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Message de violet91 posté le 31-01-2008 à 12:39:44 (S | E | F)
. Rendez-vous avec vous! Il ne faut plus lâcher cette jeune "écervelée".. Je "serre" de plus près mon grand ...inspirateur.

Les dés sont jetés et l'affaire "dans le sac" .

La secrétaire modèle dont la robe de coton frais et fleuri se fermait par des boutons nacrés et un petit col "claudine" amidonné était occupée à taper un contrat d'assurance pour un riche client. Elle entendait , de l'autre côté de la cloison, Mr. Harry , le patron de l'agence, bavarder bruyamment avec deux hommes vulgaires qui n'avaient pas manqué de l'importuner tout à l'heure, avec leurs allusions déplacées. Harry avait une drôle de façon de se déplacer, imprévisible . Il était toujours où on ne l'attendait pas !...En un instant, le calme revenu, il fut près d'elle, enjoué : -" Voilà 40.000 dollars, ma belle ! L'affaire de la journée ! Merci de les déposer à la banque de ma part, en sortant,d'accord ? ..Et ne partez pas avec ! " taquina-t-il.

Sourdement ,l'idée monta . Elle tenait , là , la clé du bonheur de Sam, comme du sien !
Un monde nouveau ! La vie ensemble ! L'amour à tout jamais !

Elle enveloppa l'énorme somme dans deux pages du journal quotidien et glissa le tout au fond de son sac-besace, désormais alourdi. Il lui fallut moins de temps qu'elle ne l'aurait cru pour tout quitter.
Cet homme hilare..ces lieux..cette ville maudite ..ne la reverraient plus ! Elle était déjà sur l'autoroute de la fortune , quand " l' ombre d'un doute " s'insinua. Elle se sentit rougir. Son coeur battait la chamade. La sueur perlait à son front. L'été se faisait étouffant , pensa-t-elle. Son foulard sur la tête pour dissimuler sa blondeur et ses lunettes noires pouvaient la faire passer inaperçue. Marion, dans tous ses états, choisit de quitter ..le sien..pour le Texas, où son amant , averti, la rejoindrait.

Se pouvait-il que l'on passât si vite du petit agneau à la "brebis galeuse "? En un clin d'oeil ? Non! Non! Ce n'était pas si simple !

Pourtant, pour Sam, pour son amour, Marion avançait...Au diable ,ces scrupules encombrants !..

Good luck again..et à vos plumes d'oie,encre noire ..! Shush!...

Correction prévue le vendredi 8 février.

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Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de marie11, postée le 31-01-2008 à 17:03:29 (S | E)
Bonjour Violet91.

The die is cast. It's in the bag.

The perfect secretary, whose light flowery cotton dress was fastened by pearl buttons and a small starched Claudine collar, was typing an insurance contract for a rich customer. She could hear, from the other side of the partition, Mr. Harry, the boss of the agency, chatting noisily with two vulgar men who had not refrained from bothering her,a short while ago, with their uncalled-for allusions.
Harry had a funny way of moving, unpredictable. He was always here when you didn't expect him. In an instant, the quietness came back, he stood close to her, cheerful:
- « Here are 40.000 dollars, my girl! The deal of the day! Please, could you deposit them at the bank on my behalf, when you go out, all right?.. And do not vanish with them ! » He teased.
Insidiously, the idea crossed her mind. She held, at that moment, the key of Sam's happiness, as well as hers!
Living together! Love for ever! A new world!
She wrapped this huge sum into two sheets of the daily newspaper and slid the whole to the bottom of her shoulder-bag ,made heavy henceforth.It took her less time than she would have believed to leave everything.
This hilarious man, these places, this cursed city, would not see her again any more! She was already on the motorway of fortune, when " the shadow of a doubt " wormed its way into her. She felt blushing. Her heart was pounding. Beads of sweat stood out on her forehead.
What a scorching summer day ! she thought.The scarf on her head which hid her fairness and her dark glasses could make her pass unnoticed. Marion,who was all worked up, chose to leave her state for Texas, where her lover,who had been informed, would join her.
Was it possible that one could change,so fast, from a small lamb to a "black sheep"? In a blink of an eye? No! No! It was not so simple!

Nevertheless, for Sam, for her love, Marion kept moving forward... The devil take these cumbersome scruples !

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de maya92, postée le 01-02-2008 à 15:33:48 (S | E)
hello dear violet,

The die is cast and it's in the bag.

The perfect secretary whose clear and flowered cotton dress, done up by pearly buttons and a small starched Peter Pan collar was busy typing an insurance contract for a rich client. On the other side of the partition, she heard Mr. Harry, the agency manager, chatting loudly with two coarse men who didn't fail to bother her a moment ago with their uncalled-for comments. Harry had a funny unpredictable way of moving around. He was always where he was not expected!.. In a while, it was quiet again, he came by her and said cheerfully :"Here are 40.000 $, sweetie ! The deal of the day ! Thanks for depositing them in the bank when you leave, ok !..But don't run away with them !" he teased her.
Slyly, the idea welled up. She held the key for Sam's happiness and hers as well. A new world ! Life together ! Love forever !
She wrapped up the huge amount of money into two sheets of the daily paper and slided the whole at the bottom of her shoulder bag, heavy now. She needed less time she would have imagined to give up everything.
That scoffing man, those places, that cursed town, would never see her again !She was already on the motorway to fortune when the 'shadow of a doubt' crept over her. She felt she was blushing. Her heart was pounding. Beads of sweat formed on her forehead. The summer was becoming stifling, she thought. The scarf on her head meant to hide her fairness and her dark glasses could make her go unnoticed. Marion who was in a terrible state chose to leave her own state for Texas where her informed lover would join her. Could it be possible to turn so quickly from a 'stainless lamb' into a 'black sheep' in a flash !No ! that was not as simple as that ! And yet to save her love, Marion was moving forward.. Hell with those thorny scruples !

thank you violet quickly the rest !!

