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Message de patricia40 posté le 16-11-2009 à 21:28:10
Voilà donc le texte final :
" So,I present Roger Federer, he's Swiss and he's a famous tennisman.
He likes to play the Playstation, listen to music, and he likes to play cards.
His hobbies include reading a lot of newpapers and magazines. He has won many times because he plays very well.
Since the tsunami, he has helped UNICEF.
He has a habit of winning and he's used to train before a big tennis match.
He loves chocolate and this is why it is associated whith the compagny Lindt.
He shouldn't stop play tennis because he play very well.
I'd like be strong in sports like him. "
"On the picture,he weeps for joy because he has won a cup of Roland Garros."
Encore merci de m'aider à le corriger.
Cette fois c'est le définitif, (espérons-le) ^^
vous êtes
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-03-2010 17:20
Réponse: Vérification de texte de marika0405, postée le 16-11-2009 à 21:58:36
Let me introduce Federer, he's a famous Swiss tennisman. His hobbies are reading. He likes reading a lot of newspapers and magazines. He plays very well, that's why he won many times. He has been helping UNICEF since the Tsunami devastated a part of Indonesia. He often wins/ is used to winning and always trains before an important tennis match. He loves chocolate and this might explain why he is associated with Lindt Company ( je n'ai pas très bien compris ce que tu as voulu dire ).
He plays tennis very well and I think he shouldn't stop it.
On the picture he cries for joy because he has won the Roland Garros Cup.
I'd like to be as sporty as him.
Voila , j'espère t'avoir aidée. Bye !
Réponse: Vérification de texte de seb06000, postée le 17-11-2009 à 05:41:11
bonjour,
juste un complément pour Marika0405 Merci pour l'aide que vous apportez aux membres. En revanche, corriger leurs erreurs est contreproductif. Il faut indiquer entre parenthèses les erreurs et les pistes de correction puis laisser le membre rectifier de lui-même en cherchant. Ainsi ses erreurs lui seront profitables!
Amicalement
sebastien
Réponse: Vérification de texte de cecil_ward, postée le 17-11-2009 à 16:13:54
"... a famous Swiss tennisman" - no such word as "tennisman" - this needs to be "tennis player". (Although we have a certain number of compounds containing man: policeman, chairman, postman, milkman (where the word man is reduced to a suffix pronounced -/mn/ and compounds like "space man"). But it is not generally possible to use man in compounds for trades professions and roles. Examples: footballer but never *football man. I'm afraid these have to be looked up in a dictionary.
"he plays very well that's why he won many times." - needs to be "why he has won many times" as you're talking about a period stretching to the present (Federer has not retired, nor is his period of success finished), rather than talking about a period of repeated wins that had a beginning and end in the past. (Example: he won many times that year.)
"shouldn't stop it" - should probably be simply "shouldn't stop (now)" (with no "it"). This is probably because hearers think of the other meaning of "stop" which is "to _cause_ something to cease" or "to prevent something (from happening or from continuing)". There is a big overlap between these, but here Federer is not trying to cause anything to stop happening, but would be choosing to stop.
My nose is bleeding. I'm trying to stop it.
I've been smoking for years and I wish I could stop.
I can't stop thinking about him.
Stop it! You're making that noise again. It's really irritating.
Stop me making a fool of myself.
"On the picture" - don't understand. ("On TV"?)
Réponse: Vérification de texte de patricia40, postée le 18-11-2009 à 15:27:26
Non, "on the picture" car je dois présenter Roger Federer sur une photo ;)
""Réponse: Vérification de texte de marika0405, postée le 16-11-2009 à 21:58:36 (S | E)
He loves chocolate and this might explain why he is associated with Lindt Company ( je n'ai pas très bien compris ce que tu as voulu dire ).
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Je voulais dire que roger aime les chocolat, et c'est pour ça qu'il s'est associé avec Lindt
Mais ce n'est pas grave, je ne le mettrais pas.
Merci de ton aide, ça me sert beaucoup
Réponse: Vérification de texte de mariane, postée le 18-11-2009 à 15:54:32
Bonjour est ce que vous pouvez regarder si mon texte est correct :
Hello, My name is Mariane , i am ten and i com from in France !
Réponse: Vérification de texte de patricia40, postée le 18-11-2009 à 16:06:53
Je crois que c'est plutôt Hello, My name is ------, i'm ten years old, mais la suite je ne comprends pas très bien :s
Sinon comment on pourrait dire : Il mange 2 fois par jour beaucoup de chocolat ? ( He eats five times a week chocolate bars but he shouldn't eat so much) ?