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Message de mrnch posté le 28-10-2019 à 19:15:49 (S | E | F)
Bonjour
j'ai écrit un texte pour un oral mais j'aimerais avoir une correction s'il vous plait afin d'éviter les erreurs.
Intro : born in the usa
Born in the USA is a song written and performed by Bruce Springsteen. It was published on the 4th June 1984. on the album of the same name. It was one of the greatest successes in the last century. This song became gold disk.
présentation chanteur
Bruce Frederick Joseph Springsteen was born on 29th September 1949 in New Jersey in USA. He is singer, songwriter and musician. He’s fan of Elvis Presley and Bob Dylan.
He was member of the group’s E Street Band. His first album with his group was “Greetings from Asbury Park” in 1973. His first solo album was Nebraska in 1982.
Chanteur engagé:
In 1979, Springsteen participated in a demonstration against the use of nuclear power.
Moreover, in 1988, Springsteen played in East Germany. At the end of the concert he said in german “ I’m not here for or against any government. I came to play rock’n’roll for you East Berliners in the hope that one day all the barriers will be torn down.”
In addition, during the war in Iraq, bruce said “ I sang this song, to denounce the consequences of the Vietnam War, today i sing Born in the Usa for the peace.
So we can say that Bruce Springsteen is a very engaged singer.
Le son et son contexte : RETOUR DES VETERANS
This song was created for the movie “born in the usa” from paul schrader.
At the beginning, the song’s name was “Vietnam” but Paul schrader asked to rename the song by “Born in the USA” which was the name of his movie.
Born in the USA speaks about the return of American soldiers to their country after the Vietnam War. Bruce wrote the song in 1981, 6 years after the end of the war in vietnam. This war lasted 6 years and 57 000 american soldiers were killed. American men were obligated to go at the war, they didn’t have a choice.
The song presents a veteran as a tragic figure alienated upon his return from the war.
Besides, “Born in the Usa” is a tribute for one of his friend Bart Haynes who was the drummer in his first band “The Castiles”. Bruce Springsteen had motorbike crash at the age of 19, since his crash he limps, so Springsteen was invalid to participate at the war.
The album “Born is the Usa” was released in 1984 which was an election year. The song Born in the Usa was used in 1984 by Ronald Reagan. He congratulated Springsteen for his patriotisme. In addition, Ronald Reagan used the song as hymn for his election campaign.
In reality, lyrics of the song are a criticism of the American model and liberalism. Born in the USA was not a declaration of love for his country.
Merci d'avance 😀
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Modifié par lucile83 le 28-10-2019 20:50
Message de mrnch posté le 28-10-2019 à 19:15:49 (S | E | F)
Bonjour
j'ai écrit un texte pour un oral mais j'aimerais avoir une correction s'il vous plait afin d'éviter les erreurs.
Intro : born in the usa
Born in the USA is a song written and performed by Bruce Springsteen. It was published on the 4th June 1984. on the album of the same name. It was one of the greatest successes in the last century. This song became gold disk.
présentation chanteur
Bruce Frederick Joseph Springsteen was born on 29th September 1949 in New Jersey in USA. He is singer, songwriter and musician. He’s fan of Elvis Presley and Bob Dylan.
He was member of the group’s E Street Band. His first album with his group was “Greetings from Asbury Park” in 1973. His first solo album was Nebraska in 1982.
Chanteur engagé:
In 1979, Springsteen participated in a demonstration against the use of nuclear power.
Moreover, in 1988, Springsteen played in East Germany. At the end of the concert he said in german “ I’m not here for or against any government. I came to play rock’n’roll for you East Berliners in the hope that one day all the barriers will be torn down.”
In addition, during the war in Iraq, bruce said “ I sang this song, to denounce the consequences of the Vietnam War, today i sing Born in the Usa for the peace.
So we can say that Bruce Springsteen is a very engaged singer.
Le son et son contexte : RETOUR DES VETERANS
This song was created for the movie “born in the usa” from paul schrader.