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de ariane6, postée le 01-02-2008 à 22:54:40 (S | E)
Hello Violet, this is my translation:

The die is cast, it's in the bag !
The model secretary, wearing a fresh flowery cotton dress with a starched round collar and mother-of-pearl buttons, was busy typing an insurance policy for a rich client. She was listening to the boss of the agency, Mr Harry, talking loudly on the other side of the partition to two rough men, who earlier on had annoyed her with their uncalled-for insinuations. Harry moved in a strange unpredictable way. He was always where he was not expected.When everything had calmed down, he went up to her and said breezily " Here are 40.000 dollars, my beauty ! The deal of the day ! Please deposit them in the bank for me, when you leave, alright ? And don't disappear with them! he said jokingly...
Stealthily, the idea began to grow. She had it there, the key to Sam's happiness and to hers too. A new world, life together, love forever...
She wrapped the huge amount in two pages of that day's newspaper and slid everything to the bottom of her beggar's bag, making it heavier. She needed less time than she could have imagined, to leave everything.
This man and his coarse humour,...this place,... this damned town...would never see her again ! She was already on the motorway of her fortune, when the "shadow of a doubt" cropped up. She felt herself blush. Her heart was beating wildly. Pearls of perspiration poured onto her forehead. The summer is sweltering, she thought. With her scarf on her head hiding her blonde hair, and with dark glasses, she could pass unnoticed.
Marion, in her state of confusion, decided to leave for another state... Texas, where her lover, once he knew, would join her.
Could it be possible to change so quickly from a little lamb into a black sheep ? In a flash ? No, No, It was not so easy !
Yet Marion carried on, for Sam, for his love... To the devil with old-fashioned morals !...

Thank you Violet !
What happens in the next episode ?
See you soon !

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de mamy40, postée le 02-02-2008 à 13:46:24 (S | E)

Dear Violet,
The dice are thrown (or " alea jacta est ") and the business " in the bag ".
The perfect secretary whose clear and flowery cotton dress was closed by nacreous buttons and a small starched
" Peter Pan collar " was occupied in typing an insurance contract for a rich client. She heard, on the other side of the partition, Mr. HARRY, the boss of the agency, chatting loudly with two vulgar men who had not failed to bother her a moment ago with their uncalled-for words. Harry had a funny unpredictable way of moving. He was always where was not expected !... In an instant, the quietness came back, he was by her, cheerful : " Here are 40,000 dollars my sweetie pie ! The business of the day ! A lot of thanks for deposing them for me in the bank when you leave, ok ? And do not run away with them ! he teased her.
Insidiously, the idea grew up. She held the key for Sam's happiness and as well as hers.
A new world ! Life together ! Love forever !
She wrapped up the huge sum into two sheets of the daily newspaper and slided the whole at the bottom of her shoulder bag, heavy now.She needed less time she would have imagined to give up everything.
That joyful man, these places, that damned town, would never see her again. She was already on the motorway to fortune when " the shadow of a doubt " penetrated over her. She left she was blushing. Her heart was pounding. Beads of sweat formed on her forehead. The summer was becoming stifling, she thought. Her scarf on her head meant to hide her fairness and her dark glasses could make her pass unnoticed. Marion, in her states (or States !) chose to leave her own State for Texas where her informed lover would join her.
Could it be possible to turn so quickly from gentle as a lamb into a " black sheep " ? In the twinkling of an eye ? No ! No ! It was not so simple !
Nevertheless, for Sam, for her lover, Marion was moving.... The devil take these inhibiting scruples !

Thank you Violet. Quel régal, une fois de plus mais.. il faut être bon en anglais et en français pour respecter, suivre tes nuances !
See you soon Dear Violet.

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de nick27, postée le 02-02-2008 à 15:24:10 (S | E)
Here's my suggestion.

The dice have been rolled and the thing's in the bag !

The perfect secretary whose fresh flowery cotton dress was fastened by pearly buttons and a small starched "claudine" collar was busy typing up an insurance contract for a wealthy customer. She heard from the other part of the wall, Mr. Harry, the company's boss, loudly talking with two rude men who hadn't missed the chance to annoy her before with their unappropiate allusions.
Harry had a funny way of moving around, impredictable. He was always there when no one expected him ! ... The silence came back after just a moment, he was next to her, happy - "here are $40,000, girl ! The bargain of the day ! I'd thank you very much if you could put them into the bank for me when you leave ok? ... and don't get away with them !" he said, teasing her.
Unexpectedly, the idea rose in her mind. She was holding the key to Sam's happiness as well as hers !
A new world ! Life together and love forever !

She wrapped up the huge amount of money in two pages of the daily paper and slided the whole down into her beggar's bag (? ) that was now heavier. It took her less time than she had thought to leave everything.
Those jovial men, those places, that damn city ... would never see her again ! Driving on the highway, she was on the road to the wealth when a sudden doubt ran across her mind. She felt she was blushing. Her heart was pounding. Her forehead was drenched with sweat. The air was sultry, she thought. Her scarf on her head to hide away her blondness and her sunglasses could make her pass unnoticed. Marion, all worked up, decides to leave... hers... to go to Texas where her warned known-by-no-one lover would join her. Was it possible for someone to change their life so drastically in just a blink of an eye ? No, no! It was impossible !

However, for Sam, for her lover, Marion was moving forward... The hell with these bulky scruples !

Thanks a lot for this exercise !

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Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de gee, postée le 04-02-2008 à 01:09:20 (S | E)
The die is cast. It’s in the bag.

Neatly togged up in her cotton dress fastened with pearly buttons and trimmed with paisleys and a starched schoolgirl collar, the model secretary was busy typewriting an insurance policy for a wealthy client. From beyond the partition she was hearing Mr. Harry, the agency’s boss, loudly uttering with two boorish men who earlier hadn’t fail to bother her with shocking innuendos.
Harry used to move around with uncanny manners, unpredictable he was. He used to be just there where he wasn’t expected to be! … In a short while, things calmed down yet, he was by her side, cheerfully dropping : "Here you are, 40.000 bucks, my dear! The deal of the day! Be so kind as to deposit it in the bank on my behalf when leaving, Okay?" He added teasing "Don’t run away with it, hey!"

