tout d'abord j'éspère être sur le bon endroit, je viens de taper un texte et j'aimerais savoir s'il y a des fautes..
je vous remercie d'avance.
This document is an extract from a magazine article, It must have been written in NEWSWEEK.
The date is not specified but we can deduce that this article it was written in years two thousand,
because the photo of this woman reminds many photo magazines like "Rolling Stones" . It tackles
the theme of having children.
What jumps over the eyes is the image of a young woman holding baby shoes,we remark on his face feeling dubious.
At the top we can the name of the magazine in large print.
Finally on the left, there are two catchwords « HAVING KIDS », wich summarizing what the subject
deals.
This article is to raise people's consciousness to the fact that More and more couples are no longer choosing to have children. The photo shows the subject very well, the woman takes the tip of finger, she takes the shoes as a disgust, a sort of rejection ..
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Modifié par lucile83 le 06-01-2010 21:20
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Réponse: Correction/having children de seb06000, postée le 06-01-2010 à 21:23:08 (S | E)
bonsoir,
voici ce qui ne va pas:
"This document is an extract from a magazine article, It must have been
written in NEWSWEEK. The date is not specified but we can
deduce that this article it( pas de répétition de sujet comme en français) was written in years two thousand( vous pouvez l'écrire en chiffre) ,
because the photo of this woman reminds (construction de 'to remain') many
photo magazines like "Rolling Stones" . It tackles
the theme of having children.
What jumps over the eyes is the image of a young woman holding baby shoes,
we remark (voc) on his face feeling dubious. At the top we can the name of
the magazine in large print. Finally on the left, there are two
catchwords « HAVING KIDS », wich( relatif) summarizing what the subject
deals.
This article is to raise people's consciousness to the fact that More and
more couples are no longer choosing to have children. The photo
shows the subject very well, the woman takes the tip of finger, she
takes the shoes as a disgust, a sort of rejection .
Voilà!
Une autre relecture sera sans doute nécessaire!
Amicalement
sébastien
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