At the beginning, the song’s name was “Vietnam” but Paul schrader asked to rename the song by “Born in the USA” which was the name of his movie.
Born in the USA speaks about the return of American soldiers to their country after the Vietnam War. Bruce wrote the song in 1981, 6 years after the end of the war in vietnam. This war lasted 6 years and 57 000 american soldiers were killed. American men were obligated to go at the war, they didn’t have a choice.
The song presents a veteran as a tragic figure alienated upon his return from the war.
Besides, “Born in the Usa” is a tribute for one of his friend Bart Haynes who was the drummer in his first band “The Castiles”. Bruce Springsteen had motorbike crash at the age of 19, since his crash he limps, so Springsteen was invalid to participate at the war.
The album “Born is the Usa” was released in 1984 which was an election year. The song Born in the Usa was used in 1984 by Ronald Reagan. He congratulated Springsteen for his patriotisme. In addition, Ronald Reagan used the song as hymn for his election campaign.
In reality, lyrics of the song are a criticism of the American model and liberalism. Born in the USA was not a declaration of love for his country.
Merci d'avance 😀
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Modifié par lucile83 le 28-10-2019 20:50
Réponse : Correction/born in the USA de gerondif, postée le 28-10-2019 à 20:29:45 (S | E)
Bonjour
erreurs en bleu
Intro : born in the usa (majuscules)
Born in the USA is a song written and performed by Bruce Springsteen. It was published on the 4th of June 1984, on the album of the same name. It was one of the greatest successes in the last century. This song became a gold disk(serait un outil couteux au lancer du disque ! a golden record).
présentation chanteur
Bruce Frederick Joseph Springsteen was born on the 29th of September 1949 in New Jersey in the USA. He is a singer, a songwriter and a musician. He’s a fan of Elvis Presley and Bob Dylan.
He was a member of the group’s E Street Band. His first album with his group was “Greetings from Asbury Park” in 1973. His first solo album was Nebraska in 1982.
Chanteur engagé:
In 1979, Springsteen participated in (took part in) a demonstration against the use of nuclear power.
Moreover, in 1988, Springsteen played in East Germany. At the end of the concert he said in german “ I’m not here for or against any government. I came to play rock’n’roll for you East Berliners in the hope that one day all the barriers will be torn down.”
In addition, during the war in Iraq, bruce said “ I sang this song, to denounce the consequences of the Vietnam War, today I sing Born in the Usa for the(à ôter) peace.
So we can say that Bruce Springsteen is a very engaged singer.
Le son et son contexte : RETOUR DES VETERANS
This song was created for the movie “born in the usa”(majuscules) from paul schrader.
At the beginning, the song’s name was “Vietnam” but Paul Schrader asked to rename the song(the song to be renamed)
Born in the USA speaks is about the return of American soldiers to their country after the Vietnam War. Bruce wrote the song in 1981, 6 years after the end of the war in vietnam. This war lasted 6 years and 57 000 american soldiers were killed. American men were obligated to(horreur ! had to) go at the war, they didn’t have a choice.
The song presents a veteran as a tragic figure alienated upon his return from the war.
Besides, “Born in the Usa” is a tribute for one of his friends Bart Haynes who was the drummer in his first band “The Castiles”. Bruce Springsteen had a motorbike crash at the age of 19, since his crash he limps(present perfect continuous avec depuis, since), so Springsteen was an invalid to and couldn't be drafted into the army.
The album “Born is the Usa” was released in 1984 which was an election year. The song Born in the Usa was used in 1984 by Ronald Reagan. He congratulated Springsteen for his patriotism. In addition, Ronald Reagan used the song as a hymn for his election campaign.
In reality, the lyrics of the song are a criticism of the American model and liberalism. Born in the USA was not a declaration of love for his country.
Réponse : Correction/born in the USA de mrnch, postée le 28-10-2019 à 21:16:15 (S | E)
Bonsoir merci beaucoup pour votre correction !
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