A rising tide was hatching an idea. She had got hold of the key to Sam’s true happiness and to her own at the same time.
A new world was opening before both of them! Living together! Love forever and ever!

She wrapped up the huge sum into a couple of newspaper sheets and slipped it deep into her carryall that got from then on heavier. It took her less time than she ought ever have thought to drop everything. That beaming man, those premises, that damned town would never see her back! She was picturing herself yet riding high on the path to luck, when the shadow of a doubt crept on. She felt blushing. Her heart got pounding wildly. Beads of sweat spangled her forehead. "It’s stifling summer", she thought to herself. In her headscarf supposed to hide her fairness, in her dark glasses, she could definitely go unnoticed.
All fired up, Marion decided to leave her State and move to Texas where her lover, duly posted, would meet up with her.

Might it be one turn so quickly from little lamb to black sheep? In a jiffy? No, no! It wasn’t as easy as that!

However, for Sam, for her love, Marion was going ahead. To hell those constraining scruples!

Hell and damnation! Such scenario can’t be born in a kindness mind like Violet’s without an evil spell underlying. I suspected the Shamrock pub to be the big evil. Hence I sought advice from the old witch of Limerick. Right away I got this kind of limerick by email (The old witch is used to foretelling future and destiny by delivering limericks.)

There is a fairy upon the banks of river Orge
Who fiercely of her readers makes rise the gorge.
Handling secret
She does, Violet,
To entice, to puzzle, not to forge.

My reply to the old witch of Limerick:
Hi over there! Dull hag of Eire!
All you prattle is but drivel.
All that we knew from the first clue.
Just get to know that we bestow
admiration, esteem and love to Violet, the real witch of a writer, our enchantress.
You’ve been outdone, old witch of Limerick.
If you want to prove you be up to tell fortunes, tell us how the smells floating through the Shamrock crept into Violet’s spirit, what’s Marion destined for, lunacy, murder, death penalty, what else?

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de alice, postée le 05-02-2008 à 11:29:33 (S | E)
Bonjour Violet. Comme tu le dis, "les dés sont jetés", je ne change plus rien.

The die is cast and it's in the bag.

The perfect secretary whose fresh and flowered Cotton dress fastened with pearly button and a starched little Peter Pan collar was busy to type an insurance contract to a rich client . She was hearing from the other side of the partition, Mister Harry, the manager of the office, chattering noisily with two vulgar men who had not forgotten to bother her a moment ago, with their uncalled for hints. Harry had a strange way moving, unpredictable. He always was here, where he was not expected!... In a moment, calm come back, he was near her, cheerfully: - "Here are 40 000 dollars, sweetie! The deal of the day! Thanks to bank them from me, leaving, O.K. And don't make off with!" He teased her.

Silently, she had the idea to do it. She had found the key of Sam's happiness and hers. A new world! Life together! Love for even!

She wrapped the enormous amount of money in two pages of the daily and slided the whole in the bottom of her beggar's bag henceforth weighed. It took less time that she would have thought to leave everything.

That stupid-smiling man... those places... that damned town. She wouldn't see them. She always was on the motorway of the fortune when the shadow of a doubt was stealing. She felt her blushing. Her heart was pounding. The sweat stood out on her forehead. Summer became stifling, she thought. Her scarf on her head to hide her fairness, and her black glasses could have her passed unnoticed . Marion, beside herself, chosen to go to the Texas, where her lover, informed, would rejoin her.

Was it possible to change from the little lamb to the "black sheep"? In a flash? No! no!. It was not so easy! Nevertheless, for Sam, for her love, Marion was moving... hang those burdensome scruples.

Violet, bon courage pour corriger et merci de nous emmener dans cette histoire rocambolesque.

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de coferam, postée le 05-02-2008 à 14:24:28 (S | E)
Bonjour Violet91,

The die is cast and the deal 'in the bag'.

The model secretary whose the dress of fresh flowered cotton closes by pearlescent buttons and a small starched "claudine" collar was busy typing an insurance contract for a rich client. She heard on the other side of the dividing wall, Mr. Harry, the boss of the agency, chatting loudly with two rude men who had insisted him just before, with their insuitable allusions . Harry had a funny way of moving, unpredictable. He was always where we were not expected him!... In an instant, the calm is came back, he was next to her enjoyed: - "That's $ 40,000, my girlfriend ! The deal of the day ! Please drop them off at the bank for me, outgoing, okay? .. And do not leave with! " he teased.

In a muffled way, the idea germinated. She hold there, the key of Sam's happiness , as his own!
A new world! The life together! Love for ever!

She wrapped the huge sum in two pages of the daily newspaper and pouched the whole at the bottom of her travel bag, now weighted . That took her less time would have thought to leave everything . This man who laugh...these places .. this cursed city .. I did not meet more! She was already on the highway of the fortune, when "the shadow of a doubt" introduced . She felt becoming red. Her heart beat the chamade. The sweat formed on his forehead. The summer got stifling, she thought. Her scarf on her head to conceal her fairness and dark glasses could make her pass unnoticed. Marion, very restive, chose to leave .. hers .. for Texas, where her lover, warned, would catch up with her.

Could it be possible to change so quickly from a little lamb to a 'black sheep'? At a glance? No! No! It was not so easy!

Though for Sam, for her love, Marion progressed ... In hell, these bulky scruples! ..

Merci...et bonnes corrections !

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de lucile83, postée le 06-02-2008 à 22:00:36 (S | E)
Hello,
I did it, for you .... Here's my try:

The die is cast and the good deal in the bag…

The model secretary in a fresh and flowery cotton dress fastened with nacre buttons and a small starched Claudine collar was busy typing an insurance contract for a rich customer. She was hearing through the wall partition Mr.Harry, the boss of the agency, talk loudly with two coarse men who had not failed some time before to annoy her with their unsuitable remarks. Harry used to move in a funny way, quite unpredictable. He was always in the place one did not expect him to be….in a second, things being calm again, he was cheerfully near her..’Here are 40,000 dollars sweetie ! The deal of the day ! Thanks for depositing all that at the bank in my place, when you leave ok? And don’t go away with it !’ he teased her.

