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Message de perfect posté le 16-12-2020 à 19:29:56 (S | E | F)
Hello,
Pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger ce nouveau résumé s'il vous plaît ?
Marc joins surprisely the Command school in order to finish his training : he's definitely the leader of his own team (the members are the most important one he meets during his training at the Battle School) and will make some war simulations against the Monsters. Colonel Johnson pledges to make him the chief of his own army if he manages to win the simulations (increasingly more complex). Like always, his different strategies work wonderfully.
It's the final one, very complex but Marc and his team are successful and manage to destroy the Monsers and their planet. Colonel Johnson congrates him and eventually reveals the truth : this simulation was not one, this was a real battle.
For Marc, this is catastrophic, he made a xenocide because no more Monsters are alive (and it was not sure that they want the human planet being destroyed.). He decided not to come back in Earth
Just after that, he discovers an alien larva on the outpost from which he led the campaign. This Monsters (and his larva) is the only one alive because he wasn't at his natal planet. Marc realizes that the war broke out as a result of a tragic misunderstanding so Marc decided, in reparation for his crime, to take advantage of his rank of admiral to explore space and find a new planet for the larva, in order to recreate the Monster's race.
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 16-12-2020 19:32
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Message de perfect posté le 16-12-2020 à 19:29:56 (S | E | F)
Hello,
Pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger ce nouveau résumé s'il vous plaît ?
Marc joins surprisely the Command school in order to finish his training : he's definitely the leader of his own team (the members are the most important one he meets during his training at the Battle School) and will make some war simulations against the Monsters. Colonel Johnson pledges to make him the chief of his own army if he manages to win the simulations (increasingly more complex). Like always, his different strategies work wonderfully.
It's the final one, very complex but Marc and his team are successful and manage to destroy the Monsers and their planet. Colonel Johnson congrates him and eventually reveals the truth : this simulation was not one, this was a real battle.
For Marc, this is catastrophic, he made a xenocide because no more Monsters are alive (and it was not sure that they want the human planet being destroyed.). He decided not to come back in Earth
Just after that, he discovers an alien larva on the outpost from which he led the campaign. This Monsters (and his larva) is the only one alive because he wasn't at his natal planet. Marc realizes that the war broke out as a result of a tragic misunderstanding so Marc decided, in reparation for his crime, to take advantage of his rank of admiral to explore space and find a new planet for the larva, in order to recreate the Monster's race.
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 16-12-2020 19:32
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Réponse : Monsters /Correction de gerondif, postée le 16-12-2020 à 23:14:28 (S | E)
Bonsoir
Erreurs en bleu
Marc joins surprisely(orthographe et position) the Command school in order to finish his training : he's definitely the leader of his own team (the members are the most important one(pluriel) he meets during his training at the Battle School) and will make some war simulations against the Monsters. Colonel Johnson pledges to make him the chief of his own army if he manages to win the simulations (increasingly more complex). Like always(plutôt as usual), his different strategies work wonderfully.
It's the final one, a very complex one but Marc and his team are successful and manage to destroy the Monsters and their planet. Colonel Johnson congrates(manque une syllabe) him and eventually reveals the truth : this simulation was not one, this was a real battle.
For Marc, this is catastrophic, he made a xenocide (genocide ?) because no more Monsters are alive(construction inadequate : There are no monsters left alive) (and it was(plutôt is) not sure that they wanted(oui, il faut parler de leur volonté au passé vu qu'ils sont tous morts) the human planet (being) destroyed.). He decided(présent) not to come back in(déplacement !) Earth
Just after that, he discovers an alien larva on the outpost from which he led the campaign. This Monsters(pluriel??) (and his larva) is the only one alive because he wasn't at his natal planet. Marc realizes that the war broke out as a result of a tragic misunderstanding so Marc decided(présent), in reparation for (to make amends for) his crime, to take advantage of his rank of admiral to explore space and find a new planet for the larva, in order to recreate the Monster's race.
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