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Correction/collective panic
Message de lekidolittel posté le 03-01-2010 à 15:08:29 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai un sujet à rendre pour lundi, j'aimerais que vous m'aidiez à corriger les phrases qui ne veulent rien dire et les fautes car ma professeur est stricte!! (ras le bol des mauvaises notes alors que je medépouille!! :cry: fais ce que je peux ).
C'est le suivant :
Do you think that a radio or Tv programme could cause such collective panic today? Why or Why not??
(150 mots)
1. Rappelez brièvement dans l 'intro le déroulement de l'évènement de 1938
2. Dans le devellopement vous comparerez le role joué par les medias a l'époque et aujourd'hui
To begin with the radio was invented in 1895 whereas the television in 1930. It was real revolution. However it's two media are sometimes a problem. In 1938, the radio play broadcast flash info, the aliens would attack the city. Actually it was a hoax. Do you think that a radio or TV programm could cause such collectiv pani today ? why or why not?
I yes, the media could cause apanic!
Today the television is the first media. In the times sha cost very expensive, as a result the ratings was low. So, the information broadcasted had not enough influence. However, today many family have television. They watch at the information. If the anchorman speak about an accident, the listeners lelieves it. Because the media is sure. That's why, I think that for example TF1 broadcast the next information : A huge meteorite crashes on earth, it would be the panic.
II No, the media couldn't cause a panic :
(ça arrive)!!
Merci d'avance
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Modifié par lucile83 le 03-01-2010 15:14
Message de lekidolittel posté le 03-01-2010 à 15:08:29 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai un sujet à rendre pour lundi, j'aimerais que vous m'aidiez à corriger les phrases qui ne veulent rien dire et les fautes car ma professeur est stricte!! (ras le bol des mauvaises notes alors que je me
C'est le suivant :
Do you think that a radio or Tv programme could cause such collective panic today? Why or Why not??
(150 mots)
1. Rappelez brièvement dans l 'intro le déroulement de l'évènement de 1938
2. Dans le devellopement vous comparerez le role joué par les medias a l'époque et aujourd'hui
To begin with the radio was invented in 1895 whereas the television in 1930. It was real revolution. However it's two media are sometimes a problem. In 1938, the radio play broadcast flash info, the aliens would attack the city. Actually it was a hoax. Do you think that a radio or TV programm could cause such collectiv pani today ? why or why not?
I yes, the media could cause apanic!
Today the television is the first media. In the times sha cost very expensive, as a result the ratings was low. So, the information broadcasted had not enough influence. However, today many family have television. They watch at the information. If the anchorman speak about an accident, the listeners lelieves it. Because the media is sure. That's why, I think that for example TF1 broadcast the next information : A huge meteorite crashes on earth, it would be the panic.
II No, the media couldn't cause a panic :
(ça arrive)!!
Merci d'avance
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Modifié par lucile83 le 03-01-2010 15:14
Réponse: Correction/collective panic de seb06000, postée le 03-01-2010 à 15:27:03 (S | E)
bonjour,
je vous indique les choses à parfaire:
"To begin with the radio was invented in 1895 whereas the television in 1930. It was (il manque un article) real revolution. However it's (il faut un démonstratif pluriel au lieu de 'it's') two media are sometimes a problem( mal dit, il faut développer) . In 1938, the radio play broadcast flash info, the aliens would attack the city. Actually it was a hoax. Do you think that a radio or TV programm could cause such collectiv pani (ortho) today ? why or why not?
Today the (article inutile) television is the first media. In the times sha( ?) cost very expensive, as a result the ratings was low. So, the information broadcasted (c'est un adjectif donc épithète en anglais) had not enough influence. However, today many family have television. They watch at( préposition inutile) the information( non pas ici...) . If the anchorman( voc) speak (conjugaison) about an accident, the listeners lelieves (ortho +conjugaison) it. Because the media is sure. That's why, I think that for example TF1 broadcast the next (pas ici) information : A huge meteorite crashes on earth, it would be the panic.
NB: Bien sur dans votre développement vous ne mettrez pas " I " "II" mais des mots de liaison "first" 'second' etc
Amicalement
sébastien
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Modifié par seb06000 le 03-01-2010 15:27
Réponse: Correction/collective panic de lekidolittel, postée le 03-01-2010 à 16:17:24 (S | E)
Merci encore pour ta réponse je te donne encore du travail!^^ Autrement mon texte est bien sa repond au sujet??
Texte en anglais :
To begin with the radio was invented in 1895 whereas the television in 1930. It was a real revolution. However there are two media are sometimes a problem(Je ne voit pas se que je peux mettre d’autres) . In 1938, the radio play broadcast flash info, the aliens would attack the city. Actually it was a hoax. Do you think that a radio or TV programm could cause such collectiv panic today ? why or why not?
Firstly, yes the media could cause panic!
Today television is the first media. In the times she cost very expensive, as a result the ratings was low. So, the information broadcast?? had not enough influence. However, today many family have television. They watch the news . If the Anchorman speaking ?? about an accident, the listeners believing it. Because the media is sure. That's why, I think that for example TF1 broadcast the information : A huge meteorite crashes on earth, it would be the panic.
Secondly, No the media couldn’t cause a panic!
The popularity of the media increases. However some are sceptic. Because sometimes the television deceive. For example : the death of Younes, a little boy. The people set outstrip them with the media (je ne suis pas sur j’ai chercher sur un traducteur je veuc dire que les gens prennent leur distances avec les medias). Channels sometimes manipulate (téléspéctateur). So, the people does not believing the media.
On the whole, the media are very important for broadcast information in the world, but we have to take our distances.
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