The idea came in an underhand manner. There she had, just there, the key for Sam’s happiness as well as hers!

A new world! The life together! Love forever!

She wrapped the huge amount of money in two sheets of the daily newspaper and slipped the whole thing into the bottom of her carry-all made heavy now. She spent less time than she could have thought on leaving everything.
That stupidly-smiling man..those places…that damned city…would never see her again!She was already on the highway of fortune when the shade of a doubt came through. She felt herself blush. Her heart was beating wildly. Her forehead was dropping with sweat. Summer was getting stuffy she thought. With her scarf on her head in order to hide her blondness and her dark glasses she had a chance to be unnoticed. Marion, being in a state, chose to leave… hers…and go to Texas where her lover, once informed, would join her.

Could that be possible to change the little lamb into the ‘black sheep’? In a flash? No ! No! It was not so easy!

For Sam however, for her love, Marion was going ahead…To hell with those awkward scruples !...

See you

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de woodyrun, postée le 07-02-2008 à 09:57:39 (S | E)
Hello Violet !

Here's my try

The dice is cast and it’s in the bag.

The model secretary whose fresh and flowery cotton dress fastened with pearlescent buttons and a little starched Peter Pan collar was busy typing an insurance contract for a wealthy customer. On the other side of the wall partition, she was hearing Mr Harry, the boss of the agency, talk loudly with two common men who, a few minutes ago, had not failed to bother her with their misplaced remarks.
Harry had a weird and unpredictable way to move. He was always to be found where he was not expected ! A minute later, everything being quiet again, he was by her side, saying lively “ Here are 40.000 dollars, dear, the deal of the day ! Please make a deposit at the bank on my behalf on your way out, will you?
And don’t run away with it, he teased her.

Secretely, the idea made its way. She was holding the cornerstone of sam’s happiness as well as hers
A new world ! Life together ! Love forever!

She wrapped up the enormous sum in two pages of the daily paper and slipped the whole at the bottom of her hence heavy bag. It took her less time than she would have thought to leave everything.

That grinning man......, those places............, that cursed city..... would never see her again
She already was on her highway to wealth when a doubt crept into her mind and cast a shadow. She felt herself blushing. Her heart was beating wildly, sweat was beading her forehead.
Summer was suffocating, she thought. Her scarf on her head to hide her fairness and her black glasses could make her pass unnoticed. Marion, in a terrible state, chose to leave hers for Texas where her lover, once aware, would meet her

Could a sweet lamb become a black sheep so quickly ? in a flash? No, no, it was not that simple!
Yet,for Sam, for his love, Marion was going on... To hell with those cumbersome scruples !

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de nefertiti, postée le 07-02-2008 à 15:40:44 (S | E)
Hello Violet91

The die is cast and it is in the bag.

The perfect secretary whose the flowered and fresh cotton dress was closed by pearly buttons and a little starched "Claudine" collar was typing an insurance contract for a wealthy customer. She heard, on the other side of the partition wall, Mr Harry, the agency's boss, chatting noisily with two vulgar men who had bothered her a moment earlier, with their uncalled-for remarks. Harry had a strange way of moving, unpredictable. He was always in a place where you did not think he was there ! In a moment, the quiet came back, he was near her, cheerful : "There are 40,000 dollars, my lovely girl ! The deal of the day ! Thank you to deposit them to the bank when you are going out, ok ? ... And do not leave with them !" he laughed.

She wrapped the enormous amount in two pages of the daily newspaper and put it in the bottom of her beggar's bag, now heavier. She needed less time she thought to leave everything. That beaming man, these places ... that damned city ... will never see her. She was already on the higway of the wealth, when "a shadow of a suspicion" arrived. She was feeling becoming red. Her heart was beatening wildly. The sweats stood out in beads on her forehead. The summer was stifling, she thought. Her scarf on the head to hide her blond hair and her dark glasses could pass her unnoticed. Marion, was all worked up, chose to leave ... hers ... to the Texas where her lover, well-informed, will meet her again.

Was it possible to pass from the little lamb to the "black sheep" ? In a wink ? No, no ! It was not so simple !

However, for Sam, for her love, Marion was moving forward ... Damned, these cumbersome scrupuls !

Thank you for that exercise !

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de pivoine91, postée le 07-02-2008 à 19:11:21 (S | E)

Hello dear teacher Violet !

That is my translation of "White goose and black underwears" (part four)

The die is cast ("alea jacta est" in Asterix and the Englih) and it is in the bag. The model secretary whose dress in springlike and flowery cotton was shut by mother-of-pearl buttons and a small starched Peter Pan collar was busy with type of an insurance conract for a rich customer. On the other side of the dividing wall, she heard Mr Harry, the manager of the agency, loudly chat with two crude men who before had insisted with their unsuitable allusions . Harry had a strange and particular manner when he moved along, an unforeseeable manner. He mas always there where he was not wait !...In an instant, thre reinstate repose, he was near her lighthearted : "There are 40,000 dollars, my lovely ! The bargain of this day ! Thanks to you to deposit them in the bank for me when you will go out, in agreement with me. And don't go away with them, tantalized he. Slowly, the idea rised. With that money, she hold the key of Sam's happiness and her. A new world ! The life together ! The love forever ! She wrapped the very important amount inside two pages of the daily newspaper and put it in the bottom of her grip, from now on weighted. She spent less time than planed to leave all (to take French leave), that smiling man....those places...that blasted town...would see her no more. She was yet driving on the motorway of the wealth when "the shadow of doubt" introduced. She felt turn red, her heart beat wildly. The sweat fored on her front. The summer became suffocating, she thought. Her foulard on her head to hide her fairness and her black glasses (as her underwear !) can make her discret. Marion, very distraught, chose to leave ...her state...to go to the Texas' where her lover, informed, would get together with her. Was it possible to pass so quickly from the condition of a gentle lamb to that of a black sheep (pour rester dans la couleur !). In a flash ! No ! No! It was not so easy ! However, for Sam, for her love, Marion went ahead...To Hell, those inhibiting scruples...

We are very impatient to know the end, happy end !!! we hope. Waiting, thanks for that interesting novel. See ou rather read you soon !

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de violette19, postée le 08-02-2008 à 11:47:49 (S | E)
Sorry to be ,once again, so late, Violet. I am struggling with big clouds, those of flu . I hope my test will not be too dark !

Thrown the dice! The "thing" is in the bag .

The model secretary,wearing a fresh and flowery cotton dress, fastened by pearly buttons and a small Claudine-collar, was kept busy with typing an insurance policy for a rich client . On the other side of the partition, she heard the boss of the agency, talking noisily with two vulgar men who just before didn't fail to importune her with their out of place allusions .
Harry had such an odd manner in moving,unpredictable . He was always where he was not waited for !... In an instant, once quietness back, he was near her, joking : Here are 40,000 dollars, my beauty ! The bargain of the day ! Thanks for depositing them for me at the bank,when you go out, all right ?..And don't leave with !

Insidiously, the idea came up .Here she was hanging Sam's happiness point as herself's ! A new world ! Life together ! Love for ever !

She wrapped the huge amount into two pages of the daily newspaper and slipped the whole into the bottom of her wallett-bag, from now on heavier . She needed less time than she would have believed for leaving all .

That laughing man,those places, that damned town would nevermore see her ! She was already on the fortune expressway when the "shadow of a doubt" crept of .
She felt flushing . Her heart was beating a parley . Sweat was beading on her forehead . Summer was going stifling, she thought .Her scarf on her head to hide her fairness and her dark glasses could let her unnoticed . Marion,beside herself,decided to leave her own state .. for Texas where her lover ,warned, would join her .

Was it possible a little lamb become a "black sheep" ? In the twinkling of an eye ? No! No! That wasn't so easy !

Nevertheless,for Sam,for her love, Marion was going forwards .. To hell with those cumbersome scruples !

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de violet91, postée le 08-02-2008 à 14:49:00 (S | E)
Et Pénélope reprend , car toute sa première toile est partie .sur la toile " au vent mauvais "!

Bonjour à tous ,chers amis qui suivez avec zèle l'"odyssée" de Marion et comme pour vos oeuvres. Tout le monde n'écrivant pas couramment l'Anglais et faisant de beaux efforts..ils seront récompensés et j'entrerai dans le détail. Merci de patienter. Et,puis ,vous pourrez peut-être découvrir ou contester qqch. "C'est reparti"! (sens figuré).

1 ) "The die is cast" est la traduction littérale d'"Alea jacta est" de César franchissant le Rubicon en 49 B.C (merci marie11).Cast implique le sort,le destin, ce qui échappe désormais.
Thrown the dice ou the dice are thrown :plutôt au casino ,when you gamble.

2) Model, ideal, perfect = " a gem" = une perle . "Nobody's perfect"(a movie.1968)a naval comedy adapted from "The Crows of Edwina Hill by Bosworth.

3 ) Whose dress= relatif déterminatif.0 article : il est contenu. Who's était la forme ancienne génitive de who (comme whom : accusatif).

4 ) To fasten ("t" muet= castle,listen,often,whistle,mustn't.).with (cplt de moyen )."Fasten your (safety) belts !" Accrochons -nous bien! Nous suivons Marion!

5 ) Nacre: elle n'a pas bcp de moyens.: mother-of pearl buttons: seraient trop chers pour elle. Nacreous : aspect (pt de vue)

6 ) Maintenant question de boutons: --a button(to button up,to press))# a stud (collar),a press stud # cufflinks (manchettes)# a bud (de fleur)( a rosebud:que c'est joli l'Anglais !)# a spot, a pimple : direction le dermato !).

7 ) small (size )# little (size and lovely)comme une petite fille bien sage.

8 ) "Notre" "Claudine "(1900) de "notre " Colette (1873.1954)n'était pas très sage ,mais elle a commencé à l'école comme schoolgirl. "Peter Pan.".avez-vous trouvé certains. Il a un petit col rond ? Je connais la "Wendy House", maison miniaturisée pour les jeux d'enfants au jardin..De toute façon ,Marion ne souffre pas du tout du complexe de Peter Pan !..(refus de grandir).

9 )Rude, coarse (comme les "gros" mots) ,crude..= uncouth. (ne dites jamais "deux" avec votre majeur et index !Vous reproduisez le très "uncouth" geste des archers de la "Hundred years War" à chaque soldat français abattu! Utilisez l'index et le pouce..ou alors faites le V de la victoire ,avec index et majeur ,dans l'autre sens . Vous éviterez des réflexions..

10 ) An insurance policy ou contract. Policy, hors contexte peut être ambigu.(politique d'un tel..). "The Draughtsman's Contract"("Meurtre dans un jardin anglais") by British Peter Greenaway (1984).Film très difficile : l'artiste peut-il avoir la prétention de reproduire la réalité? "For French people who always think ! ",they said in England, when it came out. Un tantinet valorisant ou moqueur ?

11 ) A partition :une cloison, séparation (India),démembrement # a piece of music. Moins épais que " wall".

12 ) Capacité momentanée et perception : aux.modal :can,could. Marion n'est ni sourde ni folle (juste follement amoureuse ):elle entend tout: la conversation, les rires ,les voitures dehors,l'avion qui passe ..sa collègue qui se coupe les ongles ! Tous les bruits parasites ,si "she heard".# I can see, I can feel,I can hear,I can taste , I can smell. Vos sens en éveil!

13 ) To annoy :fâcher,ennuyer,importuner. To upset= to vex. To bother :prendre la peine ,s'ennuyer un peu à faire qqch. On trouve plus souvent " Don't bother" Ne va pas te tracasser avec cela!

14 ) Uncalled-for = misplaced .Déplacées.

15 ) A remark :ils sont vulgaires et un peu "obsédés", mais pas méchants = innuendo (gee,il faut nous expliquer l'origine de ce mot ).Allusions me semble trop vaporeux pour cette paire!

16 ) Imprévisible :littéralement : unpredictable (on ne l'aurait pas dit ,plutôt que vu , comme l'avenir).

Je vois "ma peau de chagrin" diminuer dangereusement..je ne veux pas me chagriner de nouveau.."à la fin de l'envoi, "j'envoie!

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de violet91, postée le 08-02-2008 à 16:00:28 (S | E)
Suite n°2 pour "l'échappée belle" .

17)To wait for (= guetter):attendre "bêtement"; # to expect ,expected ([tid] comme wanted): expecto, espero avec un certain espoir en principe :a nice phonecall, a friend's visit, a love letter, a good result ,a baby ;twins,triplets (il ne fallait pas la manquer ,celle-là.Hello ariane et lakata ).

18) Cheerful,joyful,easy-going, good-tempered: "a jolly good fellow!"= mirthful + pride and..satisfaction!"L'homme qui rit",c'est ailleurs!

19 )Les milliers en British: la virgule ! 40,000 dollars (ou pounds in GB).Les "bucks"..c'est du "slang" : argot . Aux US, il existe une "creditbuxx card ":pr ados les parents load and check!)

20 ) Ma belle,té! Pt de vue !Il n'est pas insensible au(x) charme(s) de Marion: Beauty, pretty girl, baby,..s'il est paternaliste : sweetie, love et cockney : sweetie pie, duckie.

21 ) Négocier : to deal,dealt,dealt (pour les réfractaires aux v.irrég.J'en connais) The deal: le super contrat. The bargain :la promo du jour .( Discount)
Business: mot générique pour les affaires = "Mind your own business" (and not your onions) "Mêle-toi de tes affaires!"

22 )Sub.temporelle avec principale au futur : chaque chose en son temps: il faut d'abord qu'elle"débauche",pour pouvoir aller à la banque. When,as soon as ,as + present, p.principale au futur. Si while + Be+BV-ing au present/
"Darling! I'll cook your dinner ,while you are having a nice bath !"
I'll write to you, when I am in England.

23 ) Away : escapade, évasion, disparition. "Traditions( good Jersey cream tea) are dying away "."Go away !""Fiche-moi la paix !" (pardon me)

24) Impératif emphatique : résurgence du "you". Un peu relâché et familier (menaçant ou taquin) ."Don't you run away with it!" "Don't you speak to me on that tone !"

25 ) To creep,crept,crept (pour ceux qui.!):ramper,s'insinuer .A creeping plant (qu'elle monte ou descende)like "ivy",clematis, Virginia creeper. like a soldier or a snake.to creep up "ça monte !".

26 ) To hold,held ,held (pr cx qui..):tenir serré.S'accrocher.(tendrement 'i want to hold your hand!"The beatles", entr'autres .Ou pour ne pas tomber : "Hold your breath! Hold the line! Hold it! (Accroche-toi..on ne dit pas "Jeannot",on le pense).

27 ) To wrap,wrapped..in colourful papers :faire un paquet -cadeau.

28 ) A page " Front page"(La "une"). A sheet[shi:t] : une feuille de papier.

29 ) Daily, weekly, monthly, yearly.

30 ) Glisser :pt de vue :to slip (périlleux.on a banana skin),slipped.ou to slide ,slid,slidden (pr cx qui...!)avec intention(etpatiner ,même).
Les deux sont corrects. mais ..
le facteur sonnant 2 fois ou pas ,slips" the letters under the door mais aussi.."mind the floor : it is slippery !" " Put on your slippers "(chaussons ) -feutres/patins à l'origine..chez les gens TRES méticuleux ,autrefois.

31) An enormous amount :évitez les mots français :a huge amount,sum.

32 ) To think (90%)# to believe (50%).

33 )Hilarious= mirthful .

34) That,those :tjrs démonstr.de l'éloigné (txte au passé) et/ou du péjoratif . That man : ce "type"!

35) A motorway (U.K: M1,M2,M3..)# a highway : en route pour Dallas! "A cursed town"...

36 ) Fortune : à prendre dans les deux sens. Wealth and destiny.

37 ) The shade= the shadow.

38) To blush(BV+ing)("ça" monte encore)rougir deconfusion(notre petite oie blanche ).De honte "Shame on you, marion !" .# to flush (efforts physiques ). # to redden (sky, leaves,paintings). Reddish (pas raddish!):rougeâtre.Nuance un peu péjorative comme notre suffixe.

39 ) Heart (pas" hart "le cerf, ni hearth :le coeur de la cheminée :l'âtre). To beat,beat,beaten (pr cx qui..)wildly = to throb,throbbed (cf."le coeur révélateur": "The tell-tale-heart" by great American Edgar Allan Poe (1809.1849)" Tales of mystery and imagination " .

40 ) A bead of sweat: une perle de sueur.(to drop, to weep,wept,wept (pr cx qui..) Whoops !

J'envoie !

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Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de violet91, postée le 08-02-2008 à 16:29:53 (S | E)
I take off my virtual hat to your patience. Thank you a 1,000 times !

42 ) A chance* :a possibility, an opportunity( hazard,fate,destiny) # Good luck # Hard luck." ( on ne s'y attendait pas ,dis donc ! Les gens (pas nous, pas moi ) disent (: "pas de bol").

43 ) A brow (an eyebrow or two,by the way : les sourcils): un front/Foreheadbefore-head).

44 ) Cacher : to hide,hid, hidden (tjrs pour ceux qui.):plutôt neutre . D'ailleurs ,si l'on jouait à "Hide and seek" ? Dissimuler (à dessein!) to conceal.

45) A scarf (pl.scarves) (Fr/une écharpe) un foulard.

46 ) Modal de la possibilité (50%): can comme ne ..pas , could ,comme ne ..pas. Was it possible that..?

47 ) Question de métamorphose : to change or turn into.

48 ) A "sweet lamb",l'agneau innocent # a black sheep (l'Anglais ne dit pas si c'est un ou une "brebis" galeuse". Remarquez les couleurs. To be astray: être dans l'errance ,égaré.
A stray-cat: un chat de gouttière qui aime sa liberté!

49 ) It is not so easy = it is not THAT easy, you know. C'est plus "colloquial",( langage parlé).Marion ne sort pas de Harvard..

50 ) Outils de liaison(sg!) :Yet,nevertheless,still ,however,but... pourtant,néanmoins.( Oserai-je ? Comme disait le Général de Gaulle )Avec mon plus grand respect, mon Général !

51 ) Marion est absolutely amoureuse..je ne suis toujours pas sûre de Sam...Elle donnerait tout pour son bonheur (à lui: les dollars par ex ,sa vie):for her love ,for her love's sake..je ne l'imagine pas ne concevoir que l'amour qu'il lui apporte. Pt de vue . Il y a des romantiques..et des égocentriques !

52 ) Burden: un fardeau (to bear,bore,born(e)..pour ceux qui...)= burdensome scruples ou cumbersome scruples.

Et,voilà,mes p'tits mignons..vous avez résisté (moi aussi,difficilement) .

En partance pour "la " bêtise!...

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Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de violet91, postée le 08-02-2008 à 17:25:01 (S | E)
At last..

THE DIE IS CAST AND THE DEAL IN THE BAG !

The perfect secretary whose fresh flowery cotton dress fastened with nacreous buttons and a little starched Claudine collar , was busy typewriting an insurance contract for a rich customer. She could hear, from the other side of the partition, Mr Harry, the agency's boss, talking loudly with two uncouth men who had not missed the opportunity ,a minute before, of annoying her with their uncalled-for (if not filthy) remarks. Harry had a funny way of moving about, unpredictably. All of a sudden, he could be right where he was not expected. In an instant, the place being quiet again, he was near her and said cheerfully :-" Here you are, pretty girl ! 40,000 dollars! (forty-thousand). The deal of the day ! Thanks for going to the bank and deposit them on my behalf,as you leave, all right? ....and don't you run away with them ,love !" He added teasing her .

Slowly, as a dull pain , the idea crept up. She was now holding the key to Sam's happiness, as well as hers .
A new world ! Life together ! Love forever !

She wrapped the huge amount of money in two pages of the daily newspaper and slid the lot down the bottom of her beggar's bag (shoulder bag) which had got heavier from now on. That mirthful man..those places..that cursed city...would never see her again !.It took her less time than she would have thought to leave everything behind .
She was already on her highway to fortune when the shadow of a doubt invaded her. She felt herself blushing. Her heart was throbbing. Beads of sweat dropped on her forehead . Summer was getting stifling ,she thought . With her scarf on , concealing (hiding)her blonde hair and wearing (dark )sunglasses , she might well pass unnoticed. Marion, in such a state..left ..hers.. heading to Texas , where her lover, once informed ,would join her.

Was it that simple for a sweet little lamb to turn into a black sheep ? In the wink of an eye ? Oh! No! It was not !

Yet, for Sam, for the love of her life, Marion was driving ahead.. To Hell with those burdensome scruples !

et de vos exploits et de votre lecture.

Marion fera-telle le bon choix..? See you with enthusiasm !

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Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de violette19, postée le 08-02-2008 à 17:38:05 (S | E)
Thank you very much,Violet , for such a good work !

Violette 19

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de violet91, postée le 08-02-2008 à 21:58:29 (S | E)

It is very kind of you. I do hope you will soon get better . Love.violet

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de mamy40, postée le 11-02-2008 à 13:55:15 (S | E)

Oui merci chère Violet de la précision de ta correction ! Que de travail ! Que d'humour ! Même le dermato est intervenu ! Ah ! Ah !!!!
Merci d'être si précise dans tes propositions, merci de nous " instruire ".
J'espère que le dernier épisode ne sera pas trop triste car je crains le pire. Poor Marion ! Poor Apau qui va devoir écrire cette fin....
Have a good day and read you soon.

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de violet91, postée le 11-02-2008 à 14:30:27 (S | E)

Thank you,dear apau for so lovely congratulations. I am glad you enjoy humour.
Ne crains pas le pire . D'abord ..Marion..c'est comme Eve ! Elle a volé plus que "l'orange du marchand" !...Et,puis,elle passera Noël avec ses enfants ,la prochaine fois à boire du chocolat chaud pendant sept jours. "On disait que ce serait du cinéma !"

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de TravisKidd, postée le 11-02-2008 à 16:37:30 (S | E)
The die is cast and the money "in the bag".

The model secretary whose fresh and flowery cotton dress was closed with nacre buttons and a little starched "claudine" collar was busy typing up an insurance contract for a rich client. On the other side of the wall she heard Mr. Harry, the boss of the firm, chatter noisily with two "common men" who had the nerve to bother him very soon , with their misplaced allusions. Harry had a funny way of getting around without being noticed. He was always where he wasn't expected to be! In an instant, calm restored, he was near her, playfully: "Here's 40,000 dollars, my sweet! The money for the day! Please deposit it in the bank for me on your way out, OK? And don't walk off with it!" he teased.

The underhanded idea popped up. She had, there in her hands, the key to Sam's happiness, as well as her own! A new world! A life together! Love forever and ever!

She wrapped the enormous sum in two daily newspaper pages and slid the whole of it to the bottom of her purse (je ne trouve pas une traduction de "besace"), now weighed down by it. It took her less time than she would have ever believed to leave everything.

This hilarious man, these places, this cursed city ..wouldn't see her anymore! She was already on the highway to riches, when "the shadow of a doubt" came to her. She felt herself blush. Her heart beat wildly. Sweat formed on her forehead. The summer heat was sweltering, she thought. Her headscarf to hide her blondness and her dark glasses could help her pass unnoticed. Marion, in all her states, chose to leave her own for Texas, where her lover, notified, would join her.

Could it be that she went so quickly from a little lamb to a "black sheep"? In the blink of an eye? No! No! It wasn't that simple!

Yet, for Sam, for her love, Marion pressed on. To hell with these cumbersome inhibitions!

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de maya92, postée le 13-02-2008 à 19:32:47 (S | E)
a single word will be enough : BRAVO

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de maya92, postée le 13-02-2008 à 19:35:25 (S | E)
No, one more : THANKS

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de gee, postée le 15-02-2008 à 22:38:07 (S | E)
Some might think I am fighting yesterday’s battles by coming so late after the prize giving day when results, scores, good and bad points were allotted and, most of all, the model translation was released. If you think so (that I’m fighting yesterday’s battles), you are wrong. The exhaustive explanations Violet delivered about so many details of the text are so useful for learners of my kind that I needed much time to assimilate those notions. That’s stuff for several weeks reading and reading again, repeating…
Not only have I got to know a lot of new words, but merely have I honed umpteen unclear ideas that I was toying with in my mind.

Moreover I decided to learn by heart some excerpts in order to make exemplary expressions creep up into my everyday speech. If you want to get fluent that’s a trick I can pass on to you. First of all think you are a squirrel. If need be, concentrate intensely until you feel like a squirrel which could feel like some hazelnuts. Pass over the hazelnuts and right up step into the squirrel cage to make it rotate for two full minutes with saying again and again “Slowly, as a dull pain , the idea crept up.” or “in a wink of an eye” or “Harry had a funny way of moving about”. With some training you might be able to make it with the second sentence “She could hear, from the other side of the partition, Mr Harry, the agency's boss, talking loudly with two uncouth men who had not missed the opportunity, a minute before, of annoying her with their uncalled-for remarks.”

Dear Violet, as you take me personally to task on #15 with “innuendo”, what could I say? Without any spots on my face, I of course agree with the shade of meaning you point out there. “Innuendo” comes from Latin “in – nuere” akin to Greek “neuein” (to think, to conceive; to be wise; to mean). There are somehow Gods hidden behind “neueo/neuein”. Nuere (L) > to nod. Innuere (L) > to hint. As a result an innuendo is something like an oblique allusion, a hint, an insinuation, a veiled or equivocal reflection. Making innuendos (or innuendoes) is necessary the fact of clever people of the upper classes. Two UNCOUTH men talking LOUDLY, annoying the personal assistant or secretary of a CEO, couldn’t fail to make uncalled-for remarks.

As usual I enjoyed your 4th episode. I won’t tell you that I thank you, Violet, so bored you must be by so many people telling you “thank you, Violet”. I just figure out that it must be boring, for I for one have never lived such a position. But I know that your heart is as large as a good Samaritan’s and your mind enough refined to guess that mine is grateful to you without being necessary to tell it.

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de violet91, postée le 15-02-2008 à 22:53:20 (S | E)

I really don't know what to say,gee. Thank you anyway for congratulating my long corrections. I've always considered them as important as the text itself...which is not a "model" , but my suggestion.
I had to look up "innuendos" in the dictionary, having never heard the word in GB.or overhere when hearing and working at English. I checked and saw :nasty remarks. The two men were not that kind of men...

I never feel bored with thanks ,when it is sincere and above all, if I understand I have been able to help and teach a few things. See you...

Réponse: oie blanche, dessous noirs 4.Thème de gee, postée le 16-02-2008 à 13:22:54 (S | E)
Quelqu'un m'a dit: qu'est-ce que peut bien faire ici cette histoire de cage d'écureuil? (dont je parlais dans mon dernier message.)
C'est ma façon personnelle d'acquérir des tournures typiques de la langue.
As the squirrel makes the cage rotate, it's by rote that I say again and again the same expression as to make it automatically come in my everyday speech.
Je pense que la qualité de l'écriture de Violet vaut la peine d'y trouver des expressions à acquérir et automatiser, si ce n'est peut-être certains termes très littéraires comme mirthful qu'il est bon de connaître mais qu'on n'emploiera pas tous les jours. C'est donc une façon pour moi de profiter de ces textes et d'améliorer mon style. J'en ai parlé parce que je pensais que cela pouvait donner des idées à certains.

May I take the liberty to come back to some correcting tips?

#9 additional notice «…ne dites jamais "deux" avec votre majeur et index! Vous reproduisez le très "uncouth" geste des archers de la "Hundred years War" à chaque soldat français abattu! Utilisez l'index et le pouce.. ou alors faites le V de la victoire, avec index et majeur, dans l'autre sens. Vous éviterez des réflexions.»

That reminds me what happened to me a long time ago. It was in Cork. I had met a young woman that I had taken out to grab a drink in a pub (pubs were already open to women in Ireland at that time). I wanted to know if we could order tea for two. I was gibbering a lot at that time, my English being bad and I mimed more than I spoke. So, with an asking nod to her, I raised my middle and forefinger. She stared at me, pulled a face and ran away. Up until now, I had never understood what for? From now on, thank to Violet’s Oie blanche… I will no longer use the middle finger to say 2 but rather the thumb and index.
Moreover I wonder whether the uncouth gesture inherited from the Hundred Years’ War is not equivalent across the channel to the continental raising of middle finger, rest of fist bound, with a wee move of the forearm from bottom up. So uncouth!!

That information Violet handed out makes me think that we would learn more about body language because gestures are culturally coded and are not the same on the continent, across the channel, in the States or Australia. As this outstanding anglaisfacile site provides video programs I would suggest that were released some lessons with pictures teaching gestures associated to the talk. That should be quite useful to both newbies in English language and to old people like me who are getting deaf.

#28 « A page " Front page"(La "une"). A sheet [shi:t] : une feuille de papier. »
A page is a leaf, made of a sheet of paper, but more commonly a single side of one leaf, since they are most often numbered. Wrapping the cash in two pages - two faces of a leaf/sheet - is somehow a metonymy. Why not carry the metonymy a bit further? To my mind, Marion wrapped the huge amount of money in the obituaries of the daily newspaper.
This personal opinion is just for my own pleasure’s sake because I am egocentric.

Thank you to everybody sharing Violet's story.

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